All Comments on 'Sacrifice Ch. 03'

love it! i'm so glad for the update. this is an unusual take on familiar themes that rolls into a very enjoyable story. i wouldn't change a thing. please keep at it :)

Its beautiful. Hopefully more to come.

I'm loving this story!! I know life gets in the way, but please keep the chapters coming as soon as possible! I love the characters and can't wait to hear about Thelios' trip...

So glad that this is obviously going to continue to be going interesting directions. I'm thoroughly enjoying it and the sex is intensely hot! I love the way both are still slightly unsure of each other but not to the point of uncomfort. Obviously she'll have to have more to do/people around her to be fully happy? I was sorry he didn't take her with him, but the trip to town was interesting.

Thank god you're continuing the story! I favorited it in hopes you would. Anyway, I sure hope thelios isn't messing around with other women..that would just kill me. And I might hate him for all eternity if he did. Hahaha.

I was ecstatic when I saw this new chapter. It was just as good as the two before. Can't wait for more. Please continue!!!!

Thanks for adding a new chapter. Thought you'd given up on this lovely, well written story. Please do update soon.

I'm so glad you updated this story and I accidentally found it! Please keep this story updated a little more frequently. It is so annoying to get interested in a story then wait for MONTHS for the next installment.

LOVE THIS STORY LINE AND CANNOT WAIT FOR MORE OF IT, JUST A LITTLE SOONER THAN LATER PLEASE

Today is actually the first time i read any of these chapters for this story. And i am sooooo glad that i came across it :) I have been enjoying each page as i read the chapters. I hope that Thelios and Calliope get... umm.. even closer. I actually hope that he realizes that he is beginning to really care for her. Im just wondering why no one else should know his name, and how it would be dangerous.

Well anyways, please write as soon as you can. I just loved these chapters, and i cant wait to read the next ones. Please dont keep up waiting! lol :)

Love this story and nice to see the progression of their relationship. I love Calliope's honesty and the banter of all three. Keep up the good work.

I hope to read more soon.

It gets even better with every chapter!

....that you updated this great story! After the first 2 1/2 months, I almost despaired that it would remain a work-in-progress indefinitely. Glad I checked the NonHuman category for updates once in a while. Really loved this (fortunately long) chapter :-) This is one of only 5 stories on this site, that really keeps me riveted.... Pleeeeease, keep up the good work! Looking forward for more.

thanks so much for updating, this is one of 3 stories on the site i thoroughly enjoy rereading and compulsively check for updates ;)

This story is great. I am thoroughly enjoying this story. Pleez update soon.

i love this storie. read these 3 all in one siting. i do wish, that u will continue with it soon. As you could go in so many directions with it. please keep up the storie as i will be , cheaking up every other month XD-L.j

I started reading and couldn't stop. Please continue soon - I can't wait to read more.

Your story is great!! I can't wait to see what happens next. This is one of the best stories I have read!!

You've written an amazing story. I'm curious to know what happens next. Please don't keep us waiting too long.

This chapter was so funny; everyone's humor is shining through--not that it didn't before it's just that everyone is more acclimated to each other. I love all of them. And I'm excited that there seems to be some trouble brewing.

I really hope theres more to come, a truly fantastic read x

hope to see more someday

I absolutely love how unique and multi-faceted each character is. They're realistic, consistent and captivating.

Need more soon!

more soon please!

This is, in an appropriate word, Lovely. I can't wait to read more!

I love this story & I can't wait to read more. This is definately one of the best/hottest stories I've read on here.

One of the best stories I've seen so far, keep it up.

great story cant wait to read more.

I am loving this wonderful story, can't wait for Thelios to come home to her!

I love this story, the storyline is fantastic it it's completely addictive :) I really can't wait to read more!

I hope Thelios comes back to her soon, they are perfect together they just need to realise it themselves :)

please keep writing this story... I wanna read more!! ;)

I have stumbled across a real gem here! I cant wait to see how it continues....and to find out Thelios' secrets!

I love this story & I'm dying for more!!!!!!

very interesting story - written differently then what is expected but I find myself really liking your characters.

love the way you write!

very entertaining and its easy to lose oneself in the story

can not wait for more!

I love this story, and can't wait for the next chapter.

I'm a picky reader and wanted to let you know that your work is terrific! Please write more - I'm dying to find out what happens next!

