by NTRmaster
this is the most ridiculous, childish crap I've ever scanned... yes I said scanned because no one with an IQ over 50 would waste their time reading this. No one on this entire planet, not one person out of 6 billion has ever, in the entire history of the human race acted anywhere even remotely like this, so where does a fucking loser like you decide that this is EROTIC??? NTRMaster... we're laughing at you! you get that don't you? we're laughing at what a fucked-up, sad, pathetic ass wipe you are. You've never been in a fight in your life have you? You a fat, middle aged loser who hasn't been laid in decades... let me guess terrance is SUPERMAN! he fucks around with people because when they pull out a gun and send a bullit thru his brain,... he won't die right? Until you can write a story that comes across like you're an adult, and acutally live in the real world, DON'T POST!
NO redeeming quality.
Good interesting story! Which is crying out for a second chapter. The writing was good and easy to read. I didn't see any spelling mistakes although I wasn't looking out for any.
don't take any notice of these jerks who's only joy in life is to run the author down.
carry on writing
I usually not comment on shitstories like this one, just have to say this was the worst one of thousands of stories i read so far here
You just wrote the worst story I ever read, that was fucking great, thanks. Ha Ha Ha Ha Ha!
Unbelievable and pathetic. Breaking down and letting himself be locked in a dumpster? Really? He's rich. He can hire new lawyers and it's very likely all these annoying people could end up disappeared. It wouldn't be that hard. His wife may be a slut and fucking many of the people around him but they can get pussy anywhere a lot cheaper than her. Getting access to money like his is nowhere as easy. He can easily buy new talent and get what he wants done. Further, if his lawyers have taken any improper action against him they are subject to lawsuits and disbarment, not for screwing his wife but in misrepresenting him. It's always funny to me that a pussy would be valued so highly. Pussy is easy to get and very affordable. Maybe some sap would do things IF he fell in love with the slut but doing things to jeopardize their jobs and careers just for a piece of ass, come on.
I've never said this in all the years I've been reading this site.....PLEASE never again write another word, let alone another story!!!
The story was pathetic. One of the worst I have ever had the misfortune to read. You rival Samuelx for the honor of writing the most sickening drivel on this site. Congratulations.
The only way you can possibly redeem yourself is to write a second chapter and bring some respect back to your protagonist. Nothing in the entire story was even remotely similar to reality.
Why would anyone waste his or her tme writing a pile of shit like this. This is the worst story i have read in some time. i hope the writer gives up writing in the near future.
the Ct. yankee
Sorry, I hate to bad mouth something that someone worked so hard on, but geez this story line really sucks. The only happy ending here would be for Amy and Todd to get totally screwed over somehow, and for Terrance to get his act together and make something of himself. But whatever happens Amy and Todd really really need to learn a hard lesson about humility and decent human behavior.
The author could regain the standard that is expected by writting an encore to this story with Terrance getting his revenge on Todd and Amy. He got the money and he can always buy some sordid characters to terrorize the couple. The foundation of the story has been laid down.
Of course that is, if the author can come out with creative juice to correct the poor perceptioons of readers on this story.
I think you should consider another way to spend your spare time. Writing doesn't seem to be your best pick in hobbies. Just a thought.
I hope this story has a second chapter. Terence needs revenge on all of these people involved, particularly his wife. NO ONE could be as cruel as his wife in what she did to him. No matter how bad of a husband he was (he was not according to the wife), he doesn't deserve this treatment. I also don't like people who think they are holier than anyone else because they happen to be Athletic, beautiful, smart, or rich. I was a nerd in school, and sometimes got picked on. It usually didn't last long because bad things would start to happen to them (I was fairly large for my age and have three older brothers so I had to learn to fight, even dirty, and also learned to expect trouble from any corner). I fortunately did belong to a group or cliche or whatever you want to call it. On another point, he saw what his wife was doing, maybe he should have taken the beat-down he would get for not saying his wife was the other mans whore. It was an interesting story and I hope to see a second chapter...maybe call it something like the "Revenge On The Reunited". Hopefully you will destroy this group (including the wife who should be totally destroyed) and find out if what she said was true about his lawyer and other employees and co-workers. What good is being wealthy if you don't use it to your advantage like destroying everone.
This story had so much hope...it had so many chances to turn out well...you're writing style and story telling is great...your story...just a big bummer!!!
