by Lost Boy
A fun tale with a good mix of a variety of themes!
Keep up the good work!
Please more on this story. You're an excellent writer. I've enjoyed all your stories.
Seeing how intricate your other stories are I would love to see where this can go!!!
Ya know, I never really thought about what a SA meeting would be like. It wouldn't be like AA, would it? You could have all these people getting off on each others stories,like a mass enablement.
..., but I stopped with the first sex-scene. Let me explain: its not the writing itself, the descriptions of the act and whatnot, thats all nice and fine, I just got the impression that you did not make up your mind about what type of story you are writing here. You start off as first-person narrator, that tells a group of people about his experiences, but as he tells the story, suddenly he turns into the all-knowing narrator. If you started like that, it would make sense to inlcude stuff like he "took a deep breath and let out the anger and stress". If you tell about what happened to yourself you would not go to that lenght. Its different if a third person narrator explains it. Also, did he not just try to explain his first time falling for his step-daughter? How it all started? Does it make sense that he immediately fucks her when he lays his eyes on her with her mother present? As I said: building blocks are all there, but what you need is a coherent approach.
Mate u r a natural at this, Only one or two slight misspells but nothing two annoying. Keep up the good job mate.
It was a very HOT story and a great story but it could have been better and greater if you would have give the ages of the young girls.
I agree with Lagonda from (5) years ago...so you get a four(4)Star score for this. As I said on another story...run-on sentences, bad punctuation...
I DID finish this story...barely...🥴😢