All Comments on 'Schrödinger's Bitch'

Loved the ending!

5

Brilliant Writing

why is he leaving the house?

Very good. 5⭐.

Simply superb writing; thank you.

Aside from your usual brilliant writing, you get 5 stars for your use of quantum physics in human relationships alone.

An easy 5 stars :)

Excellent story.

Yes, indeed, never goes unpunished. Glad to know why I made you a favorite.

Or, since you start with the brilliance of quantum mechanics, maybe her parting shot should echo that beginning. "You right," she said, "we have been entangled for years on a fundamental level, so, in a way, I guess you've been fucking Craig too."

A novel and unforgettable application of the great paradox. Witty, but poignant, compelling. Well done. Thank you.

For such a short story, that was amazingly good.

Well done.

It was a great lesson on Quantum theory and entanglement. I never knew literotica can teach me that. Are you teacher of Physics?

Excellent. Nice way to draw physics into the story

Well done.

Thanks for writing

Nothing like a Big Bang huh? Well done! 5⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐

I do love a funny one. I especially loved the way the wife reacted.

He "burned" her with Science!! Bravo!!!

Wow what a powerful short story. 4.5 *

Exceptionally well done. Love the Quantum mechanics bit. Please write another!

Really well done short. It's really hard to pull off a complete story in such few words but you did it well! 4.8*

That was uniquely different.

nice!

Good idea for the plot line.

Nice way of finishing it

Liked it!!

That was tidy. Made an old scenario feel pretty fresh.

Quick and painless. Of course we missed the pain she felt

Bravo, unique and original with proper resolve.

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6****** Hooyah, Salutes

Five stars for the last line alone.

Very well done. 5*

Learned about Schrodinger's Cat on Big Bang Theory. Excellent writing, Excellent Story. 10 Big Blazing Stars. Thanks, Buster2U

High price for sex that had the significance to a morning dump.

Joy to read. Long enough. I’ve heard of schrodingers Cat before but looked it up to refresh. Very cool use of it.

And the cat found another bag. LOL.

Very interesting working of a interesting debate into a close up interchange. Well done.

Thanks for the mental jiggle from decades ago.

Interesting end, that only by his knowing did it make such a difference. If he hadn't learned of their affair, he would still be happily married.

"Ignorance is bliss."

An interesting 5* story. I'll give our cat an extra treat this evening. I'm not going to tell him about Schrödinger's Cat. He's too young for that kind of knowledge.

This is a great physics lesson - and a great story. As an engineer, I can't fault any of the logic.

Brutal. They never see the downside, do they? Sorry, Francis, If you divorce the slut (and we all know that's what she is) I hope you find a decent, honest, loyal woman. They're out there. Trust me. 5 Stars. The Bear is a little morose. No happy ending, yet. Maybe, down the road. But please, no reconciliation. thank you.

The BEAR

Excellent story idea, well told. 5* I don't recall physics being a significant part of any other LW story that I've read. Kudos.

Neat story, well done.

5***** Excellent story! Write On!

Liked it, though it would have had a nice twist if the bags he packed were hers, and he helped load them in her car.

Man these short stories lately are good but could be better with more dialogue

Well written story but the length hurt it. The wife cheating was a lot more realistic than the slut ray, it was believable that boredom would allow her to do it.

But the story lacks emotional depth. In a case like this where the cheating wasn't venal, and had been once a year, there should have been some conflict hom that came out as anger. Other than the cursing he is too even. And the wife might sniffle but she is just too resigned, too emotionally neutral. Kind of reminds me of he end of a swedish film.

Not saying this should be a reconciliation story but given the circumstances it wouldn't be this easy. I liked the quantum physics analogy, that is a new one here.

What I liked most was not the story elements, but how very well it was told. 5*****! all the way.

⭐⭐⭐ The manifesto style quantum explanation killed it for me. He just sounded like a buffoon who was really impressed with himself and a creepy fondness for someones schnauzer.

5 stars

"I've blocked him. Not that it might mean that much to you now, but I felt you ought to know. He was never your replacement; just a stupid, meaningless diversion from a boring evening alone in an hotel."

"No dear. He means a lot for you, lot more than me. Laughing at clueless stupid husbands or wifes cheated upon is not the only form of disrespect. Breaking marital vows particularly "forsaking others" just after marriage and, walking

into his bed on the first opportunity of meeting some one, making it annual ritual and planning to take away important occasions like birthdays, anniversaries, valentines, Christmas New years etc from spouses and giving to paramour are huge disrespect. Even your decision to breakup after this valentine is not for me but for HIS wife being pregnant. Now that me and his wife are out of your way, canceling your rendezvous or blocking him does not make any sense. Certainly it is no favor to me or his wife. At best, it can be consideration for your next steady partner if the poor fellow is not always on tenterhooks thinking about you having another stupid, meaningless diversion from a boring evening alone in an hotel with another person whose wife is not pregnant"

Terrific story and a perfect use of Schrödinger’s cat. This is the second story I’ve read that uses the infamous cat to explain the unexplainable. Excellent! :DD

Nice, compact, and to the point.

Bingo..Sad of his situation though.. Honourable men like him should not face this kind of misery in life.. Evil world we are living in.

It's full of pain and beautiful at the same time, really. Thanks.

Great story

Actually well written and well resolved. No going back from unfaithful for 4 years. And yes, intent counts as the 4th year.

Beautifully presented ending of a marriage

It would be nice to what Craig told his wife.

Now that's how you write a short story. And I loved that Schrongirer's Cat made an appearance. His marriage at the start of the story was both alive and dead... Damn - why couldn't I think that one up... Well done

Very good short.

