All Comments on 'Saturday Night School Ch. 07'

Very nicely done. Bravo. Now for the agonizing wait for the next. Keep em coming.

It added a lot of depth to her character to have her torn between getting even with Michelle and wanting the best for Charlie. I hope she continues to enable the kinky side of their relationship. Plus I always love me some CFNF.

I'm also enjoying how Michelle keeps losing her clothing to Charlie. One of these days she will have nothing left to wear!

I'm still laughing my ass off about the fruit bouquet. I imagine the poor old guy on his way home, beating himself up. "Naked girl right in front of me, and all I could think to talk about was fruit bouquets!!!"

Excellent story. Thanks for the brief summary at the start to remind the reader. 5 stars. Thank you.

Another great chapter. Good character development, dialogue, and perfectly straddles that line of being believable regarding the public nudity. Seeing if you've posted a new chapter to this and your "Beautiful Day"story are the main reason I periodically check this site. Keep them coming!

And, as with the anonymous comment before, I appreciate the 'story so far' introduction when there are several weeks elapse between chapter submissions.

The characters are becoming even more interesting. Michelle's obsession being exhibited in unusual places is great and, as another commenter said, fleshing out Ronni as a character has added immeasurably to the story.

Lue

Excellent read. I love this series and the interesting predicaments you put Michelle in. Keep it up, the escalation of exhibitions is good. Can't wait to see how much farther and crazier it gets.

You're succeeding where so many writers fail: convincingly building the emotional stakes Great job introducing some darker themes/fears/anxieties to a series that began in a light-hearted tone. The ambiguous emotional dynamics overlaid with adolescent egos...you're successfully weaving a layer of realism into the fantasy. Can't wait for more.

Waiting for ch 8

Your imagination is wild. But like other writers, I am impressed with the sexual tension in particular, and the growth of your main characters.

Where are we going? Can't wait for the next instalment.

Well damn, glad I found this story. Binge read all of it since last night. Now Ronni is going to try to catch up somehow huh? I like where this story has gone, I like where I believe it's headed, honestly I'll stop reading it if she accepts another lover, sure it could be an amazing sign of trust but it's also a different step away from just being seen, being shared like that is different and while she does have some tendencies like that you have had her explicitly have reservations and not so much want, despite the fact that she said she would for him. So, we shall see

I fell in love with both characters. They are made for each other. Wanted them to be together through out their life...

Waiting for next chapter.

...that there isn't a chapter 9 yet. Can't wait to see what happens. Love your writing style and character development. If I had one criticism it would be that there isn't enough description of Michelle. She is this perfect drop dead gorgeous girl, but not enough detail of Charlie's exploration of her. I mean I'm no great writer myself, so don't take what I say as being critical, but I yearn to read more about her and what Charlie sees when he is playing with her. Flesh her out more, pun intended.

Superb writing, incredible tension, soooo hot!

more please...

This is a terrific series!

This is so fucking good that I'm pissed that theres only 7 chapters of it.

Really enjoying the characters and their journey, need to get to the prom. Loving the additional characters adds more to the story. Really hope you find the time to continue.

What an enjoyable story. You handle it with just the right touch, letting the eroticism build through the characters and story, without laying it on too thick. You have your readers hanging on the characters and what's going to happen to them next. I look forward to the next chapter.

This story is so far the best ive read here - Your writing is great. Please keep up the good work, the world and myself are too excited to find out what happens with the two, especially now as others seem to get involved! Very exciting, thank you so much for sharing this!! :-)

It is the best story series I have ever read, every guy relate himself to Charlie, so is the depth of it. Can't wait to read the next part. Please provide it asap. Hope, later on it ends well finally Charlie getting her as his love of life..

I just finished this series so far... and honestly this is such good writing I forgot this is on a smut site! You should make this into a novel, honestly. You have enough written and enough future potential with this story, these characters, and this concept, to write a series! I just really wanted to express to you how impressive, erotic, and intelligent your story is. I genuinely love it, and please keep writing!

P.S.  I would buy all of your books!

I am really enjoying these and looking forward to more. We are seeing a connection grow between two people that feels very real. It carries within it all the insecurities and assumptions, miscommunications, that happen when two people grow closer and then, again and again, we have the slate wiped clean in powerful erotic union. Really enjoying how all of this feels fresh and somehow free of trappings of our modern day sexuality formed by pornography and 50 shades type cliches. We are seeing a kind of submissiveness in Michelle but it is her own, and something that can and will only exist in that way between these two people, in the here and now. Not some kind of reenactment of prescribed "swoons for seven foot alpha male" bullshit.

