by orie
I thoroughly enjoyed this story, though I found Jake's willingness to tolerate Megan's having sex with other men a little hard for me to accept. But that just added to the tension that makes this story so readable. The eroticism was extremely well done: one measure being that while I ordinarily gravitate to stories about women built more like Gina, I found Megan ( and Sally) to be utter turn-on(s). Nice job!
Extremely well written story .. enjoyed it utterly. Hope to see more in future :)
Great writing, great story, great ending, great .... everything!
I just loved it. The perfect one I ever read.
I have been on this site for a long time. That was one of the sexiest stories I have ever read on here.
Good Job
A different story, told with the right amount of intrigue and detail. I really liked it.
a nice short chapter that helps them get through the barrier, and lets us know that all is right in their world, and they end up totally together.
I have been reading on this site for a few years now, and I do not think I have read a story hotter than this one! Good job. Would love a second part. :)
This may well be the best story I've read on Literotica. It's certainly the best I remember. Sexy, believable, well-written.
I have been reading stories on this site for more years than I care to think about and this about the best I can remember. Thank you
I know me well enough to know I would have ruined the possibilities of a great relationship if I was in Jake's position. This is the best teased-to-distraction story I've ever read. Thanks
I have been an avid reader of Literotica for quite a number of years now. My first favorite ever was the Genie Chronicles And that was probably over 5 years ago. I must say, this story tops everything I have ever read. Your writing style is amazingly brilliant and I beg of you to write more chapters to this story. The bond that Jake and Megan have is simply amazing.
A wonderful story. It provided great sexual tension. It is a fantasy that all heterosexual would love to come true. You paced the story just right. It was nicr to read a story by someone who can do more than describe sex acts.
Having lived in a co-ed (3 guys - 2 girls) house trailer for two years, know about the seeing and not touching. I wasn't the lucky guy of the three in the end. The story read like we lived till the end when the others decided to make perment pairs legally. Loved every word and scene.
An absolutely fantastic piece of writing , loved it from start to finish, kept me enthralled all the way through
Do hope there is gonna be a next chapter !!
If there is an art to making love then it lies in taking things slowly and a little bit at a time. Your story is told in exactly this way. Which is why it works so very well.
Of course the object of taking things slowly is to build up to a crescendo. You got there with Sally. I agree that one more chapter would bring things to a deeply satisfying conclusion. Which is just another way of saying "Carry on writing....please
What a great story and great writing. I enjoyed every word. I would love to see a part 2 and even a part 3, but the story is complete as it stands, and you left everyone wanting more.
I would ask for more, but that would be the obvious thing to say.
So I will settle for saying. Keep up the great work and I hope to see more from you soon.
this is one of the best stories i have read on here in a very long time. i look forward to reading more of your work
by for, one of the best stories that i have read on this site. simply excellent.
I loved your story, great pace. You can end it here or continue the story for a part 2..
Thanks
I loved every word! Beautifully written, you captivated the reader with a lovely (and very sexy) storyline. I'm anxiously awaiting your next story!
Please write a sequel to this story. It was beautifully written but it left me wanting to know how Jake and Megan end up. Hopefully happy and together.
The absolute best story I have read in a long time. I would love to get a part 2!
I've ready probably hundreds of stories on here thus far, and I can honestly say I love this story the most. It's an incredible story!
This was i guess you could say a real "page turner" would love to find out what happens to Jake and Megan!!!
Excellent story, both sweetly kinky and playfully romantic, if you read it you will see the plot untangles like a ballroom choreography between the characters, with your starring characters "dancing" close to many people till they find their own closing-up/swirl away steps. Try only short sequel, a long one will probably destroy your tight wound plot.
The story is absolutely fantastic. Both hubby and I enjoyed it so much. We are naturists so we consider the nudist parts to be well done and realistic. Like most people, I enjoy sex a lot, so get off on the erotic aspects of the story. Marriage is the untold, happy ending to this story.
Hey Orie,
Real good stuff. Loved the emotional twang in the story as much as the erotic bit. Somewhere by not allowing Meg to screw Jake, you have left the story pure. Beautiful treatment, love it!
This had some real development, strong characters and great description. Really enjoyed it.
this is an a+ story, great plot, beautiful sex, and just enough kink to make it super arousing. I hope we get another installment. In the mean time I'll be reading the rest of your stories. Thanks
The story is simply SUPERB
The descriptions, the personality of each characters and the sex is awesome.
Keep it up mate.
First story i ever finished reading.(Even After I was done ;) I kept reading until the end!
Love the character development through the whole thing. I like how you left it open but with an idea of how things are going to play out.
I loved this story. You did a great job on how the main characters came closer and closer together.
No doubt about it, one of the best I've ever seen on Literotica. Keep going, keep writing.
This is a wonderful story. I absolutely loved the character development.
It was 5am and I stumbled on this. I was dead tired, had I known how long it was prior to reading I probably would have skipped right over one of the best stories I think I have ever read in my life. You sir, have inspired me.
Great story all the way from character development to the grammer. Keep it up!
