by BreakTheBar
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Great story. A little confusing as you shifted from John referring to himself as "me" and "you", but the story was still fun. Love to see more of the Miranda/Nicole combo.
Fun read. Really enjoyed the angst of "John" as the story grew and developed
Very very good. I do not know.
I really liked the beginning of romance between John, Miranda and Nicole.
A real throuple is formed with a mixture of desire, lust but above all love between the two girls and John.
Lots of fun, but it would be so much better if you correct the first person/second person reversals.
Really good, well paced story. Really enjoyed it, reading late into the night, well early hours really, for which I got a thorough bollocking from the wife. Funny thing is she keeps reading over my shoulder now!
Well, this story was amazing! Definitely one of my favorites ever on this site.
Will you be doing a sequel to this? Or at the very least a follow up with him, Miranda, and Nicole. I would very much like to see that. He needs to actually fuck Miranda properly and the threesome needs to be together more.
Thinking back to it, Miranda really didn't do much during this whole story. Will there be more alternate takes on this besides the two already posted?
jfc, this was hot. Amazing. Like others, I would definitely love to read more, especially about John, Nicole, and Miranda. With maybe an update on the other characters.
Fuck that was hot. Thanks for a really nice cum. One of these days I have to write a "party gets out of hand" story... Maybe mine will have more BDSM but the rough in this was great.
Like some of the others, I would correct the first/second person reversals but the story was great. You had wonderful character development without losing interest in the action! Loved the variation in positions and acts as well as the terrific descriptions! Eager to read more from you!
Awesome story, 5 stars! Agreed with some of the others, the flip between first/second person perspective broke the immersion a bit, I'd definitely just stay with first person ("I/me"), as it's not really a POV. I'd love to read a follow on story about Miranda and Nicole, and exploring non-monog/open relationship (would recommend a bit of research into this, there's heaps of resources out there, just so that it doesn't come off wrong). Loved the way you described scenes, really great imagery and hot, without being crass or feeling try hard (ie "I stuffed her with my meat sword" lol, no one talks like that irl š).
Again, awesome work and congrats. 5 stars.
Thank you for the amazing story. The progression of the dares into outright debauchery was very well done.
Would love a follow up with Nicole, Miranda, and John other than that the date progression was on point the confliction of John and Nicole vs. Tom was nerve wracking at some points thanks to the incredible immersion and then the progression was incredibly well laid out
Good story with great word pictures of the action. I would also like to see a follow-up story with John, Miranda, and Nicolle.
In really impressed you managed to have so many characters and still get a clear sense of all of them. Iām also surprised you resisted the temptation to boot Tom. A lot of stories do that for the easy points, but I think his inclusion really did add some nice tension that helped keep things rolling
Awesome job as usual! Like others have stated the multiple jumps from it being an I/me/my to a you/your took me out of the story a bit but some of them actually turned out to read very funny.
Your stories are incredible. Thank you for the work you put it. This is my first comment btw :)