All Comments on 'The Attached'

I won't say I liked or hated this story. It has a lot of good going for it in the supernatural setting and theme but it felt clunky and some of the grammatical problems made it hard to read. And some things didn't make sense like the two main characters were as strong as their mentor ,who obviously had decades of training, in 6 days.

I know I cldnt write a good story myself but maybe with practice you cld form a more fluid story. I'll be waiting to read that one.

I gave up 4 paragraphs in. Your mistakes are horrible! FInd someone here to E D I T for you.

along with the view point changing from first to third in the same sentence the fact that they found out who the sperm donor was would be highly illegal and impossible since names are never used to identify the donor.why would it take 7yrs to find someone if you know they name and why did the cops never notify her he was alive?too many duh things to keep it flowing without you saying to yourself what the fuck is this.

thank you so much for writing a wonderful story for us to enjoy! I'm a reader of stories, and for me this is a wonderful story that I can tell you put a lot of time and effort into!

A+++++

Than you again!

L

Gave up 3 paragraphs in.

I loved this story. It was great and I loved how many different emotions you were able to pile into it.

But, there are SO many errors. You need to do a Lot more editing.

Keep writing.

I almost gave up early, but the story was interesting enough to keep on.... you really need to edit before posting but don't ever lose your imagination, wonderful base story, just hard to read.

Thank you all for the comments. I will def change my editor. I think I would rather use someone on lit.. I will also keep working on my stories. Please keep the comments coming? I am enjoying this quite a bit.

Can't wait for more stories from you. Have enjoyed them all!

This is what I love to read...the amazing love between 2 people but with an incredible story line. Love and family...gotta love it!!

Very imaginative. Sweet and sexy at times. There were issues with spelling, correct word usage and point of view - so it takes a little work to get it, but worth the effort.

This made me laugh - "He was a man in his forties now and knew he hadn't long to live anymore." - from someone in their forties let me assure you - we are not at deaths door :)

I think the first chapter was lacking some maturity in it.so when I saw it had 7 chapters I was like omg really? I almost stopped reading but for some reason I continued. It was good but not excellent

Please stop. Please. Stop. Writing.