by ffmerchant
your story is geat
one of the best I have ever read but can you make a new story in the same style but longer and add a invasion something like a creature who invade a city or something likie this
Love your story ! Keep it up! For part 2, I like to suggest you write about the guy's grandfather is nearby looking for him but he is too brainwashed and sex addicted to muster up his will to ask for help and ended up having more sex with the siren. Tat would be so sexy.
well written, sexy, believable, really enjoyed the story, you have a rare talent, definitely a case of less is more ... writing like this doesn't need to be many pages