Please bring us the next chapter, I love this story and can't wait to find out what happens next!!

Please continue writing! I am captivated, addicted and not a little obsessed!!!!

Please continue writing! I absolutely love this story and am dying to read more!!

Best story on here. More would be fantastic! Please please please? :)

I must admit, I was not a little apprehensive that it was a year between updates, as seen from your member page.

Please give us the next chapter soon, is what I'm saying! Best series on here, I swear.

Please, please, please keep writing! This truly is the best story I've read on here. And I don't even like non-human stories much. :o) Please write more.

This story is too good to leave unfinished! Please? I really like the way you've made your characters into people that are multi-dimensional. And I like the storyline, but I REALLY want to know what happens next. Pretty please?

Or if you've decided not to continue the story, could you let your readers know by writing it in your bio? Otherwise I'll check back for more multiple times a week!

this is an incredible story....to leave it hanging. please continue on with more chapters.

Enjoying these alot.

This is really lovely! Calliope and Thelios are at once ridiculously sweet and functional and brain-meltingly hot, seriously. Some of the dialogue made me laugh out loud. I love Calliope, she's great.

I'm deeply enjoying this little tale and some tingling in the back of my head is telling me something might be about to happen. I could be wrong, it's just a feeling. I do love it though and truly can't wait for more.

love your story!! I like the maturity your characters exhibit while at the same time being insecure with their feelings. Love your dynamics! and that Theolis trusted her w/ his name automatically. I really hope you don't turn her into a brainless idiot who blabs it w/o thought. Can't wait to read more!!

Beautiful.

Yes, I said amazing. That this story could be this good with only basically 3 characters. I know T's family has been mentioned a couple of times, the shepherd boy has appeared at least 3 times and Alexia has now appeared twice, plus a few other odd people, but combined they take up less than 1% of the story. They may appear again later in the story, but this truly is a story with only 3 characters. What an author you are! To keep so many readers like myself entertain, yes amazing. I going to chapter 4 right now.

My favorite chapter because of Thelio's insecurities and their bantering. I'm wondering if something going to happen with the shephard who's perodically in every chapter so far.....

You have very few problems w/ spelling errors - but I found a couple. I think both were on page 3.

Thelios shrugged carelessly in afFirmation.

was a serious and quite women (quiet woman).

I like how you planned her time away from him right where she could sit and think about her circumstances, but me want Thelios back!!

I found this story while I was looking around, and I find that it's really refreshing and simple an engrossing read.

I am looking forward to reading more of it. Keep up the good work.

I'm enjoying this story immeasurably so far. The setting appeals to me as an historian, the characters are well-developed and likeable, and the writing is fluid and graceful. Bravo!

On a technical note, you have a serious issue with homophones--words that are pronounced the same but are spelled differently and mean different things. "Council" and "counsel," "your" and "you're," et cetera. It doesn't bother me while reading like syntax and punctuation errors do, but something that will need to be fixed if you want to compile and publish the story when you finish it. (Something you should definitely think about, incidentally.) If you want an editor to help with the cleanup or future chapters, feel free to hit me up.

One last note, this one historical: in the Classical period of ancient Greece (which is the overall vibe I get from the setting), the army of a polis (city-state) consisted of all able-bodied male cititzens aged 16 to 60, and some even older. Battles only happened every year or two at the height of summer, and never lasted more than a single afternoon. Therefore, being a soldier was not a profession in Greece (except in Sparta, but they were abnormal in almost every way), and mercenaries like Demitri were very uncommon there. However, his coming down into Greece looking for work after being hurt is extremely plausible. After the Persian Wars things changed rather dramatically, but that's another story.

Another homophone that you get wrong: a boarder is a person e.g. in a boarding house whereas. a border is a boundary or frontier, If you get your story edited it will improve the flow.

First off I would like to say that I love this story, the character are great and original and that the story is so really very interesting. Thelios now is starting to remind me of Hell boy, in fact before you mention the part about his name being put in the wrong hand could be bad, I tried to compare how Thelios would look. At first, I thought maybe something ugly, but that doesn't seem the case. Then, I thought a minotaur, but he doesn't have the entire bull head and he's silver, so then I thought about the horns and the muscles and it hit me, she doing something like Hell Boy! LOL! And the part about his name confirm it to me even more.

