by sr71plt
What a wonderful life it is, indeed. Thanks for the reminder. Nicely done!
For all that the story was nice, it felt hurried and shallow in a few places. I was surprized, given that you're a stickler for details that you missed a few typos, and awkwardly worded sentences. More in - while reading the flow wasn't quite there and a few sentences had to be reread to understand what you were trying to say. Over all I would have expected much more from you, though I am not - repeat, not - dissappointed in the short story that needed about three more Lit. pages to be truly complete. It is just my opinion - but I give it in the spirit of one writer to another. It needs a little bit more fleshing out and clean up of phrasing, but - nice story.
Let's face it: THAT's what Christmas is really about. A gift to people who could never struggle enough to get it on their own efforts.
-- KK in Texas
with more personal warmth and an elegant sense of style. On the other hand, your gay fiction strikes me as cool and uninvolved for the most part. Are you going in a new direction? Future stories will tell the tale.
Note that this is one segment of an interrelated series of standalone stories. Those wishing to read in order can travel the following route: “Second Honeymoon,” “Second Sister,” either “Second Christmas Tree” or “Second Chance,” and ending with “Second Sight.”
You've got a 58 year old guy, sitting here with tears in his eyes. I couldn't get off from work for the holiday week, so my (wonderful, loving, beautiful, caring, most-important-thing-in my-life) wife drove 500 miles by herself to visit the kids and grandkids. And so the old fart was sitting here feeling sorry for himself. I realize it was fiction (it was, wasn't it?), but it made me remember to count my blessings. Thank you for that. That one simple act of kindness is all it takes. Merry Christmas, Happy Hanukkah, Seasons Greetings to all
Unexpected but welcomed.
Thank you for such a sweet story.