by qhml1
An easy 5 stars. You are a really good writer. Looking forward to reading your next story.
Always a very big pleasure to see a new story from Q. Thank you so very much for another fine bunch of scribbles on paper.
I love happy endings! Especially the ones where white cocks end up in black pussies. Thank you for writing this.
A lovely story of a day to day life of an honest man and woman and their clan. What could be nicer?
Dope-ass story, Q. Look forward to your next. Anyone wanna read another Q story? Tune in on July 23, when he will post another, along with the likes of HDK, Laptopwriter, DTIverson, and more. Thanks for posting, Q. Randi.
Good ending but man it needs sone editing for consistency. Angel's name changes randomly to Honey off and on, sometimes in the same paragraph, before going just to Honey, and you confused Billy & Jeremiah with the bit about the cousin.
0 stars. Racial slur was unnecessary. Really doesn't make sense coming from that character. Show your true colors.
Yeah, well, do that and you’re sure enough gonna end up living in a trailer, dealing dope and shooting mother fuckers.
Great story. When did the name change from Angel to honey take place? I missed it
You and Todd172 are by far the best writers in the LW genre of this site. And this one is bound to be another classic added to your literary anthology. A great story. Thanks!
It was an okay story, but nothing great. Add in the missed expectations from being put in the wrong category and it struggled to earn a 2. I hope you pick your game back up before you post your next story.
What an interesting story, well told, about two folks from different backgrounds, their friends and their loyal beliefs. 5*. Thanks for sharing it.
More editing errors than usual for GHML1 but an entertaining (if cutting off wedding tackle is good theater) read. Yes, there are communities like this around most of the US, but fewer than onest-upon-a-time. Pity that household climate maintenance, lack of front porches, and TV/Internet lend themselves to antineighborhood development.
5*
Great second chapter. Now I'll finish my blunt, finish the rest of my beer and get on with real life.
Hooked
It's always a good story when the good guys are badder than the bad guys, lol. Enjoyed the story, and glad that it had a happy ending. Wasn't sure when I started reading the first chapter but glad that I stuck with it. To each his own after reading some of the comments, but this is a five star story in my book. Thanks
the problem with being a writer who sets high standards is that the mistakes stand out so much more. im not sure why this is in LW there is good or bad extramarital stuff at all. give one scene where an implied assault was gonna happen to a non main character
Roll one, smoke one, eat one.... OR... no free rides; gas, grass, or ass! Them were the days...
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Like others have said, it is hard to best a Master, but ya still got it.
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5.5*****, Hooyah, Salutes...
Very good story. It's always good about decent people solving their own problems without involving the so-called authorities. Thank you.
@gump - While not a lot, there's LW stories where both wife and husband actually do love each other and the story drama is NOT cheating related. My favorite kind of stories, actually. This one was great!
Not quite written to the normal standard of this author at least technically.
Entertainment value ... Definitely to this author's high standard. One of the most enjoyable I've read in a while.
Great story. Just one suggestion. Before including talk of shot guns, go out and shoot a cut down, but still legal, 20 gauge with birdshot at something within ten feet. You will be amazed at the hole in it. It would not have been a splattered ass... :-) AND the other would have bleed out from the crotch shot almost immediately. Not much need for the kick to the head or the rolling pin... :-) Sorry to be picky with a really good story from a really good "Story Teller".
Great story man! It's nice to read the occasional LW story that doesn't involve cheating spouses, but rather true loving wives. Thanks for posting this up for us to enjoy. 5 stars from me.
Who gives a shit about a few name mix ups when you're handed this quality of story free of charge. The lit commentators are getting more like a bunch of whining old US politicians every week...Thanks Qhml1, great story very entertaining and as always very well written, ahem.. even with a few slight errors😉
Not a fan of drugs. especially illegal ones. Nor guns. Could've been a 5* story but, sadly, it's not. Clean it up and try again. You're usually an excellent writer. 2*
A comment on 'Sunny2u's comment about using a racial slur. Q was obviously very careful to NOT use a racial slur, as the few times the 'N' word was used it was by an African American. In today's woke climate, that's ok. Never made any sense to me that it is that way, but it is what it is. And in this story, it was never used by a white person to put a black person down. No reason at all for a snowflake to get offended.
You should do this commercially. Not only do you have good story ideas, you know how to write.
Cordially,
Cladymoor
I was not deterred by spelling mistakes. I was not offended by regional and time appropriate dialogue. Violence and drugs did not cause me to dislike the story. I am a snowflake, unique and resilient. This was your typical qhml1 story. Effortlessly written that I could only hope to be able to write this well. It is a five star story, the characters are likeable and consistent, the plot is not over the top. My name is not John Lee Pedimore. *****
It's telling the story that is Q's art. Some authors are artists, and we are the beneficiaries.