Feeling exited and inspired. My only regret is that only after reading the whole series so far did I realise that it is also on Kindle Unlimited and the author could have been making some pennies from my enjoyment. I'll try to make up for it by reading all her other stuff on Kindle. Thanks Jessica Tang VonHarper!

Great series, loving every detail and the developing plot, please keep the stories coming xx

I really look forward to reading more about Michelle and Ronni, maybe Ronni could be persuaded to join in exposing herself too.

This is the best in the series so far. I agree with some of the other comments -- I hope Ronni ends up naked as well at some point. Please keep up the great work on these stories.

When Ronni asked her to take her clothes off, that was HOT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I love the way your mind thinks. :) I can't wait until the next episode!

Thank you for your wonderful writing.

10/10. Can't wait for the next chapter. keep em' coming

While we'd love to see something happen with Ronni, there is a possible issue. You're going to have to figure out how to make her 18 years old. You've said she's a junior, so maybe her birthday is late in the school year?

However, an awesome series so far, and I (most likely we) can't wait to see what happens at the prom.

What makes this series stand out is the emotional engagement. Moments of tenderness, like Charlie talking with Michelle about his dad, make me invested in their story, and make the romance and eroticism that much more engaging.

Charlie and Michelle lived in totally different worlds before, and I'm very interested to see what happens as those worlds come together. I'm particularly keen to see how Michelle gets along with Charlie's mom, and if Charlie and Glenn will become friends.

Brilliant erotic writing at its finest. Characters very believable. I'm so hoping there is more to come especially with a possible three way linkup with Ronni. You've made an old man very happy lol :-0

You are a fantastic writer and I'm loving the character development. More please.

So, just my few silly thoughts in the unbelievable case autor got stuck and don't know how to go forward, or more likely just my guessing about some interesting developments here could be.

Make Glenn and Vanessa play the get in love pair in that short film. Hard to get there, but then... This goes places. Glenn gets to disrobe M in front of our camera boy, on Ronnie command. Sparks! At the end, in full accordance to the script, that pair gets each other with M tease, we can have two parallel couples at once (tidy, no mixing).

Keep Ronnie as the bad sister, spicing up everything that horny, play lookout and/or opportunistic game master.

Get back to school. AV room in the middle of the school day? With Ronnie on lookout.

What to avoid:

Don't make M too submissive, she's no pet, nor a mailgirl.

Mass nudity may be fun sometimes, but it could be more special keeping all others as clothed as possible

This is the best series I've read on here!! Please post more soon.

I cannot say enough about this series. While I was looking for titillating eroticism, which was delivered well, I found myself so engaged in the storyline and the characters, I care about what happens with them and most of all, like good sex, and a good story should, I am satisfied but want more! I am looking forward to the next story in this line.

Best story on here by far, to be continued?

Continue with this story I really enjoy it

I thought, the closer they got to the prom the closer this story was to ending; but now you've added the movie. I should have guessed that might occur but you surprised me. Thank you for the surprise, and thank you for creating a scenario where this story will last longer.

I love it.

Others have said it and I'll add to it. Best story on Literotica in my opinion, Love the characters, love the tension, love the sex! I would only add that I would be crazy disappointed if Michelle has sex with anyone else. This is about her and Charlie. Dumb, hopeless romantic I know. So sue me.

Please continue!

THE best story I have read on lit, amazing. The story line, theu build-up, the tension, the romance. God bless!

What I find so powerfully compelling about this story, is how Charlie must balance his desire for Michelle against his responsibility to protect her. She has willfully surrendered all good judgement and placed that burden on Charlie's shoulders, and Charlie is very aware of this role. Michelle needs Charlie's help to realize her fantasies, equally as much as she needs his help to stay safe. That careful balancing act between pushing her forward and pulling her back... I can imagine myself in Charlie's role, and it is so very erotic.

I check back eagerly every week for another episode!

Jessica,

1. I agree with every other comment I've read so far on THIS chapter! You have a definite HIT here!

2. I'm standing by, too, waiting for the next chapter, like everyone else seems to be - AND as I said that I would!

3. I've never left as many comments for any writer, about any chapter, series or story, as I have for you and this one now.

