All Comments on 'Shining Girl Ch. 04'

This was a awesome story . Hate to see it end . I would of like to see mom get lucky , but guess it was not in the cards for this story . Hope u can revisit some of your other unfinished story's soon. Thanks for great stories and keep up the good work you Brit .It's going to eat u alive wondering who this is , but I'm not telling. Have a good day mate . Get back to work . The runoffs need cleaning .

this story a LOT! It's now a toss up between this one & Rag Doll as to my favorite story of yours.

OR......maybe I can just like them both equally....

GOOD job BB58

I enjoyed the entire saga...great writing!

Guess I forgot to comment on this on. Or thought I already had. As usual I loved it. Can't wait for any new writings you post. You know I love you.

Look at me, stating the Obvious Again, as I have yet to read one of your offerings that I felt was not worthy of 5 Stars!! Please keep enlighening us with your Wonderful Work!!

you have out done yourself with this one... another great story has been written by you let me know when the next one comes out

This comment covers the whole series. Well written, strong storyline thread throughout, a good read and not just 'in your face' sex! Keep it up

Ive been glued to my ipad in every free moment reading this wonderful story. I feel like Ive just finished a favorite thick novel and put the book back on my bookshelf to read again sometime! It was very enjoyable and I breathed a contented sigh of relief with a happy and complete ending. Bravo!

That was just... beautiful. Loss of words.

Have enjoyed reading "Shining Girl", and all of the Authors other stories.

The Author has a way of weaving a good tale.

amazing story can't wait to see what you come up with next.

I want to fuck Teruko too after reading the story.

Simply beautiful story! Filled with lust but most importantly love. Definitely a 5*+ for each chapter! Thank you for a beautifully written story!

A total 5, as I give all your stories.

Incredibly sexy with an interesting story woven in. I definitely pictured Teruko looking like Sena Ayanami.

Very much enjoy all of this author's works.

Speaking from my years of experience as a Psychiatric nurse, with experience of cases of traumatic amnesia such as this, the recovery from the fugue state that Jack's in is common and plausible; there's not really any such thing as total amnesia, memories will continue to emerge, often disjointed and out of context all through the fugue state and beyond, such as those described as happening to Jack, but the fact is, there's so much we don't know about how memory works. The author has given a perfectly plausible progression here, neither too fast or too slow, leading me to believe that he has had some high degree of familiarity and/or experience with this type of mental trauma and recovery in the past. Many of the cases I have had experience with have gone to sleep amnesiac and woken with near-perfect recall, except for confusion and non-contextual recall about the lost time since their head trauma.

Hot, sexy, and all that stuff! Two strokes have curtailed my writing, and the fugue state thing is all too real (I know)...The struggle Jack had is an all too real one for me and so many others...Good show...Well done...

The start was a bit too similar to Harry/Sai Fong, but it took off later on. First story where I actually skipped the sex scenes to get back to the romantic ones.

Just one little nit-pick. Teruko kept calling him Onii-san. Considering the level of intimacy, she would actually have called him Onii-chan.

A very special story of love !

5 stars ....wish i could vote 10

thank you beachbumb1958..........

Wow

a beautiful story

Great story.

Unfortunately, I started reading from this final chapter.

I need to read again the whole story from the first chapter.

I was surprised about the description of the Japan, specially Osaka, because I have family who have lived there (my sister in law, her husband (Japanese and dead some years ago) and my niece (who now is living in Tokyo)).

I like the story, maybe you have a little excessive sex, but full of love and feelings, and I know this is a story of incest/taboo.

When I have read all the story from the first chapter, maybe I can post some more comments.

5* for you.

Good Job!

I apologize for my English, is not my native language.

I'm sorry for the author, but this is not a story of incest, this is a wonderful story of romance!

You are a candidate to be one of my favorite authors!

I am very happy to have read the whole story, although it has had to twice read the last chapter, which certainly has helped me understand some parts that I did not understand at first reading.

Grateful Job!

I apologize for my English, is not my native language.

let's have some more of this story I could not put it down it's a great story like no other what happen's next more chapters please

Been searching for story like this. Not many on here where the loving siblings stay together without every tom dick and harry getting involved just them family and few friends. Loved every minute.

Loved every bit of this wonderful story. Your talent amazes me. Thank you.

This story belongs in the Hall of fame.

Very good story, keep it coming.

Good job.

What can I say but thank you for your time in giving us such a beautiful and touching story as this. Words truly fail me. You are an amazing writer and after this effort you are definitely one of my favourites writers. Thank you once again. ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Only two things really bug me about this story. First, kids. Every fucking incest story on this site ends "and then she shat out a kid and lived happily ever after". Fuck kids, but this story gets slightly more of a pass than other stories of this genre do on account of them only being half siblings.

