All Comments on 'The Bank Statement Ch. 02'

i had my doubts. but i like the conclusion of this story. well done, author.

I think you made the best of it without offending either the revenge or the reconciliation fans. I still don't understand how such a successful businessman as Jim would have been so naive not to understand what she was that first night he met her. I could understand that she was happy that he seemed to accept her as it was without questioning her past, at least if she intended to burry the past once married, but she must have been aware that the risk of being discovered was always there. Agencies and escorts are being referred to other businessmen to favour deals. Being the smart person she was, she must have taken into account that sooner or later he might discover the truth, as she run into former customers after she married Rolf. So, she could not have been so devastated for being found out and the fact that she always referred to Rolf as being in love with him too, be it on a different level, is probably one of the reasons. She had someone, or even more someones (?) lined up to fall back on. I respect that you made Jim stick to his principles, even if it made him unhappy. I despice her for going back to that life after their marriage. She could have talked to Jim more, telling him that she was bored and wanted to make herself useful and find recognition in what she was able to do through employment or setting up her own business (not an escort agency) instead of taking the easy way via the old agency. Like I said, you tried to make the best of it. From the last paragraphs, she had 13 wonderful years with Rolf. So she can't have missed Jim al that much. Escpecially since she was so successfull in her own business world, both with Rolf and later in her father's. We could say, they weren't meant to be together after all. Just an episode in life, like may of us go through one time or another. This last chapter is just wrapping up a story like so many readers including myself were looking for, the mere relating of some facts for completing it, no new drama or build-up or suspense? We all know you can't indeed satisfy everybody. So all by all, the two chapters together make it an excellent story. Congratulations. G.Belgium

I really enjoyed the story as well as the writing. I did think that the way Jenny came out in the end was a little too PollyAnnish. But that's just me.<br><br>One thing that I did find bothersome was the scenario of how Rolf was the one to rescue Jenny during her suicide attempt. How would Jenny's neighbor know that something was wrong when she was using pills and not making a ruckus? And how would the neighbor have Rolf's number let alone call him instead of Britain's version of 911?

I wasn't expecting the story to go this way and I found it enjoyable. Not my usual cup of tea but it was well done and a had a nice twist. thanks for a good read.

Garbage in, garbage out, no, it doesn't end like this, I hunt Jenny down and take her to a secluded forrest and gut her alive, all the money in the world will not erase what she did, I'm judge Dredd, judge, jury and executioner. And no, I would not feed this cunt to the animals, that would be cruel to the wildlife, just burn what's left of the filthy cunt.

Some observations:

1]. This story proves the point that many stories & real life examples have confirmed already - "once a cheater [or whore, in this case], always a cheater [whore].

2]. This story really highlights the "selfishness" and deceit that this slut wife was capable of - a sad situation. That being said, the roles could have been easily reversed thus the same thing could be implied or said about a male figure or in this case, a husband.

3]. The very night, the weak-husband highly suspected she was a whore - he allowed her to touch him in his own bed? Most of us would have been sleeping in the spare bedroom and going to the doctor in the AM to get check out for diseases. It was just a matter of time before she brought something home for him to suffer from. Again, it shows her selfishness and concern for no one but her needs. How many times had he already gotten sloppy seconds or thirds. Yikes, with her as a friend or companion - who needs enemies? The question begs to be asked - how "naive" or stupid was this loser?

4]. Just how in the world is this former whore going to ensure that "Jim" has a successful life with his new significant other? One could hypothesis that the only way she could do that is if she was to drop off the face of the earth and leave him alone. We hope anyway!

Overall, good story. It was difficult to like any of the characters but the author did a good job of pulling at our own emotional strings. One redeeming fact was that the whore did not appear to have any children - fortunately for the rest of the human gene pool.

I hope the huby got at least half of the wifes secret earnings. How about a sequel with that in it. Perhaps she has to go to jail for a while for tax evasion and prostitution. Then, maybe, they get together years later?

I guess I will have to read the last section a dozen more times to understand it all, and I not think I will ever understand the last sentence.

I guess I will have to read the last section a dozen more times to understand it all, and I not think I will ever understand the last sentence.

