All Comments on 'Saving Savannah'

got 3 pages in and gave up...

Since the most vocal element of your recent fan base is comprised primarily of Melvins and Zekes, I am worried that this abrupt departure from the formulaic offerings of the past few months is an indication of your intent to go on hiatus. Perhaps the return to DQS caused you to "up your game" so to speak. Thanks for a damn good story and hope to see you again next week.

Sorry, you need to get to the point

I for one found this to be a good, albeit long offering. In my view it's in keeping with the character telling the story. Anyone who's ever been in conversation with one knows that a Southern woman can take 3 days to tell you about her 15 minute phone call to her sister!

I seem to be in a minority...I loved each of the 13 pages. I laughed and got choked up and everything in between. Keep it up.

This is your best to date. I enjoyed all of your characters, even the bad guys. It's not often that a story left me feeling this good. As to the length, I was sorry it was over. Thank you.

Yes it was long, but the story was gripping. I am glad to see such a unique well written tale from you. Not the same old, same old, cookie cutter stuff.

Very refreshing, superb job!!!! Highly creative, and extremely entertaining. I am not sure about the names of some of the characters though, Judge Wapner? LOL

Thank you!

M1

This is the best story this week and possibly one of the best I've ever read. This was more like something I'd pay for then something I'd expect to find on a free story site. There were flawed but likable characters well turned phrases and unexpected twists in the story. I copied the story to read again in the future even though I myself am one of them white women

Really enjoyed it.

I've read all your stories and this is my favorite so far. Nice use of humor to keep it

from being too heavy. And I'm a sucker for a happy ending.

I for one didn't like this at all, and the last few you have done have gone downhill in my opinion. I don't like the whole from a womans perspective and you have been doing that way too much. Read a couple of pages and gave up.

You are a better writer than that so please write better, sheesh.

First, as someone who hasn't posted here, I appreciate your regular efforts. Without you, DQ Steele, and a half dozen others, this site wouldn't be worth coming to, so thanks for that. That being said, I feel like this story, along with the last few, have felt of a piece. Not that I haven't enjoyed them. I just feel like I'd like to read something different from you. The recent stuff has been from the woman's point of view, and has had a certain flavor that while gripping for one, maybe two stories, just doesn't hold up as a steady diet. Maybe mix it up a little? Personally, I think you do the man's viewpoint a little better, with the male narrators having more subtlety and shading. Your women tend to be less fully developed and do this "women as illogical creatures" thing, whether they are "good guys" or "bad guys." That works a lot better for me when they aren't telling the story. Anyway, that's just my two cents. Keep at it, because writers like you make this site worth visiting.

What a unique perspective on a story, especially the way Vannah goes from being the antagonist to the protagonist by the end of the story. I can't help but feel that Greg used his fear of racism to mask his "namby-pamby" personality.

Now that was a GREAT story. You can do as many like that as you want to. A great way to look at several "Old South" things and just a flat fun read. A 5 for sure.

HATED IT, whats happened to you and your really good stories, I am sorry I have wasted my time

I also got several pages in, saw it was 13 pages long and realized I couldn't handle that much more.

It's partly me but I can't handle this much dumbness and triviality. I get the basics, Greg took in Savannah but has a hangup over permanent relationships. Savannah is a free association thinker, somewhat interesting at times, but disconnected from reality. The rest of it is endless details about not too much. I even get that this is a comedy with Ben Matlock, Judge Wapner, Ally McBitch (McBeal) from the city, Marcus Welby, etc. If you ran this crap through most courts the Judge would probably hold you in contempt.This is more a problem for a Counselor than a Judge. I jumped to the end to see if the end justified reading the rest and felt no real inspiration to do so.

I tried, I really did but it feels like living in a mental institution. Hi, my name is Napoleon. Want to play Risk? I usually play with Alexander but he's sick today and isn't felling so Great.

To be fair, I don't like most situation comedies either because the level of intelligence seems to serve as preparation for the Hulu aliens.

But fairly chewy...

