All Comments on 'Save The Last Dance For Me'

I was a bit rushed getting this one in before the Halloween Competition deadline. It made it in with 20 minutes to spare and the editing suffered. Corrections coming...

Loved how you started and how you finished. You need to continue this with Aimee really showing her true colours.

I loved it brilliantly written and very erotic it had the right effect on me please continue the story how Aimee's education progresses and the threesome's progress

Great story Chloe!

S

And here's me thinking Catholic girls did guilt...

...apparently not :)

GUY TO GAY THE PILOT WAY

Its a how tio story that works!

In no tune I was down to 98 pounds, watching THE VIEW instead of football and wrestling and hockey, and all the girls laugh at me now.

This was remarkably erotic and yet also touching and sweet.

I thought that suspension of disbelief was handled well

and that Aimee's spiral into commitment was, too.

I'd like to see more of Maddie and her dad in

a future chapter of what I hope will be an

ongoing look into all at the sins of the

Chinese Catholic congregation as

led by Father Auyeung with his

don't-ask-don't-tell attitude -

or is he somewhat more

active? I hope we will

find out, hopefully,

if you continue.

Please say

you will.

OK?

I have to say the reducing cascade is quite hard to do ... well done on that - I thought it was a nice touch!

This is exactly the kind of reason you are one of the few that I follow. It would be easy to go all Editor over the spelling, punctuation and grammar, but really, that's why it works for me. It's like a stream of consciousness from an 18-year-old part Good Girl, part Free Spirit with all the attendant imperfections. As another comment noted, not much Willing Suspension of Disbelief required and Aimee's spiral, following her desire to honor her mother, is well done. Congratulations on another (hopefully) winner!

This story was well done and very enjoyable. It looks to me like you've got some other stories out of this:

- Why did the priest give the father the keys??

- What happened with the boyfriend??

- How's this work out longer term?

- The love life of the father and mother must have been interesting!

Thanks!

Wow, best ever! So hot.. loved the cascading styles, loved the constant mind reading and action. Took you right there.

One of the best individual pieces I've read in a while.

Chloe,

You never disappoint!

Well crafted tale - including first-time, incest, Church and debauchery into a single long story made for a particular delight. Thank you very much !

Wishing you well in the contest !

My goodness, Chloe, you have outdone yourself again! Such a hot story. I love the way the undercurrents of lust between fathers and daughters as well as boyfriend and girlfriend are described in such loving detail. And the full out sex is rendered so erotically. Really hot! Thank you for this stimulating story, and I hope there will be more chapters to come!

A few grammar errors and spelling errors but all in all it was a great story!! Love the ones that are multiple pages. Is there going to be another chapter where Aimee and Brad "consummate" their relationship with daddy watching and with her and Mr. Lui? If so will it also include Maddie and daddy while Aimee and Kurt are together? Has the possibilities for a great next chapter!!! I gave this one 5 ***** Good luck!!

Enjoyed the development of the story and looking forward to continuation. Did the two girls get together and compare notes (so to speak) on what happened with each of them after their meeting in the restroom following what were hot make out sessions for both of them with their fathers? Will Kurt bring Maddie with him when they get together? So many ways this can go. Take it slow and develop the many tracks.

Your writing of the feeling of the connection with the mother was very spot on. Lost my wife a year ago and yet still feel she is looking over my shoulder at times and giving her advice or help.

Really enjoyed this lighthearted but erotic contest story. I'm sure it will rank highly.

Chloe, yet again you have come up with an absolute gem - a fantastic story, thank you so much for sharing

A pretty hot story that suffered from too much repetition and being dragged out too far.

Do you like the Michael Bublè version of "Save the last dance for me?" I like to sing that in karaoke.

More if I could give them. Chloe I so enjoy your style of writing. Some say repetitive. I say enhancing. Don't change a thing in your style. It sets you apart from all others. The first one I read was September Blue and I was hooked on your writing. I'm working my way through all of them and I will always vote even if I don't leave a comment. I'll do better. Maybe a short one but something to let you know you have a big fan in me. When the naysayers get you down remember this. "It's your story. You can write it any way you want."

If I see the author is Chloe Tzang, You can bet your bottom dollar I'll be reading it sooner or later. Hopefully sooner. XO, Sweets

Chrissie

TBC

You are so much redundant. Every paragraph is filled with "dad/daddy", you use the same periods all over again and it gets so damn frustrating and hard to read.

