by sexyramlo
Great story - started slow - then went into fast mode.
Mom and son got it on a little to soon after a slow start and easy first contact together.
Would have given a 100% if sex had been drawn out into another chapter.
Great reading.
It seems obvious English is not your first language - and that's fine, but you need an editor. This was an 'OK' story that could have been exceptional with the help of a good editor.
i got my step mom knocked up she had child dad is so stupid he works all day i work on her were toghter all the time i get jealous when he fucks her
I liked it a lot, but there needed to be more adjectives. Like wet, tight, & big. Also she should call her son by his name. Not "son" Other than that it was a good story.
Learn proper writing, proofread what you've written then try again.
Comments are to be taken lightly, don't let them stop you from finishing this story. If you quit now , they have beat you. It was a good read with a few errors . thanks