All Comments on 'Thank You, Janie Ch. 02'

I love this second chapter! Well done! Can't wait for the next one! Thank you!

I hope it continues.

Kick ass read, hopefully there will be more!

Want ch 3. You captured there love and lyst

Great story, keep it going.

After my education this is my favourite story

Great story....please keep up the good work.

Curious if they even know he is engaged, and what they think. Surely they know he is dating, since he moved in with her.

What about a flashback scene to when Janie first met his parents/family?

I wanted to share some impressions of your story. Good premise and overall plot. Characters had potential. There was waaay too much third person narration. It took me out of the flow of the story and got in the way of character development. When you did have scenes of dialogue, you did them well. I found this same problem in your other stories, even Impersonating Brianne, arguably your best story. There was too much sex, in fact more than plausible in my view. I would have liked les sex and more relationship development. I ended up skimming over a lot of the sex to find out what happens with the story. Thanks for posting and good luck with your writing.

Where is ch 3 my favorite stories so far.

You have been away too long!

again.

This story is my favorite from you ... very romantic. I am anxious to read chapter 3

I'm anxious to read chapter 3

This is a great set of stories. They are very upbeat...it was a pleasure reading the chapters. How you can add to the series as I like the characters.

Thanks for your efforts....Cheers

Good stories; is there a Chapter 3 coming?

Perhaps Romance or even Erotic Couplings would be better categories; I get the age difference but it's hard to see 33 as Mature

Language handling ability is pretty much as good as there is on Literotica.

Story so well told and intriguing that I gave it 5 stars in spite of feeling it lacking in two areas.

Jason's parents are mostly ignored. Where are they during his taekwondo training and competitions? Even bigger, where are they during his growing affair with Janie? How is he able to live with Janie? -- How can he be absent from home so much while still "living".at home? I especially wanted be there when his parents met Janie as his fiancee(!) -- a glaring lack in the story.

There needed to be significant dialogue between Jason and her daughters, Caroline and Olivia. Or at least (maybe including) dialogue where the two girls express their attitude about Jason to each other or to their mom or to their dad. They are too important to their life together to get so little attention in the story.

Lastly, the series is unfinished. It's not too late. I recently read a Literotica series where the last episode came 5(!) years later.

It is remarkable when a story on Literotica receives one favorite per thousand views. Both these chapters received over half again that. Congratulations!

Paul in Oklahoma

You have crafted a great story with so much potential for continuation! So many areas are left to explore. Things like a wedding, honeymoon, kids, & his future job would be a good place to start. Please think about it & tell us more about the life of Jason & Janie!

What happened to his family? Mom dad little sister and then never heard of again.

Great ending to a well done story. Thanks for sharing.

Good story but does need more to it for Shure.