Great story, fast paced and full of detail. LW is a strange category as most readers seem to expect BTB v RAAC but I thought it was apt.
Thanks for another excellent story.
I appreciate the effort, but you really need to know that only a Snowflake or some gun dumb city punk would find any realism in your inept weapons play. There is no such thing as a small 20 gauge shotgun. You don't Ever shoot unless you shoot to kill, and that is not in the ass. I wish you had included the make and model of the "automatic" shotguns your characters supposedly carried. I am unaware of a machine gun shotgun. Maybe that was just a semi-mistake? And what really pisses me off is the concept that it wasn't obvious from the first time they met that sooner or later Ollie was going to have to be killed. What's with all the palaver and useless negotiation? What they ended up doing to the bad guys they should have done sooner to just one bad guy. Ukraine once had nuclear weapons. You think Russia would have invaded if the Ukraine still had their nuclear arsenal? All the premise of talking and "scarin'" the murderers into becoming peaceful was complete bullshit. It made a really good plot and characters look stupid. Warning shots, really? That part of your story read like some kind of action figure cartoon magazine
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Next time get some gun savvy help. Or just leave the gun play to those who know how it works in the real world.
kirei8,
Oddly both Todd and q dominate the Loving Wives Hall of Fame but dtiverson tops it. No on ehas been able to squeeze past 4.91/5.00/
Wonderful! Honey did wind up being a mommy, and took it seriously, as well as being grandma! 10 stars!
@ anonymous below as far as full automatic shotguns go, if you do any basic research there are several that either come as full auto or can be converted. Look it up on Wikipedia if you want a list of them.
Those were the days my friend, we thought they’d never end, we’d laugh and dance forever and a day. We’d live the life we choose…
Thanks for another great story.
A bit more savage than your usual fare, but a fine meal, nonetheless. Thanks Q. 5 stars, as usual.
"Even if you got that kind of money, he won't let me go." - Why not? She's dealing for him to pay off the debt. if the debt is paid off what hold can he have, besides threats?
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"His boys rose up" - Oh, "Big Ollie" can't take care of his own business?
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"I knew I would probably never see him again" - Is the time line twisted, because we see Nat/Nate the next paragraphs.
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Very, very nice, but I repeat my comment from Chapter 1, it would be nice to know how many chapters up-front.
5-stars. And that's because the system isn't set up for a dozen or three more.
Real good read. I have family like that. We're from that area. Don't mess with family.
I haven't read chapter one yet.
At the beginning of this...Why should I like these people?
Your usual formula pulled it all off in time.
In this semi-new genre for you...you are not overmatched.
I love happy endings, with all the strings
tied in a bow!
I like most other readers can’t wait for your stories to be released, they are varied and almost always entertaining.
If I hadn't seen your name on this, I would have sworn that it's a Randi story. Thanks for sharing and looking forward to the next!
Glad you are back. Love your stories and style.
This one was right up my alley, especially Nat the "tunnel rat" - the bravest mofos in Viet Nam.
Thanks for a nice read on this 4th of July.
*†* btw, for anyone interested read: "The Tunnels of Cu Chi: A Harrowing Account of America's Tunnel Rats in the Underground Battlefields of Vietnam". A GR8 read.
Ahh the memories…
Back in the hills you couldn’t grow enough to keep a goat fed, but it made for plenty of crannies to distill your favorite hooch or grow Rabbit Tobacca (aka pot). Q caught the essence of the times. You either made a little Shine or a patch a tobacca so your kids had shoes in the Fall. Man! First day of school was a ****bear! We hadn’t worn shoes since May, and the leather that first day felt like it was made a lead.
Yup 10 outa 5. Next!….
Love those peeps' lovey depth of character smooth dialog moved the story well and as I read this I sparked up a legal grown and purchased pipe of weed soo ya
Another tribute to your ability to tell awesome, meaningful stories. Thank you. Again. Heads Carolina 🤙🏿
@sbrooks — is your comment a serious one? What are you, a 4th grader? Hey dude, shut up and just retire to yer nice little suburban home library with the roaring fire. This story is outta yer league and life experience, obviously. When we want to hear from you we’ll slap you.
Thoroughly engaging plot, a very unusual way to meet the love of your life, but, what the hell, it worked for them! Thanks, again.
Is her name Honey or Angel?! You go back and worth, a switched it once in the first part, and I know Honey is a character in one of your other stories....
Not my cup of tea, I wanted to beat the MC bloody, how stupid can you be, why would you let Ollie live repeatedly, that’s just frustratingly idiotic, Jeremiahs’ death and what nearly happened to Kim is on the MC’s head, yes I’ve forgotten his name
Great story. Was Happy to see a new one from you. Love the setting and characters.