All Comments on 'Shared Hotel with Sister-in-Law'

good start

Great premise, I usually don't comment about spelling and the like but in this case the lack of editing did get in the way of enjoyment. You should however keep on writing.

Good premise but badly needs editing. Almost unreadable.

Hayden or Heidi?

You seriously need to read your stories after completion, or get someone else to proof read for you. far too many spelling errors. detracts from the story!

Please get someone to check your writing. There were dozens and dozens of errors, both spelling and typos. It detracts from the story when there are so many mistakes. Cheers.

Edit

I don’t normally comment. Good story line but in this day and age there is no excuse for not using a spell check.

You also need to get a proof reader. The flow of the story was broken up by poor wording, incorrect names and words that didn’t match what you were meaning.

There is potential here but please get someone to proof read and edit your work.

Good luck.

Brutal

Story is not bad, however it needs to be proof read. Many spelling errors and grammer mistakes, makes it hard to read.

This story is unreadable. Get an editor.

Hayden, Heidi, which is it? Too many typos.

I thought not doing fine editing was a plus and made the story hotter. It added to the boozy, not quite in control and just going with it feel of the story. The characters in the story weren’t being careful. They were just going on impulse - and so was the writing. Not to make too much of it, but it had a Kerouac, automatic writing feel to it.

The story definitely worked for me. Hot!

Spelling awful

Curves, not curse.

Hard to follow, who is Heidi? Very confusing and bad editing spell check

F

Please get someone to edit your stories and do a grammar and spell check ,

Nice idea, but spell check your work

Horrible spelling and grammar. I only got to the part with Heidi. Who TF is Heidi. You can’t even keep track of your own story. Go back to third grade and relearn grammar, English and spelling. HORRIBLE

Never even made it half way down the page .. terrible grammar and spelling , , every person in life has different strengths , look at some of the people who have submitted 5 star reviews and ask them to assist you in editing your submission , I’m sure there is someone who will be happy to assist a young aspiring story teller, don’t give up , ..