by morninwould
it became crass. Too bad a potentially good story was ruined. *
I enjoyed the story a lot. I noticed this is your first submission and I hope to see or rather read many more from you. Keep up the good work.
For the encouraging words. I have another story pending, I hope you offer your thoughts on it as well. And I hope to have the time to work on the three or four ideas rolling around my head. :)
I have to say for your first submission it is cool.
My first submission was really "crass"... this isn't.
Can't wait for more...
This story is great. Continue writing. Looking forward to reading more of your stories.
great story. good dialogue and funny at points too.
This got me extremely wet and aroused. So did the one about the video rental. Please post more! Fingers are roaming...
This is soooo fucking hot! I seriously need another episode! Hot married guys fucking hot younger women...sexy! Don't wait to long to write.
Thank you both for the positive feedback and encouragement.
...And I know what you mean. A girl like Cat actually exists, and she drives me crazy. I'm getting some request for part two of this story. That could happen in the future...
I'm one of those guys that loves this type of story. Actually, I think its my favorite so far on here. I love the sexy sexy girl. I love the bikini. I love the tease and I love that she loves it. You really know how to describe a sexy girl better than almost every person on here. Good Job. And thank you. I relate to it a lot, as an "older" former athlete.
Well done. Your buildup was fun and thoughtful, and your character dialog flowed easily. I liked the fucking piece, too, but I think more adjectives would have polished it off, nicely. Descriptive visuals in your minds eye transferred into written word can convey passion and help the reader recreate the same spark you felt when you wrote it. As I said, well done. I enjoyed it.
Be well.
It was a good fantasy story for middle aged men. But did you have to call this gorgeous young lady a cum slut? Have some class man. Women don't like that crap.
clearly you don't know women that well. If they respect and trust you, they love being called your little slut. But thanks for reading. :)
Half a lifetime ago, when I was a lifeguard/swimming instructor/swim team coach, I was never fortunate enough to have a colleague like Cat. If I would have, it probably would have been my luck for her to share Cat’s interest in older men.