by PrevertedMe
THIS STORY IS OFF THE VOTING RADAR. IT IS SO HOTT AND GREAT.. PLEASE, PLEASE CONTINUE. FOREVER A FAN
This time you don't get the 100, because the 'oooooooohhhh's' and such are just killing me. It's a shame, because the story is really good otherwise.
But this would be so much better with fewer loooooong sound effects.
I suffered through the first one hoping the comments would encourage you to edit successive chapters but this one only got worse, I'll skip chapter 3