by Bakeboss
When all of the sex in a story takes places in one paragraph that's not a very good sign. It's like you got to the sex part of the story and realized that you could only type in 2 more paragraphs in the editor. Very rushed and a rip-off.
And what's up with the last paragraph introducing Rolf? What does that have to do with anything? And it's a guy!
ofwhen I was 16 and my uncle Ed had a major stroke and I used to go and help my Aunt Murial 52 with her chores ( not so much of a chore ) more of a young man's education !!!