by lilmiss8out
Very original piece, well at least to me. I like it so far please continue.
Keep writing! This is a great beginning to two weeks that I want to hear all about. My wife and I have discussed this fantasy before.
Please, please, please, if you don't have a vocabulary use a dictionary!
It's "Champagne". Clearly you've never drunk it.
And it's "Ditto". Dido, iirc, was a Greek demi-goddess.
Such silly, easily fixed, errors ruin the story.
POV is everything and you are really good at it. - great story - thanks!
Going on 12 year since these 2 chapters were published and they are still 2 of the best stories.