Great story but to long it should have been split in two

Read all your stories, most of them several times and look forward to your new postings. Why? Because you can write a story which has characters, descriptions and which hangs together. What you dont present to your audience is a flimsy framework with a a lot of unbelieveable sex hung on it. I have enjoyed most, but not all, of your stories and to those who say whats happened to you I say look at it like you would with music..love some songs hate others - even by the same band. This is a long story but as someone with the time to read it I prefer to have the end available rather than wait especially when the writing is of this quality. Keep going, dont stop experimenting and become a boring formula writer. Thanks

Half your readers are ignorant hillbillies who are going to be offended by your lighthearted lampooning. Some of them have a uncle/daddy who was eaten by a gator and others have a captive chained in the basement. Great story but incoming low scores.

its Saturday here, I just spent my morning reading a really gr8 story, ty, love, passion, joy, happiness, and success. I could rabbit on about all sorts of stuff, but its a bloody good read. ........... ty

And that was after 3 pages.

How can anyone read this drivel?

for all to see and contemplate. TK U MLJ LV NV

As much as I like your stuff, have to catalog this for future reading. Only so much time for escapism.

Too Long as all your stories. I think you should buy a strap-on dildo and go fuck yourself--May you computer crash.

This was a brilliantly conceived and well written story. An original framing of a story. I feel sorry for any woman who is connected to the losers who describe this as 'too long' or 'boring'. These guys feel that sex is about getting it on and getting it over. The women I know would never give them a second chance and would describe them as 'One pump chumps.'

Please keep writing and ignore the chumps.

Another SS6 masterpiece. Too little Mustangery until the last page. The dead body masquerading as Melvin was probably deus ex machina. Also, how did Beulah know he lived on AND was seeking revenge? Granted, being considered dead means he could be moderately open, but still, he has few resources. I'm not even sure how he would know he had been declared dead??? Does the paperboy go that deeply into the bayou?

the south and I loved it and some of the comments yes your right it can take three days nobody I know has ever been eaten by a gator and the only girls I chain up want to be there,but he did capture what yankees will think about southeners when they move down here.

I'd hate a woman that's been raped but Savannah is a major Bitch. Really nice attempt SS but you didn't only miss the ball on this one you were swinging the wrong way, Savannah was a whore and completely despicable person who should have been tried for at least manslaughter the law needs to be black and white or it is broken though Greg should also be charged as he was present when they intentionally killed a man (it is not self defense when your attacker can no longer fight). Savannah was a horrid character that cared nothing for anybody else "fuck Pete the only people that matter are you and me" yet wasn't she complaining about the people that just drove on past her when her life was in danger. Fuck SS I'm sorry but this character just completely got on my nerves a horrible person that wants everything her way and she will cry, whine, bitch, threaten till she gets it and you give her a happily ever after that my friend is horrendous.

Great job I think she saves him ,

I am sure the rednecks will get their noses bent out of joint,calling you all kinds of names for "lyin" about honorable real americans down yonder and so forth,but this one was a good one.Alligators might protest at the thought of one of their own eating trash,but other then that,quite different and worth the time to read it.

Is it because he is incapable of using sentence-ending punctuation?

very well written piece

You stupid fucker if you ever mention my famIly again I will find a way to track you down and kill you. Never ever make fun of a person that has lost parents you stupid inconsiderate bitch!

I mostly enjoy your stories. Perhaps I failed to appreciate the true value of this tale. Maybe it was a great story, as others have suggested. I only know what I enjoy and this was not it. I generally like you and your writing style, but I would be less than honest if I did not say - THIS WAS NOT FOR ME!

If you manage to stop fucking your son you nonce and your mommy/sister lets you out of the basement maybe you'll find your way to the interstate and get run over like roadkill. Sad day for all of us I'm sure. LOL

go get laid dude, take some $$ from your mommy's purse and buy a blowjob. Threatening to kill anons is the funniest and lamest shit ever. I guess the "inbred = stupid" thing is really true...

I loved this story! The characters rang true. I Think of all your stories, I like this one the most. I imagine the racist on this site might have a problem with it. ( tough shit) I hated to come to the end. Somehow, you keep getting better. Keep riding mustang man and I'll keep reading. 5 stars

1) oldwanker and the rest of the ignorant rednecks and hillbillies are either foaming at the mouth or conspicuously absent which leads to 2) not one comment from that weirdo duna who leaves a dozen comments per SS06 story. Best story of the year.