...Yes, you - the Author. What a fucking joke. You set this up indicating that he had done well, got himself in shape and prepared for us to see him proud with his wife. Okay, she's a slut but then you return him to being a justifying wimp and loser. Total change of character for him. You, Author, need to find another vocation, insulting readers is pathetic, the only followers you'll have are low life losers with low self esteem. Actually, you ARE probably Terence! Stop Writing!!!
Did you actually enjoy writing this? reading it? Do you identify with the main character? Is this your fantasy? I got to about the second insult at the table before I guessed where it was going and jumped to the end to see if I was right. From the comments other people think you have some skill. But if it were written by Shakespeare himself I can't imagine anyone liking this. This site really does need a humiliation/cuckolding genre.
....better than it is...
You completely lost the main character as the story progressed. Terence is no longer in high school and would never react like you portray him. One thing his tormenters will find out is that payback is a bitch and a man with lots of money can make life very miserable for his enemies.
Go Away little sick one - you may need self disrespect and think of yourself as a sick wimp into self degradation but by expressing your need it just upsets the normal humans not into the fetish of male self humiliation.
REally, this was as boring and as uninteresting as they come. It should have been putin in the "Non-Erotic" section it was that bad. Please do us all a favor...stop writing.
Is this that Kezza67/Texrep chick with another new name??? Literotica should have a separate "Another Male Bashing Women!" category for these writers to spew in.
The idea that a kid this mentally and physically tortured would even THINK about showing up at a high scvhool re-union is absurd.
it is OBVIOUS that the author either went through something like this OR wished that something like this happened to him.
the whole story was telegraphed the minute the wife went out of her to laugh at Todd's Jokes at the husband exspense. The Husband is suppose to be the author and is a closet faggot.
this is one of the worst stories i've ever read. Jeez, I've gotta find a better way to spend my time.
This was one of the worst crap--Bull shit stories I have read--you are one sick person.
There has never been a story in this categoy more needing of a part 2 in which AMy, Todd, and even the others present in the locker room get their just deserts. The man is rich and supposedly smart, so the possibilities are endless. Make them suffer.
This is an inhuman story. There is really no element of humanity in it. Even wild beasts don't act this way! It is CRAP
I don't care so much about the story, but I LOVE THE COMMENTS!
its so great that you made everyone hate you so much! It takes some kind of talent to make people feel so much anger.
don't believe the ones that say their bored, because they wouldn't post if they were.
hope you keep doing stories. i wont read them, but i'm going to read every comment!!!
I loved the humiliation aspect as much as the cuckolding. Didn't care that she fucked anyone else as much as she fucked his high school bully. I loved that he was dumpstered, that he was humiliated in front of his own "friends", and most of all, that he got his ass kicked by a bunch of jocks AS his wife got fucked by his bully. LOVED IT.
The story was well-written, although I think you could have made the ending a little more subtle and still been very effective. But, what I really like is the way you pissed off all the idiots who don't understand that you are writing fiction. There is probably nothing in fiction that isn't mirrored somewhere by someone in reality, but people who can't read a story and separate the author and the fictional characters from reality are just simple, pathetic idiots. Great job!
The only way you could like the story is if you were the bully. The nerd should've taken some martial arts classes, kicked all the bullies asses, and then had his way with all the women, with his wife cheering him on. That was the only way you could've salvaged this story. I usually don't even make comments on stories but seeing how this story was complete and utter crap I just couldn't help myself.
This story sucked and the second part did as well. This is enough. Crawl back under your rock and never come out.
in spain a ex-wife the judge give to her the house the money, everything....
and the wife go to the ex husband. he was living in the car because he hasnt enough money to live in a shelter. she goes to laugh at him and humiliated him... he goes mad and kill the ex-wife... even the feminist Associations dont say anything about the murder... the wife was looking for trouble.
and todd in this story was looking for trouble... and he will find...
if i was Terence i will married to a whore from another city with aids and Gonorrhea
and Hepatitis. when todd fucks her .... well he will share the gift of STD to the ex wives of Terence.... and thats is a good revenge.
tell the readers what a pathetic, sad loser NTRMaster is. The author has no life, no sex life, and no self esteem. THE ONLY PEOPLE WHO FIND HUMILIATION AND PAIN TO BE EROTIC ARE SAD, FUCKED-UP, PATHETIC LOSERS. And it is stunning at how many of you pieces of scum are also too stupid to even post your story in the correct category. We ALL know, and we ALL know that YOU know that this story has nothing to do with a LOVING WIFE. So, you're just a fucking moronic ass. Seriously, why don't you take the 10 minutes you wasted writing this crap next time, and get off your lazy boy, take your hand off your small dick, and get out and get a real life.
pure fucking garbage.
stop writing stories asshole and wasting the readers time !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Great job posting this story in Loving Wives. This is probably the most effective trolling I've ever seen: everyone browsing this category that stumbles across this story looking for happy sex and doesn't know what NTR is instead gets treated to excruciating rage.
