All Comments on 'Stepping in the River, Twice Ch. 01'

Recon and live with a knowledge that you have been cuckolded.

He saw his wife kissing another man and he decides to fly off to the Philippines with the receptionist? Is this part of your true story? Did someone actually do this? It is a nutty reaction. We still don't know what she was up to. He has spent a boat load of money on a vacation with a strange woman, that in itself should have his wife pissed off if she didn't do more than kiss that guy. So far, fucked up.

god name do these idiots come from, true story my ass.

so far so good

I liked the set up and am looking forward to the next Chapter.

Gave it five.

The husbands response is stupid -- doesn't solve anything. But Stan is also unbelievable; How could they time the kiss just to make him jealous when they didn't know he was coming? Even if true it violates his agreement with Margo. Jenny leaves her long term job at the drop of some flowers?! Maybe the Marx brothers will appear in episode 2?

Your previous stories have made sense and were well constructed. I hope you have sufficient fill dirt to rescue this one.

I don't see smooth reconciliation as the next phase. Why even have a next chapter? Margo finds out about Jenny accompanying hubby and goes the revenge route, maybe almost boinking the boss before she gets her head straight. Just guessing.

he can simply ask jenny.

between the two of them. Make it easy: divorce in the second chapter and stop the drama. Two dumb people separate would also save the human race. No dumb children.

San Miguel ... Red Horse :)

Was good till the last paragraph.

Doesn't fit.

Forgiveness is easier than permission but doesn't heal the scars.

4* - waiting to see whatyou do next.

Thx.

Will it go a way I won't agree with? Perhaps. My biggest issue is that you've already changed Margo's personality. I just don't see her breaking their covenant. Whether sleazeball was telling he truth or not (he probably isn't but that doesn't change my opinion) it doesn't resonate with the woman you set up at the beginning. I'm surprised he hasn't asked Julie about what she knew. Four chapters left so I'm sure you have the story going this way and that so we will see. The more you made him a cuck the lower the score will be. Not fair but such is life as I'm sure you took your characters through. Intriguing for now so 4* to start.

Dude you overtook me. I wrote in one of my stories ("I Am Not A Shark, But An Orca" on storiesonline.net) the husband changed the cheating bitch in half hour after the discovery. Your character was quicklier.............However my character divorced from his cheating bitch.

Borecay was voted by touristic experts and Borecay won the best tropical beach title.

All he had to do is ask Jenny what is happening at the office with Margo. Why run away before knowing all the facts.and taking the receptionist with him. She has a crush on him and Margo kissing her boss,looks ominous .she is cheating and he needs to leave her.might as well fuck Jenny if she tells him what was going on, this marriage wow was already broken.

Wow, if her getting kissed by another guy with her eyes closed in what might have been a defensive reaction, and having headaches (please, nobody enjoys a lusty sex life with their wife forever unless they're winning the sexual lottery) is proof of a long-lasting affair, I wonder what she's supposed to think of a guy who supposedly honors his commitment before God, but flies off to the Phillipines with his secretary whose had the hots for him?

Ain't nobody believing he didn't fuck her.

Something to consider when he's doling out the righteous outrageous about another man's lips on his wife's.

There is a lot of space to develop the characters into! Personally, "just kissing him" does not work for me. To get him a little jealous also is not acceptable in a marriage.

It seems you use the male running away a lot in all your stories. How does that resolve anything. .?

No rating until things gel a bit! Interesting start.

Not sure how a guy who can afford two last-minute tickets to the Philippines can't figure out a 12 hour time difference!

I thought the details of their honeymoon would have been better presented before he finds Sweetie and the Boss in a serious lip-lock! Then, he could have had a FEW quick flashbacks to omitted details on the Jenny flight!

It was suggested, but, I think, NOT confirmed that Jenny is still untapped by Hubby!

not till the end of this will you get a yeah or neah from me.....but good so far

The first throng he does when he witnesses his wife kissing another man, is to hit on the receptionist and take her to the Phillipines? Are you for real?

How can he be jealous or even a little angry at his wife when it is evident that he has little or no feeling towards her? I quit reading at that point and won't be rejoining the story.

its best to verify all the pertinent facts. TK U MLJ LV NV

And I'll wait for the last chapter to see how this plays out before I vote. But why the hell do so many men run away in these stories???? Grow a set and man up for god's sake. Kick the lovers ass, destroy both of them but don't tuck your tail between your legs and run.

I can't help but follow your reasoning.

It resonates with me.

Thanks

The overdone vows of love and monogamy, followed by a glimpse of what could be infidelity and the husband running away, with (or without) the convenient fuck friend who has admired him from a far for sooo long, has been done to death. This contrived plot device is followed by et more fantasy. and you've lost me as the audience.

Is Fantasy a Literotica category? If so maybe it would be better received there.

Sorry I pushed the wrong star and gave it a low score when I wanted to give it a 4 and say looking forward to seeing how it grows as a story.

