All Comments on 'The Assignment Ch. 04'

please don't wait so long with the next installment!! will caleb do it or not, will mara come to her senses , oh the waiting we must endure...

awesome twist. hope you can update soon :)

wooowww this is getting sooo interesting!! i hope chapter 5 doesnt take a week to be put on here like chapter 4,, i was literally going crazy [jk] but still this is awesome!!!

So exciting! Cant wait for the next installment - better yet, put all the chapters up so we can read the whole thing!!

That office scene was AWESOME. I love your explosive kisses between these two and the way you write out their actions – makes me feel like I’m right there with them! Love the conflict and I love the struggle. I will wait patiently for the next chapter, as I too can’t wait to see what happens!

Seeing Demetri all sensitive and soft, oh my God…. The end with his eyes moist was such a non Demetri thing to do and it really makes for a powerful ending and highlights just how intense of a struggle this is for him. Well done Jaz.. Well done!

Loved it!! can't wait for the next installment I am anxious to see if caleb will do it and what will happen to demetri..more please!

amazing job!!

I think this was better than when it's edited

jaz! that was awesome writing! I LOVED the build up and tension throughout and you totally shocked me with the end of the chapter. I can't wait for the next one!

Hopefully, Mara will come to her senses soon so she and Demetri can get some relief!

Oh, and I never would have known this wasn't edited if you hadn't said anything!!!

great ending of this chapter, I hadn't thought of that option! Enjoying the story immensely thank you

amazing writing and so passionate!!!

I just want to kick Mara how could she do this to him when he is trying so hard, doesn't she know that if it wasn't for him she would be dead, yet she keeps making him feel guilty for everything! I am so pissed of with her!

Hey Jaaz,

I love this unedited version, more.......I never expected Demetri to fall in love with this much passion......I hope his idea works out and Mara comes to her senses.......I just have one request though, can u plss tell us more about what happend to the others....I mean Jared,Milli and Rafe, how are the living now, what do they feel after they know abt Annie.......

Waiting for your nxt chapter.....

Best of Luck

and am loving it! I can't believe you left it there. Hopefully Caleb and Annie will tell Mara what Demitri plans and she can stop him. Poor Demitri. I get where Mara is coming from, but you can only fight your feelings for so long. Looking forward to the next chapter.

heyy love the story... after your done with this story you should really write a story about rafe finding his mate cause it would be interesting!!!!

Jaz in my humble opinion your talent and tales are in the same league with any author on the site. Sleep is overrated. Mara is solid female character, she is complicated, the perfect woman for Demetri. The tension between Mara and Demetri is delicious. His torment over his feelings for her is perfect, an ancient vampire, so in control, brought low by love! I am rambling...great chapter, as usual. I eagerly await the next installment. Thanks for bringing this world alive.

I can not put into words how amazing your work is! all I can really say it MORE PLEASE! :)

Brilliant story. Your work doesn't need editing. When will the next chapter be out?

The two of them are pissing me off. Esp. him. Why can't he stop the sniping and stuff to cover his pain/emotions...I know it is actually a good respresentation of the difference between him and Caleb and how they dealt with the emotions the women raised in them. I understand her not wanting to feel for a man who hurt her like he did. It's tough. I think the end was a great surprise since all of a sudden he wants to put his life in danger to give her freedom...well is it that or get rid of the pain he's in...who is to know with him. I hope you clarify what danger it could be to him other than the Counsel finding out and wouldn't that then put caleb in danger? great writing!

It gets harder and harder to find new ways to sing you praises after each chapter, but what else can i do? You give us readers a world of complex emotion coulpled with creatures of deadly grace. Your writing is almost intoxicating.

If i had to find fault in anything in this chapter it would be Dimitri wearing leather pants, LOL. Maybe it's the blue collar country boy in me, but if i see a dude in leather pants i just laugh at him. Also Mara is an educated inteligent woman I can't see her being satisfied running a night club that's sole purpose seems to be a place that offers a mobile female population for Dimitry and Caleb (before he met Annie) to feed off of.

I'll be back to finish but I have to go dry my tears first....

I noticed in your other stories and this one you have the male point out how the female is independant and doesn't want to spend said males money or she wants to financially support herself, but having the male say doesn't make it convincing and it goes against the whole independent female thing if he is speaking for her, in this story he barely made it a question. A major tip? Don't point things out so blatantly, make your point through their actions, so instead of him saying it make her deny him or make her disagree and it doesn't necessarily have to be through speech, think authors like Jane Austen, she never said through out her books "Victorian era marriage is bad" but we got the point through the characters and their actions.. Which by the way speak louder than a thousand words.

In the past week I have real ALL your stories and I love them all. But The Assignment is my favourite, especialy this chapter - it is so full of emotion. Keep up the great work! :-D

...Ditto to sirreadsalot10 comment... I am always attracted to a story from the man's POV as well as the woman's and you haven't disappointed in writing this. Nice to know how actions can be misinterpreted if one didn't "hear" the thoughts. Then again...enough philosophy...bring on the HOT SEX! :-p

Maras actually pissin me off lol very good chapter. I hope she comes around for Demetrius's sake. I actually feel bad for him. Great chapter can't wait to read more

Loving the sexual tension!

Please tell me I'm not the only one that cried at the end of this chapter. Poor Demetri.

I gotta say...it's because of YOU that I got an account with Literotica. The May 14, 2011 anon comment of NO HOT SEX was me and although the sentiment is the same...I've come to appreciate your universe sooooooooo much! Thank you Sensai for the entertainment....It's YOUR universe and I'm just a Peeping Tom passing through! :-p

You wrote....

Two thousand years and he's never once sired another vampire and then along comes Annie and he's suddenly breaking his oath never to turn another person to this life.

Yet we now know that he sired Demetri so he did sire another vamp!

I reread and no he didnt sire him they are just friends.

Caleb did not sire Demetri. If you get more into the whole series you will find out who sired whom and how.... I have read the complete series and am re-reading for about the third time. There are so many different dynamics and twists that you think you know and then something springs up that surprises you.

This little Red head should have more character time to play her relaxed coolness and so her expressions will slowly influence the others, as best mara and demetri ....... Rihanna is a real lighter , very cute character, like lets forget the past enjoy the here & now plus the future will be coming nonetheless

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When I read comments like willieones I just give up hope about humanity. Demetri kidnapped Mara, tortured her almost to death, forced her to give up all her previous life but she is supposed to be grateful that he didn't kill her as well?

I suppose I really should be blaming JazCullen for thinking it was a good idea to start a romance with torture. The kidnapping was one thing, it could be forgiven, torture can't. It just can't.