All Comments on 'Sex, Cheating and Romance Ch. 01'

a relationship created from myths. TK U MLJ LV NV

but so far, nothing special. If the story is ready, why not post it in 2 of 3 chapters. Makes the reading smoother.

. . . these folks seem like real people. I'm not the biker type but I spent a lifetime in bars (unfortunately); I think you've characterised your bar environment well. If I spent six chapters with these folks I would know them well. Good job as usual; waiting for the rest with anticipation.

Not often this happens, but it does, and this is one of those times. Caught on the horns of a dilemma, Which to read (first) in the Genre of Loving Wives.

Stangstar's 11 Page opus ( he is a wordy guy, one can certainly say)..... Stultus' 60kb also-epic part- reprint, or this, DG's Part one of six threatened twisty-turny chapters. Three Quality Reads.

Quelle Dilemme

Cheers, and Thanks to all three

Kilroy

See, on their first "date" he did something different. I like the bit about her coming from a wealthy family.... At least they had jobs...

For us more queasy types I do not know if it was good idea to do her bare back considering the train she pulled the previous fortnight (?!!), in fact I do not feel that I would ever get over the first impression but considering that he is into it, I will just really be an outside observer and not identify with the protagonist..

But the characters were intriguing and well-developed. Keep going.

Huh?

But I'll screw anybody else's woman. Especially behind his back.

than Joe.

I wish you had extended it to two pages on the first go, but I've made that mistake before myself.

The characters seemed real, almost painfully so. Haven't felt any reason to like the protagonist except for the fact he's the protagonist.

Nitpick: Carlos' girl went from girlfriend to wife in the middle of the story, I believe.

I'm intrigued enough to continue. You should take a page from Stang's book and post it all at once, particularly if it is six pages. (Yes, I blew this rule too and I regret it)

I start DG Hear because SS06 has 11 pages. Interesting story as DG Hear generaly writes .

So far thanks for sharing.

Another Lit author who keeps churning out the stories, but gets no better as a writer. Here's an example:

"There were probably a dozen guys left in the bar after closing along with ten women, which Sheila was one of them."

Enough said.

Time to read on before I pass my judgement.

HA

Boring. I had to force myselft to keep reading.

It seems as if a relationship is forming and he is going to get crazy about her.

I feel sorry for guys that fall in love with sluts.

She'll eventually fuck over him, it's in her genes.

Thanks for the offering.

Relationship is doomed from the start.

He is a piece of shit for fucking married women and she is a gang bang whore.

LOL! Let the train wreck begin!

begging for trouble. Always keep the party girls separated in your mind from wife material.

and amongst that melodrama romance hangs around, TK U MLJ LV NV

Need to see where this is going. She used those famous last words, " it was only sex".

Reading again. This time through, it seems that they are both whores. Him as much as her.