by Goldeniangel
For Ch 3, this was a very disapointing story, you got me slightly interested, then stopped. What's up? How about some sex?
to be a writer, you must carry a story to its logical conclusion, which you failed to do. I am not going to ask u a bunch of stupid Q's, about the story line, but u need to carry on.
Perhaps when u write the WHOLE thing, it will make a better story
Rudy
I liked it, it got my imagination running about things to come. I think that it's ok to take a slow pace, we are talking about a girl who is just discovering her own sexuality, and all the kinky aspects of it. So many lesbian/bi stories on here are too quick, not enough developement and undescriptive sex. Yours is refreshing, thank you for writing it.
Looking forward to more!!
Keep up the good work, it's really starting to get interesting.
Angel,
ignore the negative comments, coz they are talkin out of their butts!!
Loved this chapter. Can identify with the whole `scared of sexuality thing!'
Very real.
love it
Amba
xx
Each chapter is better than the one before.
i-lick-pussy_Taliea.
I am surprised that they did not notice Erin there staring at them