All Comments on 'The App'

Nice story but you put the word Lisa into some words, I thought it meant something but I didn't get it.

Lisa's name popped up several times in the place of the letters "ren" occurring in the middle of words, I can only assume by the use of Replace in your word processing program. Having a good editor will catch this type of issue. Otherwise, I enjoyed the concept and flow of the story, well done. 4 *'s

Well done, no over done explanations, straight to the action. Now you need to find an editor or be more rigorous in your own proofing as there are a few errors that should be cleaned up to aid your readers in enjoying the story. Keep writing, quite enjoyable.

The idea is good as in the app but i suppose if you like the same thing then this will appeal ,getting a bit fed up with the Call me Master thing and same sexual procedure.

But there's a lot of Teaching to be done, Then he can get her to invite others to be Her Masters Pet. Just to please him.

I'm guessing you had the female character named Ren originally, and changed her to Lisa later. Hilariously, the find and replace seems to have also replaced "ren" inside "different", so every instance of different reads "diffeLisat" now!

If you’re going to use a replace all function, put a space before and after the word, then space+comma, space+period, that way the actual word is isolated regardless of punctuation.

An interesting premise, but your writing needs proofreading and editing preferably by an second set of eyes.