All Comments on 'Shades of Blue'

The story was really good. Lots of detail, but you rushed the end, as if you where suddenly bored of it. You should have continued with the details all the way to the end.

I agree with the previous commenter. An excellent first submission but the ending was certainly too rushed. The denouement should, surely, be a languid unfolding of an essential component of good, erotic, writing. I am a fan of alwayswantedto and feel that this writer could, possibly, achieve a similar level. Particularly enjoyed the fact that it was in "english" and the local feel added a dimension. Thank you.

In the next part I hope you will vividly describe fucking your mother up the arse you cheap little mother fucker!

First Story, and so well written.

Excellent work.

I definitely want more to read from you.

A very competent and confident story, hot, sexy and topical! If this is really your first attempt at writing we have a powerful new writer in our midst - this is a story anyone could be rightly proud of writing; as a first offering, it is quite outstanding!

Thank you, five stars and much more, please!

THE INTRO TOOK YOU A LONG TIME. BUT THE STORY WAS GREAT, EVEN WITH THE SHADES OF GRAY NOT INCLUDED,I THINK YOU WOULD HAVE HAD A HIT. THEY ALWAYS LOVED EACH OTHER.AND A LITTLE PUSH FROM A BOOK DID IT. BUT AS I SAID THEY LOVED EACH OTHER, I THINK IT WOULD HAVE COME ABOUT SOONER OR LATER. AND PLEASE KEEP THIS STORY GOING. YOU HAVE A FAN. LAROC OF AGES

Like so many writers here, you seem to be insistent on forcing semicolons in. And, actually, you don't use them where you should be using them.

If you're so insistent on using semicolons, why not, you know, FIND OUT WHAT THEY'RE FOR?!

You're right, great erotica needs a well told story, it's not just about unrestrained sex. And this one ticks all the boxes. I suspect that you have been writing in one way or another for a long time, and this is a first class example of the erotic genre. Please keep going - a sequel to this story would be most welcome (Do you think you could involve the M&S sales lady in a threesome?) but clearly, any story you choose to write will be worth reading.

Thank you and congratulations (and don't worry about the semi-colons. This isn't an exercise in grammatical perfection, its about story telling, something you have done very well).

There has to be a second chapter that relates the 'date' itself and the night that follows it.

Wonderful story,looking foward to another story from you.

Excellent story, whether it's your first or not, I was quickly drawn into it. I agree with a previous comment that the end felt a bit rushed. I don't know whether you're not yet totally comfortable writing very explicit erotica, or whether you simply got tired of the story. A torrid love scene between mother and son would certainly have been in keeping with the distinction you made between 'porn' and 'erotica' since it would then have been a completely logical continuation of the story line.

Someone compared you to the writer 'alwayswantedto' for your steady build up of tension between mother and son; that's not faint praise.

Anyway, please keep writing, and if you can maintain this quality of writing you will soon have a very loyal following.

Good luck.

This is a very well written story. It show great grasp of character devlopment, attention to detail, a strong plot, and a sense of realism. You definitely brought your characters to life and made them part of the world they played in. I disagree that the ending was rushed. I firmly believe judging by the caliber of writing that you could have easily written in the date as well, but I like the way you finished leaving the ending to the imagination of the readers. Don't allowed crass people to provoke you into making your story base. As for the punctuation, that is what a good editor is for.

Very erotic without the usual smut on these pages, not that I am complaining. It was nice to read a refreshing love story that was also highly erotic.

Please write more for us as I am sure anything you write will be greatly appreciated.

You have to right lots more maybe lol but that was way way better than most the srories

This story is a masterfully woven tapestry of events and emotions. It is both erotic and tastefully rendered. A great work of art!

Classy and erotic without getting trashy. I look forward to the continuation of this excellent story - - SOON!!

enhancing the story much like frosting enhances cake. I enjoyed the story. I take the story on faith, that the dialogue and narrative are how people somewhere actually talk and behave. No one I know would, I believe, act or speak that way.

Thank you.

You should have shared the completion of the wedding night, and, considering the length (seven years) of his desire for her and her very appropriate age (38), she should have offered him that double possibility of being a parent and sibling.

An excellent storyline and very erotic.

I do wish that the author would have included the bedroom scene in the hotel after they had dinner,and that she had brought her butt plug along with her.

I think that she might have wanted Paul give her a spanking so she would have the feeling she was being submissive towards him. It could be something she has always wanted.

Thanks for the good read.

(talking about 50 Shades of Gray) "But it was a love story, well written and engaging."

I stopped reading at this, since I knew anything after this would be just as ridiculous as that statement.

Too short. You got so close to the perfect ending and then...nothing. Just a few paragraphs more would have been enough.

A great love story between a mother and son. The layout moved along very well, we all knew what was going to happen but you played the suspense to get there wonderfully. I don't give 5 stars very often but probably should have here. Thank You

I was looking forward to a hot scene with their coupling near/at the end and was disappointed it never arrived. In my opinion, this is a very good story, but was held back by the lack of "completion." (4/5)

A wonderfully naughty story that most women will enjoy. More than just enjoy!

Mary

grat story love it all srate for the hart love it all leannxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

Congratulations!!!!!!!!

Excellent story!!!

I loved it. Keep up the good work. I look forward to reading more from you.

Regards from - South London.

That was a VERY well done story. Good characters, believable, great dialogue and a good smattering of humour. 5 stars and looking forward to reading more of your work. Do agree with others that you missed out on providing a fitting conclusion after setting it up throughout the story (and therefore missing out on cementing an overall high score), but hopefully that's a lesson learned in your future stories. That and the poor punctuation, particularly aground the dialogue. Great start though.

Well done nice to have a build up!!

One of the best

An excellent and well written story. Very romantic, yet sexual. After finishing this story I very much look forward to reading the others you have written.

Good story

Last page Principal not principle

I would probably have preferred less resolution of the issue before date and wished the suspense would have continued until they resolved those issues in the afterglow.