All Comments on 'Strawberry - A Shanghai Girl in America Ch. 04'

Now that was funny as well as hot. Snorted my coffee on the first page with those mentions of the so benevolent Chinese Police. Other comments - enjoying your Chinglish and the use of "so" - my opinion, keep this writing style for future Strawberry stories, it's entertaining. Love your Strawberry stories (enjoy all you stories) and this was a good one. Keep them coming - more Strawberry please. More Isabelle too. More Hayley. More Jay-Lin. More Jeong. More Barbie. Loving them all....

I love how complex your character is, very sensitive, yet very confident in herself. I love her inner dialogue, her opinions, and her attitude becuase it feels real to me. You have done such a good job writing this, it's fun and hot, but also feels really complex. I've lived in a foreign country and it can be really boggling to run across different cultures, foods, idealology, and people (including really mean old ladies, guess that's a universal trend lol) it's a really unique story, like your other work I can't wait to see more!

Chloe, in the earlier chapters I commented that I liked your use of "so" and it was quite cute as you were using it. In Ch.03 I commented that it was becoming a bit much. In this chapter I found its overuse irritating.

Likewise, the language used in Ch.01 was normal first person narrative. It had hints of Chinglish in Chs.02-03 and I thought that was also cute and appropriate. But it became extreme in this chapter and, combined with the irritation I was feeling with 'so', it led me to take a long break from reading after three pages and it felt like a chore to have to come back and read the next six pages of the story.

Nine pages is a long story when its a chore to read them.

Chloe, I can picture you having so much fun writing it that as author you got yourself into the zone and went for it. That's fine because on a site like this you don't owe the reader anything. All the reader has spent is his or her time and the reader can stop at any time. Authors submit stories here for their own enjoyment, and if readers find them enjoyable, that's a bonus.

I thought the story itself was great. It was romantic and erotic and the characters are developing nicely. Introducing the additional characters, I thought, added more interest to the story and gave it a variety of directions in which it can now go. The little bits of humour were great and playing off Strawberry's naivety was a feature of the story.

It's your decision where you take the style of writing but I, for one, would prefer you go back to the style used in Chs.02&03. The two previous commentators didn't seem to share my opinion, so I will be interested to see what other comments Strawberry attracts.

Lue

Enjoyed it like all your stories. So was only too much during chloe's preamble to this story, but I guess you were trying to make a point. I appreciate all the research and thought you put into the story. Keep writing please!

Love your work, Chloe. Find the "So ... Chinglish" dialect just hilarious. I obviously have a fondness for Asian women. My wife is Amerasian, born in Korea, adopted and came to US at two yrs old. My BFF from my hometown is Chinese, second generation American born with her mother from Shanghai. You're one of my favorite authors on Lit. Kudos!

The Chinglish is a bit overdone. My daughter had several Chinese friends in grad school and all of them spoke better English than Strawberry. I love the story, and her attitude is so convincing it's unreal. You've got a real talent, please keep writing.

So interesting...this life of Strawberry. So hot her so sexy scenes with boyfriend.

I love the relationship between the two lovers. The fact his family is willing to accept her is wonderful. Dim sum in Duluth ought to be an interesting experience. However, I find it difficult to believe Strawberry would eat and like lutefisk. I know plenty of Scandinavians who hate the stuff.

Looking forward to reading more of their adventures!

Excellent, sexy story/series! Ignore the dumb ass comments....people sometimes forget they are READING erotic sexy stories and it is all for enjoyment....most of the time -95% - for self-satisfaction and if the subject is not for them or the story, then move on instead of taking the time to be "brave" behind a desktop/laptop/IPad...and making hurtful dumb ass comments....quite frankly "fuck them", THEY are not worth your time.....anyways I enjoyed it, keep writing!

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So love so esteemed authoress. So wishing could start love letter relationship with most esteemed authoress. So sure so much in common with most esteemed authoress. So hate PC trolls that so misunderstand humor.

So loving character development and so clever use of cute dialectical differences.

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So total best story on so hot site!!!

About broke my di whatever reading this series

So love this style, so different from the others, so realistic to my way of thinking, so perfect in every way. But what has happened to the Strawberry patch? While I have just discovered this Strawberry wonderland, others have been waiting years for the promised sequels.

I have to confess to loving everything you have published on this site and look forward to reading what your golden mind produces. Keep up the good work, you are filling an aging male’s mind with never considered fantasies.

Ohhhhh thank you all so much. I do have to write that next Stawberry instalment too. And for those needing a new fix, check out my profile- my first novel is now available on Amazon.

Chloe I love your stories but this is the first one I couldn't finish,😩

All of the extra "so" was "so" distracting I finally just had to give up. I know

It's done tongue in cheek but I couldn't get through it, I still love you and your work💖

Please keep it up. Jim

Longer than most stories so characters can develop . There is a large Chinese population here in Vancouver so I see some Shanghai Princesses in Daddy's Bentley cruising the boulevards . My fantasy will now expand thinking of them riding a very hard cock their Agent Provacteur lingerie scattered on floor .. Hope to read more of Strawberry's sexual exploits . The descriptions of her body taking a hard fucking are excellent

Prefer the "so" style writing in the earlier chapters. I think it is best used when she is actually speaking, not in her thoughts or telling the story. Regardless which you use your stories are wonderful. Looking forward to chapter five.

Your stories are great Chloe. I like the translation of the Chinese you put in. Just wish I knew how to pronounce them. I think using so in some parts is fun, but it does get a little distracting when used to much. I hope you finish some of your other stories soon. I think I have read all your stuff. Thanks again Chloe, keep up the good work.