All Comments on 'Sparkle'

Great story. Hot!! Nubile Daughter, Horny Dad. What a combination. Keep going my friend.

Enjoyed every word of your story and look forward to another before to long.!* "5"

Thanks

Jacko

Excellent story, superbly written. More, please.

Awesome and hot father daughter story, hope to read more. Please keep this series coming. Thanks

loved the slow, descriptive build up and the picture painted...tks

Super story.

the best part of incest stories is the build up of teasing and sexual tension that leads the characters to cross the uncrossable line, and this story was chock full of intense and passionate build up!

i loved the double narrative, telling the story from each character's perspective, and when they got to fucking, it was raw and intense and hot!

definitely looking forward to chapter 2

i have to say that this was the best i have ever read! please write more!

So descriptive it felt like I was there. Loved it!

Well written, compelling! Would like to see more!

Thanks for sharing.

BTW ... 5

I want to hear more, any pregnancies? mmm.

what an incredible story. So very hot it left me breathless. Please continue this story.

alot of the things were repeated...such as; quotes, sentences, and thoughts...what was the meaning behind it?

This was VERY hot! I loved how you alternated between Blair and Naia, as seeing what they both thought as they experienced it a new a refreshing way to tell such a tale. It's really the perfect way and you two did not skimp on the sexual details of the intercourse, orgasms and how they looked at each other. You really included so much that this is easily one of the HOTTEST stories I've read in a LONG time. It's very well done and OF COURSE add more about their relationship. This should be a multi-chapter continuation--easily. :)

One of the best stories yet on Lit. The couple interplay worked very well and helped to make this one of the better stories. Your couple approach made for some fine writing.

This story is so well told I don't know where to start. The repetition, the inner dialogue, the slow build up, and the climax that I and the characters and your readers wanted--happened. The intimacy between father and daughter was presented in an innovative manner that aroused and held me and I'm sure most of your audience in the palm of your hands. The two of you have a special knack at writing erotica, not porn, and you should continue, and the story should continue, and your audience will continue to want to know what happens next.

Awesome....

A beautiful story told erotically and sensually. The detail in the story brings the reader close to the characters and tempts you to take a walk in the garden with the two protagonists. Very rarely do I comment on a story on Literotica but this deserves top marks. It would easily win my vote for story of the decade in this category - Stunning!!

The alternation was interesting but when you repeated yourself it was a little boring for me. Its much better in my opinion to keep the story moving forward than to cover the same ground twice...

Thats why i gave u 4 stars. Otherwise it woulda been 5 for sure.

I will agree that I found the dual point of view extremely satisfying to read and very conducive to build-up. My problem was going back in time a bit every time you switched p.o.v. I think they way you repeated some of the descriptive sentences and showed how they shared such similar feelings as to be vocalized similarly did the job, so there wouldn't be so much need for scene repetition. Anyways, what I enjoyed most though was the lyrical careful language - like an other comment said, erotica, not porn - and this aura of a tryst in the '20's you created: slow, mesmerizing, decadent. Like watching with a slight buzz after a drink but before you get drunk.

What terrific writing! I was drawn deep into the highly erotic intimacy between the two characters by the stylish way you told the story. More please.

I liked it, but you kept repeating paragraphs making it hart to keep up with the story, had it not been for that I would have given four stars.

Hope there is more to your story to come, please read it before posting.

Sometimes these back-n-forths are difficult, but I didn't get here. I look forward to Chapter 2, though I enjoyed a wonderful orgasm from this lovely read. Thank you!

What's with the repetitive dialog? It's almost as if you wrote the story in bits and pieces, came back to it and then forgot what you had wrote.

It's a pretty good story, but I would suggest that you re-edit it and remove the duplicate dialog.... just to fluff things back up. Then repost!

I enjoyed this soo much, the anticipation, the angst, all of it is so invigorating. I hope you continue the story. I want to see their relationship grow. Give me at least 5 chapters.

I'm sorry, I'm four years late finding this story. It is indeed sparkling. From the flash of her ankle bracelet, to her perfectly smooth skin, to the glance or her pantieless pussy, and on and on through mutual seduction. The prolonged lead up, seen through two sets of eyes and mines, was extremely will done. It's one of the best sex scenes I've ever read. I'm going to read the second chapter, and wonder what happen to your lack of production since then?

I've read both parts and would love to see this story continued a little more. This is one of the very best F/D stories on this site. Not usually a fan of switching perspectives, but this one works fairly well. What really stands out is the melding of love and lust between the two.

Well done!