Let's hope it doesn't devolve into one of the the silly and unbelievable plots we're more than accustomed to here in LW land. 4*s

An embrace with an intimate French kiss, one that is prolonged, eyes closed, etc., is not "just a little kiss." Many, in fact lots of women, consider it just about as intimate as intercourse. There is an exchange of bodily fluids. There is trust between the partners (else why close your eyes), and it is a sexual turn-on.

If a woman sees her husband kissing another woman this way, she would be angry and would assume they were lovers, or they soon would be. So when Margo is caught in a prolonged lick fest with Mr. Real Estate, two and two make four.

Now hubby running off to the Phillipines with the Caldwell Banker receptionist (Jenny) is just plain silly. And his obvious wimpish whining and hand-wringing (in the figurative sense) make me feel this is a RAAC story in the making. I give this part three stars.

I'll admit I have trouble with you resorting to the Loving Wives tradition of having hubby run away after finding his wife cheating on him, but I am absolutely dumbfounded at the rush to blame hubby for over-reacting. You get 3 stars - it's a good start despite the somewhat cliched plot. Whether my score goes up or down depends on where you go from here.

Overreacted to finding his wife kissing her boss? I can't wait to hear the explanation. Overreacted by going to the Philippines, or by being upset at her?

At this point matt is more cookoo for cocoa puffs than a silly wabbit. It's clear that matt will have to eat crow and appogize for acting like a schmuck.

So if he's destined to grovel, at least have him bang the hell outta jenny so he'll have something to appologize for.

She made the choice to cheat on their perfect relationship. Now what? We'll see...

What happened to his entrance to the building where Jenny obviously knew something was wrong. Are we to understand that after a few days with her he still hasn't asked her how much she knows about what is going on?

Is Stan telling the truth? If so, why the weird look and hasty call from the receptionist? If she was in on this jealousy play, then why stab the wife in the back and take off with hubby? Why in God's name would Stan go along with such a hare-brained scheme (silly rabbit indeed)? What could the wife possibly have been thinking?

I didn't buy the hubby's dialogue in immediate response to the discovered betrayal. Cut and run? Maybe, but I would think some yelling and shouting and maybe a swipe at Stan would have been more realistic. Then, immediately-conceived plan to jet off to the Far East with hot-to-trot secretary in tow? Kind of fails the smell test. Still, I've always enjoyed this author's creativity in the past, so I'll keep following this improbable tale. 4* for good writing, interesting premise, but not 5* cause I am having a hard time buying into the reality of the characters: their thoughts, motivations, actions and words.

It was a little hard to follow at times. It really doesn't matter that he doesn't know the whole story of what happened. He caught his wife on her desk, with her eyes closed, kissing her boss and not putting up a fight to get away so if I didn't already happen, it was going to!

He should have asked Jenny on DAY 1 what she knew!

Now onto the next part!

Did not care for the clueless loser holier then thou husband that has no brain. What he saw his cheating cunt wife doing in her office says with her lover says volumes of how much contempt she has for her loser husband. And him not asking Jenny what was going on before the instantaneous flight away, is just plain stupid. Now you are going to waste 4 more chapters trying to blame the loser husband and justify the cunt wife's actions. Oh and I sure you will throw God in there a couple of times. Pathetic start, just hope he finds his balls in the next chapter and there still intact

When your balls drop go to the dealership and trade in the Ladies Model for an actual automobile - I'd rather ride the fuckin bus than drive an LX, sheesh...

The husband is a pompous self-centered drama queen. 1 star.

Dumb dumb dumb

This is an IQ test, right? So far ALL the characters have failed. It looks like the readers are faring better.

Let's just say it's the truth she was trying to get him to fight for her, get jealous or whatever and she never did more than he saw. Let's just say...why would you want a bitch like that anyway?

What do we have here? a loving moron spineless weak person that i can't call him a man, maybe he has a spine of a rabbet after all, and after seeing his wife in her office behind a closed door with the knowledge of two of the company staff, engaged in a deep kissing marathon with her boss, who happened to enjoy her ass in his hands, and still he feels he OVER REACTED ? maybe if he found her being fucked he will not feel OVER REACTED, lets face it..... he is a pussy of the worst kind who has a wife that can have a strong control over him.

Hey, hey, hey...we are supposed to be rating the STORY here, not the actions of the characters. If the author can get you to react to the characters as if they are real people doesn't that mean that he/she is a REALLY good writer? If so, shouldn't you be rating the story HIGHER rather than lower? Come on people: get with the program!

LWlurker

Agreed, with the comment below. I think the author was extremely effective in impacting us the audience and that should be a key factor in our rating of the story.

I agree with A QUARTER OF A MAN comment. They guy is a no balls sissy loser. No wonder the CUNT was cheating on him.

Femdom agitprop wives cheat on men they think they own, like our hero.