All Comments on 'Sarah's Visit to London Ch. 02'

What an amazing update. I loved the commentary as John was taking them through London and seeing the sights. It makes me long to visit myself. <br><br>

The build up of tension throughout the day that is wonderfully done. The way he can't keep his hands off her, the scene in the church where they almost get caught, all leading up to and culminating in the final bedroom scene.<br><br>

Mmmmm, mmmmm, mmmm - very hot and erotic and I loved it!

You have such a fine sense of detail. Crystal clear, and never too much. There's nothing extraneous or self-indulgent here: each little observation serves to move the story forward, to fire the building heat, to carry us along with John and Sarah to their arrival at her hotel. What you create there is worthy of the carefully crafted foundation you have so lovingly laid beforehand.

It is such a pleasure to read your work!