All Comments on 'Thanksgiving'

You really need an editor

Proof reading is needed...are cloth instead of our clothes. Expected basic grammar after 86 stories written.

"Removing are cloths" should be "Removing our clothes". Did anyone proofread this?

It was an interesting story. I'm glad I worked through the wrong words, omitted words, punctuation, capitalization and other errors as there was a decent story hidden in there.

Thank God that was short

You created wonderfully erotic moments within an idyllic setting — nicely done. Loved it.

I hope you enjoy reading my stories as much as I enjoyed writing them. They are not a legal brief constructed so every word is perfect, every common in the right place. I have a tumbling out style writing from emotion, desire, writing fun erotica, fantasy. What would be helpful to acknowledge is not only are some of these rules the grammar police hold so dear incredibly capricious, they're also constantly changing. The thing that is oft overlooked is that as language changes, as it naturally does over time, the rules that govern it should change as well. My stories are meant to be a fun ride for the readers spilling out of me with emotion, unedited, raw, like a friend telling/confessing to you. I'm not looking for perfection, I'm purging my mind, looking for Orgasms.

Love, Cheryle

Decent work. For the anony's complaining about editing (which, while not too bad could use some improvement), you can get the refund of your purchase price at the Literotica customer service desk.

For me, a good story well told -- and this was one -- is enormously more important than perfect grammar and spelling.

I am not anonymous, ignore them. I loved this story. I love redheads, they get me into so much trouble. And I have loved my little sister too. Keep writing.

After the first couple of paragraphs, the grammatical errors were too much. Couldn't read any more. Please get yourself an editor.

I'm no native speaker, but so many errors aren't bearable. it's simply too much.

Your grammatical and spelling errors show you just don't care about your stories or your readers. One Star.

Please use of the editors available to you on this site. Story is nearly unreadable as it stands currently.

A very average story.

As an aside, it's interesting how the posters with user names think they are so special yet looking at their profiles they might as well be anonymous as their profiles, if true, give little away.

A terrifically fun read. Without a preamble introducing a growing connection between these sisters the intrigue and passion touched most of the bases.

The introduction of expanded family/sisters-in-law was seamless and added so much potential for further tales.

I am in agreement with other commentors that chastised thone that seek precise punctuation and grammer. The sexual tensions are highlighted by these missives.

So much potential for furthers stories, perhaps with all the precise details others seek. Hope you can maintain the erotica in future couplings/stories.

5 0ut of 5 !

Life is not perfect and neither are my stories. They are dirty, unashamed, unedited, told direct from me to the reader blemishes and all.