That was about as well written a story as I've read in these parts in quite a while - excellent premise, great rhythm, and a bunch of really fun characters.
Very well done.
not only was the story erotic, but you provided emotional depth to the characters as well. keep on writing!
Wow I stumbled across this and not knowing what i was reading at first but after the first few paragraphs you had my hooked. I couldn't stop reading till i got to the end.
amazing story with brilliant character & lots of erotica...........
ummmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmaaahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhaaaaaaaaa
enjoyed this little tale muchly!! ,,,there was real depth and emotion to these characters,,,i was hooked early on,,like all of us,they are carrying baggage of their own,,andx it was fun seeing them work thru their angst!! it was a fun read!
more like this please!!
I'm hooked. Wonderful character development, loved the slow pace, too. Please can we have a second instalment?
One of the best I've ever read. Like a roller coaster ride. Builds you up and then lets you coast down for a while. I couldn't wait to read more.2D9F
Very lengthy but erotic. Excites me to wonder if this was a tale from your past!
In ten plus years of reading stories on this site, this is the best I've ever read and the only one I have ever commented on. Kudos!
is the best form of flattery, and your story was so great that I laughed all the way through it. Your sense of verbal timing and grammatical sequences are marvelous. I will go back to see some of your other works. No, I didn't check for spelling or grammar slip ups. Not important in this story. Easily a 5 star performance.
Powerfully erotic story with sensitively drawn and immensely sympathetic characters. Although the sex-goddess heroine is just too good to be true (a bit reminiscent of Candy in the eponymous satiric-erotic novel by Terry Southern) and it's impossible to believe that they wouldn't have jumped each other's bones within the first week, it really doesn't matter. Everyone's has way too much fun with all the pent up sexual energy -- author, characters and readers alike.
Wow! If i have to describe this in one word than that will be amazing. U're such a good writer. I had to pee from page 2 but couldn't quit reading. My dick kept hard the whole story! I love it. Keep writing man, RESPECT!!!
Great story and great presentation........could not leave the story without completely reading it........ and one last thing....praying to god that nothing can make u two apart and u two make the happiest couple in the world because u two r sooo perfect for each other............................
Great story, Please continue to contribute, all of your stories are great but this ios my fave!
Looking forward to reading the sequel. One guy with the attention of several naked women makes for a wonderful story.
This is an amazing story, that is extremely erotic and very well written. Bravo
Orie, while I love all your stories, you're my favourite author by far, I have a small criticism, and I hope you won't take it badly because you are definitely the best author on here in my opinion.
I love the humour, it adds so much to the story and the eroticism, buuut..
Your characters are so similar though.. The male on here reminds me so much of Owen and Jimmy, and Megan reminds me a lot of Mary from A Complete Education. If you don't want to write only one series, it might be better to vary your characters.
"Roomates or More" and "Shy Auditor" are two on my Favorite Stories on Literotica. Both would be excellent for follow-up chapters. Keep up the great work,
Jomammy
Your story is very very good ! Please write another chapter, as you can't leave us hanging. I think the relationship between Jake and Megan is at a crucial stage and needs to be finished.
Thanks
I think you just wrote a story that expresses what many people want, but have not had the opportunity to experience. Thank you for a great read and your ending works really well as either an 'end' that leaves the reader speculating or one that you could continue on to 'part 2.'
All these comments are well justified, but I'd like to add that this is one of the best stories I have masturbated to, being quite long I edged through the entire story, cheers Richard New Zealand
i absolutely love your story! you have a great insight of the female brain. i think just about all of us want to be desired and admired as much as you did your room-mate!
WOW, what an amazing story! Incredibly well written and genuine. I could read stories like this forever! Thanks!
I just want to congratulate you on such a well written story! Thanks!
Loved the story. I would have like to seen a little more in-depth description of what happened after Megan left him with Sally, but was still absolutely amazing.
Most storys can't hold my attention but this story made me unable to stop reading! You are an amazing writer!
IT IS HARD TO ADD MORE COMPLIMENTS TO YOUR WRITING. YOUR STORY LINE IS EXCELLENT AND THE PACE TOO. THE HUMOROUS CONVERSATIONS ADD A LOT OF INTEREST.
IT IS SO GREAT THAT I WISH I WAS THAT GUY BUT DOUBT I'D HAVE THE SEXUAL STAMINA THAT HE HAS.
What more can I say other than I'd love to read more of your writings.
What an excellent story very well written and a fantasy of mine come to life virtually. This went into my favorite list the moment I was in page two. All I can say is keep the good work up.
That was weird. Really intense and really well written and really hot and really enchanting, but still weird.
Left the feeling of... well.. him being at the hook. Like a fish. Twitchign on and on without any chance to get of ever again...
Hell... He didn't even once try to make a small step into that particular direction, did he? Oh man...
I loved that story. But... still weird...
What more can be said about your story than what has been said already. It's well written, has good pace, feels realistic, and holds my attention all the way thru. Got any more writitngs like this? I would imagine you're a published writer after reading this story. It's hard to find a "page burner" like this one, they're few and far between.