The other thing - is there anybody in England who doesn't fuck their siblings? Cause it would certainly explain a lot about my English buddies.

Is there anyone in America who doesn't fuck their father or their mother? Because that would certainly explain the in-bred, hill-billy mentality and wide-spread eyes, room-termperature IQ's, inability to string a coherent sentence together I've noticed in every fucking American I've ever met, plus their sheep-like willingness to follow a certifiable moron around, bleating and mooing like ignorant farmyard animals while he gabbles incomprehensible shit because his brain's dissolving. People who live in glass-houses shouldn't throw stones, fuckwit.

For the anons. below. Lighten up.There's no call to be making the derogatory comments. Anon 2 my guess would be that anon 1 is an Aussie from the word choices used,also about the Hillbilly thing,you really shouldn't listen to and believe the crap that the movie industry puts out about hillbillies.If hillbillies were the stupid,lazy and incest raping drunkards as they are played in movies and fictional writing they would have died out 200 years ago instead of surviving to this day.

i truly enjoyed this story. the anon. comment is very sophomoric - if you don't like the genre - don't read it!!! it is your choice! but this story is one of your best. I'm looking forward to reading the 2 "addendum's to Shining Girl. please keep on writing - and on that topic - any update on when the last chapter of "In love with Lori" "Lori's Story part 2" will be finished? these 2 are my favorites off what i've read of yours so far. THANKS!!

What more can I say that I haven't already said. Just chalk up another 10+

You have got to be either stupid or you have never been to the U.S. in your narrow minded life. The people in this country at least have the decency not to degrade or criticize the people of other countries when they don't know anything about them. Grow up.

This is beautiful, thank you.

love your stories and have read them over and over. but i think i like this the best..Thank you

I waited until I finished all 4 chapters to comment, primarily because I couldn't stop between chapters - I had to keep going. Excellent work!!!

There are actually another 2 chapters, 'Shining Girl: Andy & Linda part 1 & part 2' which don't show up in the chapter list on the last page for some reason, but if you go to my story listing by clicking my username, both chapters are listed there.

I just reread this wonderful story, tears in my eyes again. Author, you have a special gift, keep it up. Shining Girl is number 1 and Words on Skin is number 2.

Thank you Beachbum1958, and thank you for such a special story.

This is the 7th story I have read from your catalogue so far, the first being Lysettes Gift, but every one so far being real tear jerkers, especially Lost Girl.

I loved this one more so as it was more relatable because I know the area or setting so well. Having lived and worked in Oswestry, Shrewsbury and Cosford I was more able to visualise the areas you describe in the story becoming a more immersive experience.

I will get through them all eventually that’s if my nerves and emotions can take it.

that is how you write a great love story. It makes me miss my sister Karen,

Not in this story or any of the connected ones I've read. I'm disappointed that I have only just discovered your talent. I'm disappointed these won't be made into movies. Not for the sex scenes (lord knows there's no shortage of free porn) but because the amount of effort you obviously put into the description of the characters, places, all the little nuances, and the story-line. There's real feeling and passion in these masterpieces. I'm finding that I'm not reading Literotica for the smut but for the actual immersive stories such as many of your works. I know I don't stand alone when I say thank you for sharing these.

Another amazing story. My goal is to read most or all of your stories. I’m well on my way!

You continue to do it your stories are so good I eventually finish with my eyes full of tears and my heart full of either tears or joy. I love my occasional visits to your world, I think I'll hang about for a while and spend some time with Linda and David then I may well revisit a few old friends in Cumbria it's been a while since I spent time there in either your world or my own. Well worth five stars.

Your stories have been a joy to experience. They just keep getting better. You tapped into a well of emotion I thought was covered over. This story of yours in particular moved me and you are right to be proud of something this good. It's a good kind of pride well earned.

Thanks

Really a beautiful story. It would be easy to fall in love with Teruko. I do love the writing style of this author. Practically Zero grammar, spelling or sentence structure errors. And again, the author made at Least a couple of references that i personally appreciate. One is regarding "Fugue" as it relates to memory issues. Not that i thought that the author was making it up, but i did look up fugue out of curiosity as a reference to memory loss. As Mr. Spock would say, "Fascinating!" Until this story, Fugue had only a musical meaning to me.

A second reference the author made was to some older movie classics that Jack referred to. One in particular was "The Great Escape". A good flick! 5🌟 across the board.

I really like the way you tell stories I like the character depth I think your descriptions of the sexual acts are wonderful.

Despite the title of the final part I was really worried that Jack had died.

A real tear jerker with a wonderful ending.

BB, this was an absolutely beautiful, sweet, and loving, love story. I laughed, cried, and smile throughout the whole thing. Thank you for writing this amazing story. I'll remember this one.