All Comments on 'Social Experiment'

Very good read, I hope you will continue this story & not leave it unfinished.

This story had lots of potential to be great, instead it was mediocre. A poorly handled storyline and an unbelieveable one at that. Try again, I'm sure you can do better!

But it needs a good deal more to complete it and make it very vsry good

The story is a good start but needs a littl more buildup. One can't help but look for ch 2. Good start but keep writing!494c

The shifts in verb tense are distracting.

The story idea has been done before many times, but it's still one of my favorites, so I was looking forward to reading your version. However, the grammar, dialog, and overall writing are so bad that I couldn't even finish it.

Sign up for the Literotica volunteer editors program, and get some help with your writing.

Drop the Theasaurus.

"Quening up," seriously?

Perhaps standing and listening to others as conversations occur would help. Few people actually use suck language in everyday conversation. If you are developing a character who through use of language attempts to dominate other characters then sure. But just tossing them out to demonstrate you know the definition does not endear you to readers.

Better luck next time

So many mistakes from tense of words to the lack of suspension of disbelief.

(big money) two grand.

the company name.

the names of the primarys.

please, read what you write. If it doesn't feel right and make you identify with the story, it's not well done.

I agree with other coment to sign up for free editing.

there is another story with the exact same plot, story line and ending... oh then again, this is entertaintment... lol.... disregard everything i said before..

I hope that the people who have them sequestered, will keep them until she is in her second trimester of her pregnancy, and all they have to do is fuck all day long, for about 24 weeks.

Could it be that the drug company has them testing a fertility drug that has a side affect that causes them to be horny all of the time, and makes them fuck like bunnies?

Yeap, this is a poor imitation of mom-son story like the I-room, alien-kidnap-momson-sexual-experiment etc.

Where is the dialogues, the feelings, and the fine details to the story? Let the story do the talking, not u typing and telling us what happened!

Its a fun reed but not much of a story to it. Id still like to reed part 2

Story has promising premise just needs more substance...Bo

a woman named Ernie, ok why not Fred for gosh sakes? or maybe Jack at least. 3 stars for the fuck up on name...

I would like to read more of this story

@Anonymous

Have you never heard the name "Ernestine?" Or Alex- short for Alexis. Or Jo0-- short for Joann.

A great display of ignorance.

And nobody missed them at work or school or even friends