by hey_citrus
brilliant first story., reading this was like watching it taking place.
the story was so very erotic and exciting. it got my attention in more ways than one, i cant wait to read more of the second part of your story. i really love it so much . awesome fantastic story. more please.
Definitely sexy, but if you want to make it a good story/series, the next chapter should include him hunting down his daughters molesters. You have great skills as a writer, your descriptions were good. I'd just work a bit more on character development. You're talented enough to write more than a quick jerk story.
I don't think he needs to hunt down those guys, you should just focus on their budding sexual relationship which up to now has been beautifully written. A very promising start for your first story on Lit. Thank you.
That was so hot, I love how he gently convinced her to go along with it, got me so wet. MORE MORE!!
Would have been better if he had whooped both those boys asses and made them ask her for forgiveness .
Love your writing skills good story .