Just shows you that whatever he writes about is a good read

Thanks

Congratulations. I think this is your best story yet.

and is shown to be accurate and working. TK U MLJ LV NV

Words alone do not a story make.

5 stars, SS06!! This is a great story about how good overcomes evil and racial bias can be worked through and, in some cases, changed for the better. I thought O.I.N.D. was your best, but, so far, it's a very close 2nd to Saving Savannah.

I'm glad Melvin was killed by a 'gator. Anything else would have been too good for him.

Considering Greg is running several businesses on a farm reminded me of another story--I believe from SS06--but I can't remember the name of the story. Also, I love the humor/lampooning in the character names.

Too bad so many mullets crapped out a couple pages in, this is not just one of you best stories but one of the best period. Outstanding work, thanks for submitting.

Thank you. Great stuff as mostly always.

The plot was decent but the story flopped around like badly made jello - no tightness, varied consistency and in all a poor attempt.

The legion of closet cuckolds only enjoy 1 type of story; simplistic revenge without plot or character development and heaps of suffering administered by an insecure and small-dicked cuckold. This is not your story cuckboys, move on. If you enjoy advanced elements of storytelling, read on.

Depth of main character was explained expertly without dwelling too much on the unpleasantness. We saw enough to understand without feeling too dirty; well done author since that subject matter is often uncomfortable. Contrast with other characters added dimension to all, both through portraying differences and similarities.

Lastly, contrasting the over-the-top Tea Party hicks with the average bass-fishing southern GOPers was handled with humor and insight. As in all good Stangstar stories the humor and pop-culture references served to add an element of brevity to somewhat serious and difficult subject matter. Well done.

Posted in any other category this story would receive top marks. In this last bastion of humorless insecurity and narrow-mindedness, it represents many of the same things that add to the already castrating fear those eunuchs embrace. A daring, provocative and well written and edited piece (only 1-2 errors in a story this long is damn good).

Far, far too long and far, far too convoluted.

I guess I'm simplistic, Not really seeing the convulions. It is one of you longer stories, I shudder to think how long it really was. A really enjoyable read, not Your finest, but really good. (going to have to dig out my thersurs)

I wait for Thursdays, and then you make me wait till Friday. Yes this was different, no bitches burned in the writing of this story(at least none the hero is married to). Long, but still a great read. Keep it up!

5 or 6 pages is enough. I enjoy your work but stories are stories and books are books.

Wonderfully written engorssing story wih great twists and turns. Thank you .

On one side, we have the "attention deficit disorder" crowd, who apparently can't really FOLLOW a story that takes more than five minutes to read, and actually has a plot full of twists and turns.

It takes time to write a story of this length - time to develop the characters so that they come off appearing to be real human beings rather than cardboard cut-outs, and time to create such an intricate plot and weave disparate story-threads into a tapestry that's gorgeous to behold. There are very few authors on this site who have the ability to manage such a feat, and I'm glad that Stang's still submitting his tales for our enjoyment. This one, in particular, was a masterpiece.

Proof is in the absence of illiterate comments by duna and other closet cuckolds. As well written as anything this author has done but since the main guy doesn't run away like a little bitch and the woman doesn't die in poverty from AIDS the usual cuck commenters are conspicuously absent.

@ Anon I am here.

@ Dear Anon your problem is you were a loverboy for a married woman with 3 young children and her husband hit you with besball bat. You was in hospital for 2 weeks. The married woman is exwife after divorce (her husband is balls) and she got the custody. Her exhusband pay small children support money, because his wage is low. The exhusband remarried with another divorced woman with 2 children and he must help the new family as well. Your earlier sexpartner exwife lost her job and the broken family lives (3 cmall children) in poverty. You give them wide berth, whe you see them. You have new woman and she can say angry words if you assist this broken family.......you are so rat Anon..

A great job of writing! I have had the experience with "groupies' types in my past and?, @with the love of my life a fine lady like Savanna ... ur writing is always entertaining and I for one hope u keep it up! How about character along the lines pod Jack Ryan with some heavy political overtones in the story? Keep writing! AB8C

Sad week for that loser, his little mancrush on SS06 evaporated. Nothing like a broken bromance to rain on your gay pride parade. Great fucking story MustangMan, nice to see you're capable of writing more than that closet cuck shit for insecure little pukes who get off on revenge. 5*

I save links for all of my favorite stories so I can re-read and share them with friends and this one definitely goes in the list.