I really don't know how I reached the end.

Where is Chinese takeout ch6?

Is there any hope left?

Working on chapter 6 now. Before any of you die from heartbreak.

You rock!

Chloe-- Great touch to start and end the read with those lyrics from the 60's song.

This was my first read of your work, and a most enjoyable one at that. The story seemed in need of some good editing of grammar, spelling and punctuation, but you have already addressed that oversight in your comment below. Although your writing style is certainly atypical with the run-on sentences and too much repetition, you have written an excellent story. Character and plot development draw the reader into the story, and the erotic sexual descriptions were smoking hot.

Clearly a five-star effort from a five-star author! I hope you win the contest.

I thoroughly enjoyed this. Are you going to continue this story?

Will we ever get a peek of whats happening in the other room or will this just be a one off story?

Chloe, you are a terrific writer. I've just found your stories on Literotica, I want you to know how much I appreciate them.

Chloe, hands down you are my favorite writer here on Literotica. And through my time on here I have my list and they are excellent at their story telling. It took awhile but I have read them all as well as this incest story, of which I loved, your the best!

As a Chinese American dude, it was extra spicy, lol.

Happy you started writing and happy to have found you, keep up the great work!

Would like to see.. err read about the night of her date with Brad. Come to think of it, her first night with Mr. Liu as well. Anyway, you write it... you don't write it... thanks for this one, I really enjoyed it!!!

What can I say, your plots get better and better. I don't know how you manage to write about one nights pleasuring over so many pages. I probably couldn't even manage one page.

Thanks for yet another brilliant tale your writing just gets better. I feel that I am an interloper spying on their pleasuring,i can see, smell, and hear them long after they've finished.

I hate to say this but you're wasted here on Lit and I don't want to see you go but I hope your non-Lit activities come to fruition, you deserve that.

This one screams out for another chapter. I'd love to see her explore with Maddie, Mr. Liu, and be introduced to anal, just like her mom. ;) 5 stars all the way!

Every time I read what I think is your best work, you come up with something better. This one is ultra hot, and I don’t usually like incest stories.

You are the best writer on Lit!

Any update on your other series? Jeongs Frosh ball and Takeout are great reads that I hope get some new chapters soon.

I am sad that I did not get to read this at the time you needed me to so I could give you my vote. As usual fantastic and Should be added to.

This hits almost all my spots. If daddy gets her last cherry in part two my happiness will be complete lol. Maybe for the Valentine’s Day contest? I’m just sayin, it’s right around the corner lol.

Extremely awesome that you’re being published as well. Congratulations!

EriktheAwful

(Login hates me today for some reason)

I was Wow'd, I was hard the whole story. I'm very stingy with 5's but you got one. Now back to read more of your stuff.

Beautiful and so passionate... we are all waiting for more!

Thank you!

First time I've read one of your stories and definitely not the last! Really enjoyed it; thanks for writing it for all of us to enjoy. Now I know why this one has a high score; I gave it 5 stars which is unusual for me. Well written and edited too.

Excellent story, hot as all hell, very well done.

That said, for some strange reason, while the story of Aimee's desperate thirst was quite compelling, part of me is quite interested in seeing things from Maddie's perspective, what with the general vibe I get from her of a good girl who is also thirsty for her daddy. I dunno, i have this idea in my mind that unlike Aimee's desperate thirst that was sated by her dad, Maddie's thirst is more... monofocused, perhaps, and not quite as desperate?

Ah, the ramblings of an old man. Please disregard if it was too silly. :P

Anyway I read this story from time to time and I recommend it to people. Great flow, great story and word choice, it's not a chore to read it at all. Great stuff, keep it up~

I just found your stories and this was the first I've read.

I loved it!

The pace, the story, even the style was like I was listening to an 18yr old finding herself :)

Thank you

XXX

Great story!

Sorry, stopped when they started talking about sharing (not my thing). Up until then I was fascinated and then the letdown.

WOW! Another one goes onto my favorites list. I loved it.

Very well written and a very sexy story, however, I found that I could read every 3rd or 4th paragraph and I doubt that I missed any of the intensity of those special moments, or missed anything important to the plot line.

Still, very well written by a talented author.

A very sexy story and I especially liked your unique voice in telling this story. 5/5*

⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️ I already gave you 5 stars, so I'll give you 6 here!