All Comments on 'That Girl and her Fairy Godmother'

However, you stuffed up the editing - replicated 5 or so pages in the middle of the post.

Managed to find the right starting point again and kept on with it.

Thanks

For some reason (somewhere between my laptop and the website) a huge lump of the story has reproduced in the middle, even though it wasn't there when I saved it, you gotta love technology...

I will throw myself on Lit's mercy and get it sorted!

Seriously: a great story as i expect from you.

You never disappoint. *****

Good story but I wished it had been released in multiple parts.

Absolutely fabulous story, made me cry when Dorothy died. You have great talent, hope you are able to write more stories. Thanks for sharing your work. :) Sunshine

Up there with your best! Simply delightful story so well written. Keep it up

Thank you again for producing the goods! Shame about the computer hitch, but it was just that.

My father was in the Royal Navy by the way?

And a real cheerful romance, it took a while to speed read the multiple page glitch but this is the best story I’ve read for a long time.

Well written though.

Good story.

There's a word processing error that repeats a good portion of the story. Can you fix it?

Well told, flaws and all !

Really enjoyed it!!

Thank you for sharing and please keep writing!

Reading this story almost caused me to get my Man card suspended. The almost is only because no other guys were around when I started choking up and eyes watering a few times. Everyone knows I have no allergys so they would have had me dead-to-rights.

This story started out so depressing that I almost quit before finishing the first page. I'm so glad I didn't! Thank you for sharing your excellent story. May we have more please?

I really enjoyed your story. Thanks.

Very high quality writing, and a nice developmental process in terms of the characters. The Cinderella aspect is well done, and of course the fairy tale sensibility imbues all aspects of the story, and Mrs. D. is simply a lovely character and presence. Bravo!

I agree about losing my Man card. Definitely some sections caused tears to appear. A wonderful balance to the news of the virus

They've carried out the fix and uploaded the real version, thanks Team!

A wonderful Cinderella story full of life, grit, humour and simply glorious romance

Must have missed the first version with the mistake, but this was well worth the read.

Being locked down in the UK had my first visit to Literotica for ages only to find this great story waiting for me and it was just the nicest way to pass a couple of hours. A very well crafted tale with all of your usual splendid and wholly believeable characters for us to love or hate. Mrs Dixon was a joy and reading between the lines quite the match maker, as I feel a hint that Pam could be another of her proteges?

You take us around to some nice places but the estate you describe could be any one of at least half a dozen I've worked in over a long public service career and I lose count of the number of families just like hers that I've dealt with - and I thought WE were the only people in the world that referred to certain clients as 'contraceptively challenged'!

Great work, another 5 stars.

If I could write that powerfully, I might be figuring out a way to make a living writing

Thank you for sharing this with us!

To the stars, indeed...

I very rarely write a comment, but this one above all others deserves the highest rating. It’s one of the very few stories that drew me to tears. Thank you so much for doing what you were so good at: writing wonderful stories that deeply touched the heart.

I would write this story as a 10 if I were able to.

All the best, Lucky MM

And you've got to hand it to Mrs D -- matchmaking after death is an amazing bit of magic! ;-)

A quick note about siblings -- step siblings share no genes, half siblings share genes from one parent, full siblings share genes from both parents. Most of Tracy's sibs are half-sisters and brothers.

A wonderful read in these uncertain times -- thanks again!

I,too, shed tears. so well done, I feel guilty that I got to read such fine work free of charge.

You should have ended it before the last scenes with her parents and siblings. The “revenge” was not in character. Instead, an effort to help her younger siblings might have been more consistent.

The scene where she salutes the coffin had me in tears. You have a gift, keep it up and God bless.

I hate to admit it, but I also got a little choked up a couple of times In the story.

Thank you for your story.

KS

Wonderful

Hated to reach the end, would love to meet these characters (well, most of them). Thank you for keeping a smile on my face and hope in my heart all the while I was lost in your story.

A nicely-written an absorbing tale.

One thing though. RAF personnel get 'posted' to a station, not transferred.

73

HP

Gave you a 5, but you should have 6 or 10 or something. Took your time, made Tracy plausible, but John a little too perfect in understanding her background. BRAVO !!!

Thank you for your time and work!

Paul

Loved it from start to finish

Kept me glued to my screen from beginning to end, absolutely perfect, 5 stars!

What a story so much feel good so many tears, the funeral, tears were running down my face as I remembered my own grandmother. Such a great story. People can get out of bad situations all they need do is say I don't want this I want this any more. Keep writing

Loved this all the way through. A few minor editing errors, mostly odd missing words but otherwise a brilliantly well-written piece of writing, wonderfull characters and perfectly plotted. Favourited and 5-starred.

Loved the story from start to finish. Great plotline great character development and a overall well written

Please understand that my comments are intended as constructive suggestions. I really liked the story, but I think there was potential for much more.

I enjoy long stories. This one seemed to have a lot of wasted text, and by ‘wasted’, I mean text that didn’t add value, emotion, or impact. The wordiness made it seem very dry. I didn’t get the feel of any emotion until Dorothy died. That in itself is unfortunate, because Tracy had some awful experiences, was a broken young woman until getting away from her family. A bit of that emotion would have helped the story feel less slow.

Pedant mode is on.

I/we/he was stood is so wrong.

I/we/he was/were STANDING, is correct.

Pedant mode is off.

Loved it! One or two minor editing glitches and my dream ending would have been a posting MrsD had lived at in her early married life, but tbh I’m being picky, great story and I seemed to have something stuck in my eye during the funeral section for some reason? Well done for a great and engaging story and don’t think I didn’t notice Traceys vocabulary gradually improving too, nice touch!

Excellent story!

5

for a superb story. There are few writers here who create such real life characters,

and let us get to know them in interesting stories. You are in good company.

A touch more editing wouldn't hurt, but the odd error didn't detract from the pleasure of reading your work.

Thank you for a very good story. I shows you don't have to stay in the gutter you were born into.

Too may people today se themselves as victims and blame others for their lot in life and that ain't necessarily so. Keep writn' please!

I am American and really enjoyed this one! As a retired USAF officer, the story brought back memories of marrying my wife. Tracy was very lucky to have a fairy godmother and prince!!!!

***** stars!

Burninglove

Thoroughly enjoyed reading this, but I share the comment that the revenge ending was a bit unnecessary. But still 5*

5* yet again. Only one point accompanied postings to Big A in Cyprus is Three years not Two, having done a tour there. Unfortunately Princess Mary's hospital at Akrotiri is no longer there, my eldest daughter was born there.

Reading through all your stories at the moment. Nice to see little old Lincoln mentioned, that was a surprise. 5*

FROM WHORING SLUT TRACEY TO FAIRYTALE

Good until the last page where the ending fell pretty flat.

Lovely story. For us Yanks hard to pick apart details. I do agree with others regarding ending. The final trip to the estate was unnecessary. Building a garden memorial to Mrs. D. or a baby named after her might have been more interesting choices, or just a return to the grave when her stone is placed.

Truly superb. One of the best stories on Lit!