I like the girl she is honest, and that's something new.

I don't find this story all that interesting.

I wish there was some drama.

No offence but I think ima move on.

WB

Obviously, the anon lacks taste.

This coming from another anon, you have no way of know if i have taste, but considering i've read a good several thousand stories on this site (Eheh... probably not a good thing. Waste of time and all that.) and can say this is by far at the upper end/top 50 of the stories i've ever read, i assume it is safe to say that I have some taste.

The story is amazing, I write this both to the author, to all readers, and to the tasteless anon's of the world who just can't understand the beauty in a story with a good plot line and character development that isn't rushed. A story with hot passionate sex but not sex every other paragraph.

Fyi, anon, it gets more dramatic later (Yes... i may have read this a few times before. Or a lot.)

Sincerely,

The-anon-who-shall-not-be-named

Anon who shall not be named. Your my hero. :)

WB

Bland? Really? Have some respect for the build up deary. I've read this story 5 or 6 times its so good. So far one of 4 story's that I have re read

Have to agree as another anonymous reader I am in love with this story. It's hard to find a story where you have such a strong character in the beginning rather than one that is weepy and easily controlled. If you don't like the story I feel you shouldn't even waste your time leaving a comment especially with the amount of positive feedback clearly many do like the story. Thank you to Pandarus for letting us have access to such a titillating read.

I like how this series is not just about a strictly sexual relationship but seems to be building into a possible romantic relationship. Can't wait to finish it!

I'm enjoying how Thelios is patiently letting his headstrong, clueless "slave"work out what her heart wants at her own pace. Patience is not just a rare trait in protagonists, but especially so in strong ones.

Great story, thanks for sharing!

JT

I am really enjoying this story. Your characters seem real and believable. I just wonder when Calliope will admit to being in love with Thelios?

I am seriously NOT gonna read the rest of your stories. It was good...great up until this chapter. I'm feeling a "Beauty & the Beast" theme here and I don't like the vibe....knowing a secret name, someone seeing the female in the pasture with her sheep and the incidents at the market with the vendor and female ex-prisoner..... all a little obvious. Thanks for the ride, but I'm getting off here. Looking forward to other Non-Human stories from you in the future.

You should read on. While this chapter appears to be "beauty and the beast" you forget that this is taking place within the constraints of greek mythology.

The author has thrown some subtle and some unsubtle hints that only those who are familiar with greek mythology (or those who take the time to google names) would catch.

The emotions when reading this series (past counting the amount on my hands) is intense joy, humour, sexual excitement/pleasure (I want a Thelios of my own) + romantic ache….just to name a few. Frustration is high and I'm on the edge of my bed (this is one of my favourite pieces to read at night). I keep returning back to check if there is any progress in the works, I live in hope. Hope you the writer are well wherever you are :) Thank you for sharing this story.

I am so enjoying this story, chapter by chapter, one per night. Makes me wish I was Thalios, or, good heavens, even Calliope.

First three chapters have me wanting to finish. I notice you haven't added any stories. Would like to encourage you to add to the collection. Good Luck.

I've followed this story since you wrote the first chapter. And i love it, i love it all. I know you had some personal issues to deal with, but i just want to encourage you and let you know you still have loyal fans waiting for you x

"Shut up and lick me". He-he.

Hope he doesn't turn out to be a little slut like so many others while on holiday by himself. No std is fun, but a giant std...oops.

This story is absolutely prime. You are an entertainer of note. May you not be cursed with many screaming infants.

Thank you so much.

Evebroughtanaxthistime

Very well written entertaining story. Almost typo free, too :-) thank you very much for placing your story here and for editting it as well. (consider quiet when you think of quite)

Love the story!

I'd suggest though that you get a good volunteer editor. Whilst the writing is of a very high standard, there are at least three words you routinely misspell. A word processor wouldn't pick them up because the misspellings are legitimate words.

The most annoying to me is you use "boarder" instead of "border". You also use "quite" instead of "quiet". The third one mustn't be as annoying because I can't recall what it is at the moment - will let you know when I remember.

Once again I love the story and the way it's developing.

You done good!

Still loving

One of the things I like best about this story is the wit and humorous dialog between the three of them. Most of my questions have been answered, so this was a great chapter.