Thank you

JR

This story was pretty well written and it was very entertaining. But the story lacked eroticism, Savannah was not married to Greg (not together long enough for Common Law, in those few states that still have that rule), and in truth, this belongs in Interracial Love, not Loving Wives. I wonder if the story was deliberately placed in LW to get the feedback, which is more extensive than in other categories. I also think this story was excessively verbose and repetitive. I do appreciate the effort and I feel this, with a tune up, would be a short story worthy of Esquire or Reader's Digest, depending upon one's perspective. Thanks for writing.

Your outrageous Southern girls are always a treat, and telling this one in Savannah's voice gave you the chance to build up the character. It wasn't super-deep, this is comedy-romance, but you make her real. Twit commentators who think this is another example of "stupid female" characters on your part don't know Southern girls too well - not thinkin' in a straight line don't mean dumb by a long shot. Gotta admit my reaction to Savannah made me think of that old Becky Hobbs song, "Are There Any More Like You Where You Came From?"

I can finally and justifiably award you 5 glorious stars for this effort!

You still had the spastic woman, the terrified man, and a whole host of mentally crippled characters, but somehow, you managed to put them all together in a tale that was actually entertaining, different, and a basically great old rollicking, stumbling adventure.

This is the type of story you ought to be writing!! It's still way too long, and has soooo much over explaining and repetition going on but there was enough originality in there to maintain a high level of interest.

Cheers!

and i write some really crazy shit so i know crazy. good character development. well woven story. there was no way you could make her more of a victim than you did and no way to make him more reluctant and not reluctant at the same time. quirky names added to it. like always you get a 5.

But overall pretty good. What rubbed me personally a little wrong is that the guy is a total wimp (although not the cheated upon kind) but maybe she needs that after what she was through. I just wished he had a more actice part in them coming together instead of sulking like a three year old. But thats just me i guess.

But what a great ride it was -

Savannah is a great character and too real to be ignored. I know that society - was visiting the outskirts in Jackson MS just 2 weeks ago in fact.

Way too many folks down there live in spaces that barely interact with the rest of society and the rules there are very different - not all as stereotypical as the ones you showed but anything but what most Americans expect.

Well written for the most part a few errors and yes a bit repetitive on some topics but the context usually called for it -

Great ending and a nice one too -

Thanks for all that effort shared -

It was 3 pages too long but it was worth it. A messed up tale about real life that is all about two people fighting for each other.

I don't use this American word often as it's overused, but this was simply awesome. 5 stars!

Stang has written a story in which the woman wasn't some evil whore. Maybe there is some hope for you after all.

You did it again. It took three tries to get to her telling of the tell but after that I could not put er down.(except to wipe the tears from my eyes) All of your standard elements are still there and it is still a must read. Thank you so ever much one more time again!

I like stang as a writer but I hate blacks mixed with white stories and in real

life. I view the women as dirty being with a black. a 1 on this story.

the story was ????????????? lost me to word verbose, by the end i was just hoping they would blow up ..blow up real good..huck huck -that was for all you redneck racest pigs.."i dont like blacks and whites mixing" really..really,Stang keep writing but yeah this was just to long for a simple idea for me at least, but you did piss off a racest or two.. good for you an angry racest is easier to see in a crowd.

People seriously have problems with black and white people together?

What a terrible attitude to have.

If they are happy and love one another, really who does it impinge on?

I liked this story :)

Overall it was well done.

A couple of problems, though.

1. A tobacco plantation in Louisiana? Lol.

2. A cliff in the swamp? That's even funnier.

One of my favorite stories of yours.

Thank you.

thank you for keeping my faith in "the right thing to do" alive ....gp ham

I love your BTB stories, but this one came out of left field and smacked me. This story is just the best.

Good writing as well as reading. Liked the story. A shame Vanna got knocked up by the sociopath bastard, but then again that's the plot. Cheers!

