by Legman173
Lord that was hot, but was distracted by the spelling and grammar errors
I read it too. Voted it high, It was hot. Guess I'm a dummy tho... I wasn't distracted by any errors except the word almost spelled almos - not saying there weren't others, I just wasn't distracted by anything or saw anything that jumped out at me, so I voted it high.
I enjoyed it and got a nice wank-off to it.
I post anonymous because I'm not a member. - Names Steven.
I agree, it's good, but grammar, spelling and punctuation need work. Maybe have two people read/edit next time. It's usually useful I find, to read the story aloud; this helps catch any mistakes as well. Otherwise, nice work! Makes me want to be Red this year ;)
Aside from the grammer, LOVED IT!!!! I would love to see a sequel. Do they get to meet again next year?
I was waiting for a twist at the end and it never really came. Fun, though.
I thought there would be more gobble. After the Big Bad Wolf says" I'm going to eat you, gobble, gobble, gobble!"