All Comments on 'Sharing the MILF List Ch. 12'

I ever expected that turn of events in your story. Great work. You have even left an open story line to more clearly illustrate this store employees predatory eyes.

5 Star read for me.

Maybe it is time for a refreshing swim in a slow moving river.

Another great chapter/adventure. Thank you! So many possibilities for further enjoyable stories. I hope you continue to explore and expand. Can't wait to read the next one(s).

The writer still has to expore two avenues he opened up several chapters ago.

1. Allisya needs to use all the moms for her escort service.

2. Need, at least once, to explore Sonny using one of the partners families.

Not bad so far.

OH, split the long paragraphs into two.

First came aware of this series when Ch. 11 showed up in the new story list and added it to my "to be read" list after a brief skim of the 1st chapter. Now I wish I had started it sooner. There is a little bit of everything, but you have managed to make it work.

Some minor niggles that point to the need for some proofreading. There are a number of places where you have the wrong person identified, either by name or pronoun. Examples are writing Sonny when it is clear from the context that you mean Sammy in a few places across several chapters, or He when you mean Her, etc. There are also a number of places where the wrong word is used or one is missing. But overall the story makes up for these minor flaws compared the rest of the work. Keep the rest of the story coming!

I like it your story ...... what I really want to know is when are published your next chapter?

I hope that you are continuing to work on the next chapters (sisters!)

If not, thanks for the great read.

Thanks for all the comments, just to follow up on a couple. Yes, additional chapters are coming. Sharing will be wrapped up pretty soon and then it it will be time to Extend the List. Regarding the proofreading, my apologies. I know how disconcerting it is to have names switched in the midst, my bad. Will try to do better but editing your own work is tough. I need to get over the reluctance to work with editors on the site. If you want notifications of postings on this or other series, send me a note with an email address so I can contact you as new episodes go up. Thanks everybody! -C

Usually I get tired of erotic stories this long, but you have managed to keep the story compelling throughout. I'm really looking forward to Extending the MILF list.

I've been reading the entire series with (ahem) great interest. Normally, wildly improbable scenarios and sexual action are not what I enjoy, but this is one instance where I'm willing to suspend belief and come along for the ride. Mostly, it's because there seems to be real storytelling here and the writing is clearly a cut above most of what gets posted, a few glitches to the contrary. These don't get in the way of flow though, because the writing is very entertaining. I'm finding that I look forward to the plot twists as much as the "action." Along those lines - one question: will Sid and the Emersons end up crossing paths? Looking forward to your upcoming installments.

Thanks for your comments. It feels good to hear that you think the writing is good and the flow is working. I appreciate the comments. If you leave a name and email, I can add you all to the email notifications for new episodes. Thanks again. -C

The whole bar scene with Darlene is an absolute waste. We get it. You had to tell the story of Darlene so we can find out later she's been duped. Telegraphed. Cool. But then you write Sonny as if he is an 18 year old high school A/V club kid virgin trying to chat up Helen of Troy. You said she's a younger duplicate of Kyla Clark! The woman he just fucked IN THE ASS just 24 hours prior! Great, she has a hot dress but Sonny has been there, done THAT! Going stupid because of a dress and cleavage??? He OWNS the bodies of at least TWO chicks with huge tits! In fact, banged BOTH the night before, for fuck sake. Should be able to control himself. He gets laid almost daily unless he CHOOSES not to. Stop writing him as an idiot

Last section was confused and less appealing. First part spectacular.