Such a great story. It had me confused until the end almost, which I am sure was the authors intent. But everything came out OK in the end so I am a very happy reader.

I don't like black-white pairings IRL, and usually have less than no interest in reading about them, especially on a sex site. Just not my thing. I was annoyed when the interracial coupling was first introduced, figuring this was simply gratuitous, but shortly it became obvious that it was integral to the story and there's no way this story could be told without it.

And what a story! How could you read this and not love Savannah, hate and despise the Druckers, admire Greg, and pity the judge?

Savannah was fleshed out fairly well as a 3-D character. Greg was much less developed - with no significant backstory, it was never really clear what his motivations and reluctances were. The Druckers were well-done cardboard caracatures, and the rest of the cast were nonentities.

I thoroughly enjoyed the ride and sadly awarded a 5, sadly because I couldn't find a higher rating. Well done, and thanks!

VisualPerv

what color is their love? They are two people who finally found each other - and that is the whole meaning of that four letter word L O V E!

What a change from the usual SS06 stories about a pathetic female fucking the whole town and a romantic hero ..... this one was a real heart stealer ..a breath of fresh air ...I had tears in my eyes , tears don't have any colour ... ! Thanks SS06 !

I have been a huge fan of SS06 for some time and this story took me through the full gauntlet of emotions. This is my favorite yet. Excellent job!!!!

5 stars, nuff said.

This one I didn't care for. I got about a third of the way through and

finally figured out that this story had become....tedious.

Blah, blah, blah, with nothing happening. and no end in sight.

I baled, I just couldn't take any more of it.

Love most of SS06's stuff, but not this one.

1 star.

I have to say that this is one sad story of abuse I bailed after her father exposed himself Jail that bastard! I then read the last page so you see I have no time for assholes who Fuck little girls or boys ! Sorry I can't comment on this story! Love you all! GREG. OH I can't give you my award for your story SORRY

do what ever it takes to keep him. TK U MLJ LV NV

This would make a good movie!

Lol

filth

romance

Just doesn't cut it.

I'm a sucker for unlikely romance.

I thoroughly enjoyed this tale. Great characters, greater dialogue, unique plot for this genre'.

When I first started reading this story, I pictured Savannah as black and Greg as white. It was something in their dialogue and attitude. When I got to the part in the court room that tells she’s white and he’s black, I thought “now that don’t make no sense!” Anyway. It’s a good story. That was my only point of contention.

Not your typical SS06 story, but very enjoyable, nonetheless.

One comment seems particularly off. Savannah's dialogue never felt black to me. In fact, she sounded a lot like the girls I went to high school with in South Georgia.

I tried, I really did. But after a page and a half I knew there was no way in hell I would ever finish this story, so I gave it up and bailed. The “Savannah” character was possibly one of the most annoying of any character I’ve ever read about here. And I just couldn’t take any more.

Loved Savannah. Insanely jealous ,posessive ,and over protective . But (Hey) aren't all the good ones a little crazy.

After the first page or so because I knew sure as hell there was going to be as Paul Harvey used to say "...the rest of the story." Judge Wapner and Ben Matlock, at least this time you dragged us screaming into color tv and thank you for not giving Greg the name Bill.

"Things may not always be what they seem, but most of the time they just fucking are."

Yep, I think the good ones are always a bit off kilter but in this case it was earned through no fault of her own. A really good job taking care of the fuckwad family, too bad her family back home didn't get intimate with some lead or a couple of alligators. I was pleasantly surprised by so few racist comments as far back as I went. Signed: BTW

Meh

This story is engaging and kept my interest.

Errors:

Louisiana and Alaska are the only remaining states that do not have counties. Florida changed quite awhile back, leaving La. as the only state with parishes.

“There was no affirmative action...”. Greg has a Mustang built in 2012? And he was 29-32 years old. That means that by the time he was in college that affirmative action had existed for over 40 years.

Frankly, for about 25-30 years the South has been LESS racist than the northern states. There hasn’t been a lynching in well over 50 years, yet the race baiters want us to believe that it is an ongoing problem. Yes, stupid people still exist. Just take a look at Congress.

Still, I enjoyed the story and the overall presentation of the region was satisfactory, especially coming from a Michigan boy.