Quite apart from the story line, thinking only of literary quality, I judge the first part to be excellent and the second moderately successful.

As for the story's ending, well, in terms of sentiment (the need for a happy ending) I suppose it has merit -- but rather implausible. Thanks anyway. Overall it held my interest and I enjoyed it.

I liked your story. Some of the details were weak, but it flowed nicely and while the ending could have used a bit more detail and expansion it was a good read.

I look forward to more of your stories.

It was great that you took a plot line that normally would be full of drama and pathos, rage, anguish and thoughts of revenge and distilled it down to a pithy core.------Pt. 1---- Rich virgin becomes call girl, meets loves and then marries schlub, six months married she goes back to being a call girl, 30 months later he finds out. She seeks counseling from "john" named Rolf she's seen been with maybe a total of three weeks over the course of seven years.

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She barely resists Rolf. Why? The underlying point seems to be she both loves sex and also now we find out also loves Rolf -- and perhaps also loves a few other of her regulars. Rolf convinces schlub to talk to wife. Silly conversation follows. Oh, I love you. I also love variety. And by the way I also love a few of my regulars ... including the guy who convinced you to talk to me. Schlub leaves. Wife cries then donates escort money to charities and takes fatal overdose.

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At this point you have a revenge drama. It's a little frothy, but not too bad. Love found, Love lost, perhaps(?) some redemption in that she gives her money to charities and

commits suicide. Personally, I think the suicide is an out, an easy solution rather than dealing with the problem. But, in any case, the story has followed a predictable pattern and ended at its destination. But it goes on.

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Client Rolf inexplicably discovers Jenny, whisks her off to hospital and saves her. Jenny is grateful. Amnesia sets is and she forgets out her soon to be ex-husband. Is whisked to America. Marries Rolf. She takes over his business as his health falls. They have 13 years of happy marriage.

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GAK! Why should Jenny have happiness? Why should Rolf trust Jenny without a lot of soul searching and therapy on Jenny's part? Why do I give a damn about Rolf? He's a cardboard cut out and not a terribly likable one at that. The perspective of the first part had been mostly from the poor schlub Jim's perspective but now, suddenly, he disappears.

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Rolf dies. We are informed that ex-husband Jim has been doing well in business. He runs into a woman in New York, a new woman, a woman who happens to have just lost a husband named Rolf -- get it, huh? They hit it off famously. Clearly love ensues. Music swirls. Fade out.

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Gak, Ack, and Ugh! Woman earns redemption through the passage of time, and not any particular action on her part? Ex-husband knows that wife will be faithful because maybe she was faithful to the second husband. And besides she dresses well and is rich and after all it's the end of the story and from her perspective so why doesn't he give her a happy ending?

What was the story about? Whose story was it? If it was Jenny's story all along -- which is hard to believe because we began in Jim's perspective -- isn't this a story about the search for love, loss, redemption and then new love? If it is then her misery seems to be about on the level of a bad stomach flu. Oh yeah and she tries to commit suicide. Okay, bad stomach flu followed by bad suicide attempt. Loss and redemption all taken care of in the time most people would have tried to lose 5 pounds on a diet. 'bout the same thing though. Anyway new love is taken care of just by means of paperwork. Rolf saves beautiful younger woman, divorces wife, and has new young sexy wife for his last years. What a prince of men! What a lucky, deserving gal is Jenny for getting the noble Prince Rolf.

Now if it was Jim's story, why does he suddenly disappear from it. Why does he get back with his ex-wife? Why is there not a single peep from his perspective at the end?

All this adds up to is that it felt like part 2 was written on auto-pilot. In part 1 we do get some emotions, but in part 2 because the plot is pushing the characters hard, we get plot summaries rather than dialog. Personally, I would recommend you rewriting this second part. If you don't I would recommend that you work harder in staying in the present and staying firmly rooted in all the characters messy emotions and messy outcomes toward the second half of your stories.

and I thought the ending was well thought out(whatever others may think).No way could he go back to the whore,the only think that I thought was unrealistic was her giving all her money to charity,this is very,very farfetched.I too enjoyed reading the comments on part one,especially from the person who said stupidity kills,he is the living truth that gives the lie to that statement.Keep up your writing you are very good.

