All Comments on 'Snowbound'

...but it was still a very good read.

I could see it coming too, but loved every minute of it. The traditional ghost story, converted to a sex filled adventure!

not too bad.

The ending surprised the hell out of me, but it was still a wonderful little story. Five star read, thanks.

It's only predictable cause we are old. It was a great story thanks.

Make tons more like it!

{The errors listed are very incomplete, but typical of other similar ones throughout Pages 1 & 2.}

... get them dried out. She said, turning ...

... get them dried out," [s]She said, turning ...

"Do [you] like coffee or tea?"

... the fire dies down." She said ...

... the fire dies down," [s]She said ...

... call me Song." She said ...

... call me Song," [s]She said ...

"So your[you're] single?" she finally asked.

"Yes." I said somewhat startled ...

"Yes," I said, somewhat startled ...

"I am now." I said ...

"I am now," I said ...

"Ah. I see." She said ...

"Ah. I see," [s]She said ...

{Many more he said / she said 2 word non-sentence errors are throughout.

Most quotes end with errors.}

{Two coco vs. cocoa spelling errors.}

... laying[lying] on top of me ...

I haven't had the opportunity to cook for a many in a long long time."

{Wording?}

"aren't you going to eat?"

"Aren't you going to eat?"

I was quite busy, Would you like to see how?"

I was quite busy. Would you like to see how?"

... to meet hers do they slapped ... {Wording?}

I felt like she were[was] searching ...

I appreciate your efforts to improve my stories with your editing prowess. There has long been a debate between my editors on the exact syntax for short sentences of dialog. It seems that what was once proper is no longer common, so.....depending on my editor there tends to be more or less variation. That said, my editors have made a reasonable case for "He did do that." He said. Rather than "He did do that," he said." While the first is often considered proper, the second is considered common. The second also happens to be how my style had developed, so there are a LOT more of the second in any of my stories than the first.

If you wish to work as a volunteer editor i would be happy to have you on board.

a dumb unnecessary ending.

Damn Excellent. Thank You.

That ending blew my mind. Great writing as always.

This was a good story up until the end. The harshness of unexplained details uncovered in the ending ruin the story. A surprise supernatural turn such as this requires more story and plot. Without it is just an unfinished story.

loved your story Snowbound. romantic and sexy. please consider writing a part 2.

Thanks !

I thoroughly enjoyed it !

Shades of The Twilight Zone. 5 stars.

I have read over half of your stories, most are well done, many to much sex or inconclusive. But this one was elemental, with life challenging threats, love making with a beautiful Asian girl, a ghost, charming. I loved it. Keep it up, hope your write many more.