All Comments on 'Sheila Ch. 10'

You keep prolonging this story with short chapters that do not read very well. Plus, you haven't finished two other stories on here. I like the story concepts, but the way they are written is a big thumbs down for me.

I've enjoyed your posts thus far. This one felt a little rushed, there were more mistakes, as if it hadn't been edited. For example:

"My god I had gone from a few hundred to a few thousand. "

I believe that you meant it to read like this:

My God! I had gone from a few hundred lines per hour to thousands!"

Anything that brings your reader out of the story to notice the language or holes in the plot, diminishes our enjoyment and your score.

That said, this is a free site, with you, the author, not being compensated. I would love for the story to be finished, but (and it's a big but) don't let the negative comments stop you! Write at your own pace and post when you can. Enjoy the experience!

Thanks!

Ttom