All Comments on '"Sister Apocalypse"'

Stick it up your fucking ass hole

There was a lot of potential for a good story here, it's kind of sad that it just didn't happen. No actual sex, poor and unrealistic dialog, shallow and unrealistic characters, poor descriptions of what little intimacy actually appeared in the story and no character development. I could go on but I won't. A complete waste of time.

there was no point in breaking this into "chapters" if the content you wrote for some "chapters" wouldn't fill 1/2 a page in a paperback novel. the concept is interesting, the execution was disastrous.

You must be the kind of people who get off solely on words. Words like: pussy, sex, fingering, nipples, etc. Stop feeding the ego of people who write this drivel and allow them to drift back into obscurity so the rest of us can read REAL erotic fiction.

I agree with the general tone of the comments so far and will add; what a waste of cucumbers! Just give them a quick wash and peel if you must or just eat them as is.

Let's start by saying that this was a story written by an ameture. Not a professional. Also, steffanstratos is not the writer. He is simply the publisher. If you don't like the story, give it a low rating. Don't attack the publisher for something that is not his fault.

If you don't care how others feel, get the hell off of the internet, go outside, and learn some bloody manners.

Hey, I definitely appreciate all of the negative comments and the time taken to post them. Seriously! Notice that I've not deleted any of the negative comments?

Although the negative comments make me laugh, I do hereby solemnly swear that I will make a feeble and pathetic attempt to improve on future stories.... but don't hold your breath (in other words, STFU and GTH). My style is my style. So what?

Write and publish your own stuff, and then let's have everyone read the deluge of wonderfully glowing comments detailing how much the people are enjoying YOUR fantastic creations of erotic literary genius!

Now, to any and all readers who gave my works a favorite rating, wrote a nice comment, or began following me (no matter how tiny that number might be).... thank you and here's a "High-5 from afar"!!!

Finally, to the microscopically small band of random followers that I've accumulated (numbering 20, despite my 3 stories having logged approximately 170,000 views as of 2/13/2018).... don't worry; I'll be publishing A LOT MORE STUFF for all of the other cranky critical readers to bitch and moan about.

Signed, Steffan Stratos

I was pretty excited for a story about a pair of siblings trying to survive an actual apocalyptic event. At first I was hoping that the Twilight zone stuff was going to be a foreshadowing of something down the line considering the mention of chapters.

What I got instead was a really quick unexciting confession scene and uninspired dialogue. At the very least there was opportunity to make this exciting. With the cucumber training, the idea that one characters doesn't start out being interested in romance, and the inexperience they have.

While you may be an a novice at writing, I have to agree, "Nergal8617" kind of summed it up.

I would suggest you proofread the more popular works, along the lines of your preferred style.

Total crap.