10/10
Late night, quick whack at amy and todds knees with a bat. Then one at the groin.
overs 40000 views that means people like this shit yet they give bad comment keep it up
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of zed0 "the ped0" Sandusky, only difference is the real reason he went into the boys locker room wasn't to find his wife & Todd, it was to look for young boys to sodomize.
Leave her with nothing and charge her and todd with assault and battery.
Then let her find out that having money can also mean hiring guys to beat other people into ugliness. So in 10 more years when the scares are all healed an bones all knit together todds wheel chair is wearing out and amy is not looking good with scares on her face Terence can laugh and ask how she likes her new life.
Free that anon! It is imprisoned and forced to read this author's stories! Probably also forced to a lot of unpleasant things. Or maybe it likes getting buggered, it is definitely into masochism.
i find myself rooting for the bull in all your stories because you make the cuck so incredibly pathetic and weak that i cant help but feel the cuck should be removed from the gene pool as an evolutionary failure. if i ever found a man so weak i must admit i'd probably be right there gleefully kicking his teeth down his throat. such a creature should only aspire to die in pain.
Gynophobic (Gay) people like you shouldn't write stories about real people.
Even in a fantasy, this guy doesn't exist.
You're a low life wimp, [probably gay, low self esteem and you want us all to know it. Why not just make up a flyer about yourself in real life and give it to everyone you meet!
God Jesus. Every story is the most revolting crap I've ever read.
I've never said this on lit before but please, stop it. It makes me physically unwell to come across one of your stories by accident.
...for crimes against humanity.
Todd just needs a total penile removal, leaving his nuts so he still has a sex drive.
what rubbish
has to be one of the worst on the site
what happened you tell us "He took up martial arts", what a waste space
a retard like you should never have been allowed to live in the first place. Gave this story a 5!
Absolutely the worst story, if you want to dignify it by calling it a story, that I've ever read on this site. And by the way, some of you commenters need to go back to grade school, and this time pay attention in spelling class.
he is now rating the worst to the best!!! I think he really LOVES then and squirts his little tea sponge of cum. Gave it a 5 dear annony and fuck you in the heart!!!
The pathetic piece of crap Terence s truly symbolic of American men in this day and age. They are helpless and useless, with lousy jobs, wives that are contemptuous of them, kids that are losers and no hope for the future. The 1% of men on top will use the wimp American men just as they wish while these dumb pathetic excuses for men kiss their asses and beg for scraps fron the table. Goodbye America Hello China!!!!
I hope the next part is better. The characters were extreme examples.
Finding good NTR on literotica is sometimes difficult, but if you scan the 2.00 to 3.50 scores, you can find great ones like this where people with justice boners one star it to the bottom. This short story is written well, building up the MC's feelings of doubt, panic and despair, and gives us a wife that's into the cruel acts themselves.
I wonder how the sequels will continue from here, but I shall definitely read on and see. 5 Stars.
Loved the reveal about Amy jerking Todd under the table and everything about the dress.
Her fuckin his lawyers is against their ethical rules. Just more lawsuit money for him to get in the future, and if you don't have him do that in the next chapters, you didn't do your research.
Way beyond bad. You need serious.help. Have to read next chapter to see if this was serious.
Too stereotyped with the needy former nerd and the cheerleader. Some really nasty words between them.
Adultery is pretty fucked up but these stories are my favorite.
This guy is not even half as smart you describe him to be. For me this story makes no sense
It didn’t seem particularly realistic to me, or even interesting. Just a lot of hate.
Look into therapy.
Weak storyline! Too bad you didn't think of much besides stupid sayings. The theme would be good for much better!
All cuck stories are, by there very nature ridiculous, but this has to be the absolute pinnacle of absurdity.
Pathetic excuse of a story. No imagination, just a knockoff copy of 100s of cuck stories. Literally, learn to tag your stories properly. I wouldn't have wasted 15 minutes of my life on this trash.