Very good. Liked it .

Usually very short stories leave things unanswered. Not this one. Very good!

Nice.

Thanks @OnlyInMyMind.

Even if she stopped this time, having gotten away with it she would have done it again at a later.

Wonderful!

Traitor takes ownership of the mess they create and doesn't fight the truth.

Nice one.

A unique twist on the confrontation scene.

Where's the punishment? The lover probably lost a child and a wife. What did the wife lose? Obviously nothing of importance to her since she was cheating almost from day 1. A very unsatisfying ending.

I the vast. cliche’ world of the cheaters handbook, this tale is a breathe of fresh air.

My only issue is his leaving the home. I hope they at least split it 50/50 or if a rental he walks free.

This guy and CindyTV have to be about my favorite writers on this site. Their protagonists rarely take any shit, act realistically and decisively. I appreciate that the cheating cunt in this story wasn't given a lot of crying over the consequences of her actions.

"I went back to his room for a coffee and... " - Either a flat-out lie, or she's lying to herself. You don't go back to his room for a coffee!

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"It was just meaningless sex." -It's always "meaningless," or "it meant nothing."So why do it?!

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I know I'm usually a hard-ass, but this strikes me as a marriage that could be saved with counseling.

"maybe her parting shot should echo that beginning. "You right," she said, "we have been entangled for years on a fundamental level, so, in a way, I guess you've been fucking Craig too."

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Yeah, the MC fucked really bad the stupid lover Craig too: his marriage and family is fucked for good, as well. And all of this for their immature teenagers irresponsability and blind selfishness. Time for reaping what they sow.

Ahh, so in the end. It's his fault.

A unique approach to explaining the effects of infidelity. And an excellent story - thanks.

Love the irony.

(And your writing is as superb as usual; please keep gifting us with it.)

MLJ

Original, fits neatly into the 750 paradigm. Well done!

I very much appreciate the quantum mechanics background, which is both accurate and strangely applicable. Well written story. However, analogizing to quantum entanglement does not require MC to leave wife. It was obvious that the cheating was adventitious and about to be terminated, and wife was remorseful and honest. Story could have done a bit more with that.

She was really stringing him along.

Very nicely done and it was just plain fun. A quick look at how a clueless husband, doing a lovely thing for the love of his life, turns up to be the factor of infidelity in his marriage. This could have been a bit longer, showing us the aftermath, but the marriage is over, no reconciliation... 4 out of 5 stars for a good story thru science...

Brilliant. Five stars.

The Big Bang theory made Schrodinger's cat famous. Your use of the cat and physics made Sheldon happy. Well played.

One of THE best stories in LW !

Funny how cheaters look back and describe the sex as average, or just something to pass the time. Bullshit. If it was that bad, then why risk it? People can't be this damn stupid in real life.

Well it appears that the cat was dead in that box, it does introduce another interesting mathematical concept…., Entropy. The MC’s sandcastles certainly dissolved apart when the truth was revealed. Good job! Five stars!

Love it - especially the punchline!

Good stuff. 5 stars. Thanks for posting. Looking forward to more.

A clever but sad story. Cheaters will always give the game away sooner or later.

Original version of well trod plot. I think wifey accepting instantly her fate was refreshing.

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5 *****

Brilliant twist in a random universe

In response to Lifestyle66, the full quote is “Where ignorance is bliss, ‘tis folly to be wise”. Even if he didn’t know she is still untrustworthy and unworthy. Traits bound to surface at a later date.

In my closed box are two scores, four and five. Until I open the box, you will not know the positions and statuses of the two.

JPB

I meant, states, not statuses. My bad.

JPB

Creative. Sad. Well told. Thanks.

The problem with Schrodinger's cat is that a live cat in a box will make a racket, proving it's alive, collapsing the probability wave.

Schrödinger‘s cat name was Karma. lol

Captcha

This was great!

I really enjoyed your dialog and how you paced this! Thank you!

The Quantum angle was novel!

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Be well!

"there should have been some conflict him" - seriously, on top of having to deal with a cheating skank, MC now has to deal with clueless idiots like @njlauren who don't have a first idea that all people's emotional processing, AND response to it, differs, and apparently if he isn't throwing things like he's on PMS, he's not legit? The wife is perfectly predictable, she knows she fucked up, she doesn't love him sufficiently so she's not too upset at the loss in emotional sense and she hasn't invested too much into this relationship yet so she's not too upset in rational sense. Some people just aren't screaming teenagers about things. Deal with the fact that not all humans are the same.

Yay, physics! Most unusual QM lesson ever!

waste of time for readers and the writer. sorry.

Great story . That last paragraph tells the entire sad story. Can’t say enough good about this one.

Excellent writing. If you eliminated the physics, you might have made it more powerful--most of readers don't know or care. But 5* for the plot and the writing.

Thanks for the read

Ah the mental masturbation that is modern physics in general, and the cat in the box in this particular story. Oh to cogitate on untestable theories, and hope the NSF grant on your brilliant "twine" modification to string theory comes through.

From physics to economics both can be a bitch.

Though widely known of not many realise that Schrödinger's Cat was an attempt at mocking the Copenhagen Interpretation (though the interpretation didn't have that title at that time) and it's stance on superposition.

Strangely it's economists not physicists who could have determined the state of the cat from outside the box.

If the box were to have fallen off the table it would have been easy for them to observe The Dead Cat Bounce.

I'll get my coat!

Why punish the unborn child? You want to divorce hubby and take him to the cleaners? Go for it; but murder?

There are a lot of reasons to abort a child, divorce isn’t one of them and if that’s the kind of woman she is, then Craig's better off without her.