by Samuelx
You need to think of the poor folks at Literotica that have to read your shit in order to post it. Take a break, learn to write, get some help with your racist issues, then start writing again.
There is nothing wrong with the story. If you want to be a critic why don't you write something so someone can read it and provide you with ideas of your creativity.
Nice story... I don't think Muslim can do sucking? I love this story...