by Asperger27
I agree with some other comments. This seems like a potential love Story, so the inevitable conclusion is that she becomes a slut-wife for Ben and eventually gets pregnant. Looking forward to the next chapter!
I wonder if this is a made up story, or somehow you have learned my personal encounter. The dialogue between me and my lady is almost identical to this story. If you are going to continue with your narrative, please don’t call her “slut”, and no anal. Only male losers believe that women like anal and to be called sluts and bitches
There's some promise, but you need an editor. Or to work on the flow. Of your writing.
Great story up to this point. But, Audrey, I'm waiting for the next chapter when he fucks your brains out! Nothing like a young man fucking an older woman and shooting his young seed into your mature womb.
Nice start of a story. I love the "younger guy, older woman" type of story. I'd have rated it higher if the writing style had been a little better. I know some consider it nit-picking to mention grammar, but I find bad construction to be a little distracting. For instance, try and stick with one tense. For instance, "She begins to undress and get ready for bed. Her heart was pounding as she got into her bed." Here in two sentences you have two tenses, the present, "She begins..."; and past, "Her heart was pounding as she got..." But like I said, overall I liked the story and where it might lead. Keep up the writing.