4. Take a bow! You deserve it!

5. Any estimate you can give us as to when Chapter 8 will be released?

X-Man

A.K.A. xavierw

Just found this series and read it straight through. Loved watching Michelle's combination of vulnerability, exhilaration, mystery, and control. She's a fantasy, but a fantasy that you want to be true. We can all appreciate her struggles with her emerging sexuality and the difficulties of navigating the social minefield of school. We can also understand Charlie's dilemma in trying to comprehend her signals toward him.

Then there's the sex. At some level, any reader of erotica is a voyeur, so Michelle's scenes vibrate with heat and tension. They definitely got me hot and bothered.

Thank you for a job well done.

Please pleeeeaasssseeeee write more!! I'm absolutely loving this story. The characters have such genuine and distinct personalities, and it feels real, but not in an overly predictable way.

I ~want~ no NEED more please!!! You have a very good understanding of the subject.

I’d just like to say that I’ve been reading on this site for years and this is the first time I’ve ever commented on anything. Please write more, this is the best thing I have ever read.

Sat here on my arse, yes that is correct spelling, for hours reading through your stories. Particularly enjoyed this one.

Your writing is spectacular. Good use of English and punctuation. Sex scenes were described well without going over the top and all the exhibitionist scenes were very believable.

As an Englishman, I loved to see the correct use of the word "an" too. Only time I saw it misused was a slight spelling mistake where you missed the Y at the end. I think it was in Chapter 5.

This story, I feel, has many more episodes to go. So much more naughtiness for Charles and Michele to get up to. Please keep it going. One of my favorite writers on here updates his story once a month and many of us who read it cannot wait for the next installment. Maybe that is something you would consider with "Saturday Night School"

Finally, I think you are incredible writer of erotic literature of this genre. Please keep up the good work.

I discovered this series when the first chapter was hot off the press and I’ve loved it all the way through. However, please find it in your heart to pick it up again and give Charlie and Michelle the ending we all crave for them! Please!!?!

Love it!!!

one year without new from Mchelle and Charlie.....really too bad.......

They are such a fascinating couple and Michelle's exploits leave one wondering what she will do next. J_T_vH has created two characters that this reader really cares about.

Lue

For everyone interested, the next chapters are at author's amazon account. Not the best ones in my opinion, but you can check them. I honestly suggest you to have a look at "candlelight city" too. I loved it!

Characters were really fleshed out, well developed as, well you know what I mean. It made me very horney.

This story could go on forever and probably should. Well done!!!

Hi,

I just binged all seven chapters. This is some of the best writing i have seen on this site. I love the dynamic between Michelle and Charlie. This chapter was definitely my favorite one. When i started reading the part where Ronnie basically orders Michelle to strip out of her clothes, which completely take both Charlie and Michelle by surprise, my heart really started racing. Then Michelle decides to kiss Ronnie's brother right when she met him. That was fantastic. I also liked Ronnie's reason for doing what she did. Although i thought you let a golden opportunity pass by not giving us more of Ronnie ordering Michelle around. I would have loved more of that. Maybe next chapter, please.

Please continue this series! I need more!

Extremely well written and very indulging! I binged thes chapters and was actually pretty saddened that it ended there. Please, please, write a few more chapters. This is one hell of a love story with a very interesting plot!

Please add more to this story. These are GREAT stories and well written.

These are so well written that I can't help thinking that you have experienced some of these adventures yourself. I know I had fantasized, years ago, about having a girlfriend as free-spirited as Michelle.

It's worth a lookup on kindle to find more of Jessica' writings.

Please continue the series!

I lost count of the number of times the story was so Hot I just couldn't stop myself, you really have a gift for spinning a really, really good sexual story with all of the emotions and antagonists. Well done!

I love it! I love the way I don't know where this story is going. The characters are very well written and believable. Well done, Jessica, I'm impressed.

You have created an awesome character, erotically charged throughout

This series is so fucking Hot. Mother of .... it is well composed and very well written. I am not normally a fan of series stories, but this one is so compelling. Thank You for the great entertainment.

Really well written and character driven, very erotic and believable. Excellent

Magnificent! I was taken completely by surprise when you had Ronni command Michelle to strip before even entering the Gardens. I could totally feel Michelle's apprehension and excitement in that scene. I was probably as wet as she was by the end of the story…

OH My God! Michelle is a blast! There would never be a dull moment with this girl. She is impulsive and unpredictable. She will really keep Charlie on his toes. She has a ton of trust in Charlie to be his Free Use Submissive. Of course he would never allow her to be put at risk. I am loving this series more and more with each chapter.