All Comments on 'Ski Lodge Vacation'

In the first paragraph, you talk about your "baby sister," then, in the third paragraph, you say your sister is two years older than you. Keep the chronological ages the same, or get an editor. And, you had some grammatical mistakes!! Please, please get your act together, then maybe your stories will be believable.

Too much wham-bam, not enough erotic.

Stan

You morons act like you're reading classic literature or something, this is porn you assholes. Get your self-important asses back down to earth. Good job Brett.

well done.

You story was definitely good, but I was disappointed because we were given the impression some public play was going to happen and then nothing, they went back to their room. For two people you say are into "risk", that was a let down.

Who cares if she was 2 years younger or older - it was a very sensual and erotic story anyway - give us more

needs more so the parents can find out and she can get pregnant

yet another writer that screws up the facts and rushes story then lets his EGO keep him from using a good editor. real shame all his stories need a total rewrite and a good editor.

this story had the potential to be very good. however, poor grammar, wrong words used etc. caused a major retraction from the reading experience.

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