All Comments on 'Stay'

So he has to choose, but never mentions his wife. Where's the point here, you describe what he has with Pam, but say nothing about what he may have with his wife. That is the premis of the title, but this is a fragment of the whole. So it's not a very good story. It might have been better if you wrote the other half, but...you didn't, and the story is really short, so there isn't much excuse to leave it unfinished, is there.

If this is meant to be a flash story it doesn't work,leaving a story with an ambiguous ending might seem artsy,but it isn't,it isn't clever,it is irritating and cheap.If you mean for this to be a,multi part story,make that obvious ( pt x works) ,and also write more,this is a fragment,not a chapter.

Where is the supposed anguish? I don't feel his conflict, I don't much of anything from him at all. I never see the wife and have no idea what she is like. If I DID know about her, would she even be a rootable character?

For the read.

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