I liked it.

Overall, I enjoyed it. I actually liked Jen more than Jim as characters. However, one of my issues with your story, and it is an issue with several like this, is that few husbands and wives really know so little about the other's business. It is a natural part of supporting your spouse. While I understand denial, a man as intelligent as you tried to paint Jim would have found some issues. I also felt that the ending, where your two characters got back together was forced. It was really too short, had little lead up to it, and just did not flow from the story. The part about her going with Rolf did make sense to me and I though was a nice touch. It was a good story, but missed being as good as it could have been with just a small amount more effort.

she was a casual selfish whore, unsympathetic to how her husband would feel, or did feel about her cheating.

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and she ends up happily married for 13 yrs to one of her johns in the USA. then after she get back with her husband - <B>i think a LOT of readers didn't get that</b> - he was with Rolf's, the john, widow = the ex-prostitute/cheater.

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<i>meanwhile, the poor husband went with no one for 13 YEARS! after she destroyed him. </i>

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so she, the cheating whore, gets to be happy for 13 yrs while he husband, the victim, gets to be unhappy for 13 yrs.

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lame.

didnt make up for all that fucking he missed... a gtreat story but im afraid i still couldnt take her back even 14 years later ...at 40 shes now getting to wheere she will be old in another 10 years ...why not have a 30 years old instead..jim should have had the next 14 years to just fuck other women asshe stayed married maybe ...then maybe him at 50 and her at 40 could then settle down on an equal basis...he used his money to fuck women while she made money marrying men with money...now at 50 he can retire and him and jenny can now have those kids ...so he can make them rich at 20 when he dies when they are so young...and dear ole mom will be 60 so maybe she wont live so long either....good story yes and yes i can see him still fucking her ...i could have seen him fucking her as one of his stable for the whole 14 years but then he may never have gotten back with her as then she wouldnt have the money she does now plus she would have still been a whore without those 14 years of staying faithful to one man...oh well a story as you say wish them piece at least

the saddest are: It might have been." John Greenleaf Whittier

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Did I love the story? No, not really, and I love reconciliation stories. My problem is that Jenny never really changed and I feel so sorry for Jim. I never agree with the "cut off their tits and boil 'em in oil crowd" as one of my favorite writers once wrote, I don't agree with them now.

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I don't have a problem with Jenny being happy and getting past her time as a prostitute, but she didn't! When confronted with blackmail she "chickened out" she didn't show character or that she had changed. Even in her epiphany about not bedding Rolf, all it would have taken was a gesture.

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At heart she's still a whore, and I don't say that as a term of derision. She still doesn't have a problem with having sex with men for profit.

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I think that's realistic as the author has written it. (and written very well by the way, or I wouldn't be actually thinking about the characters.) The author gave a pretty good account of a person with weak morals and emotional problems who got sucked into prostitution. He showed her as dealing with some of those and getting on with life, but not all of them, there's the rub.

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He did NOT show a woman who a normal man would want. Then again I'm not sure Jim was normal. But, let's say he is. Let's assume that he did get married (during the years she lost track of him) had a couple of kids and then lost a second wife to some horrid illness or traffic accident. Is this woman with her character someone he would want to stand in for a much loved and missed wife?

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I'm sorry Britease, you have not made Jenny into someone I would want around any friend of mine. As I said, I love reconciliation stories, but I need to see evidence that she's changed, not that she just no longer "needs" to prostitute her body, or realizes just how dangerous the life of a whore is, or just places a husband's feeling above the rush she got from being on the game.

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Please, give me another chapter to show me that the woman has developed a sense of morality and some character and is worthy of a nice guy like Jim!

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Oh, BTW, I do think you did a good job of redeeming Jim's stupidity. I don't know that someone who had never met a call-girl would have recognized her trade either. Meeting a business man you didn't know at an upscale hotel for a working dinner isn't out of line these days.

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I do think Jim would have needed plenty of time to get past what she'd done to him, although 13 years is a bit much. However, I have to agree that if he's just been sitting around waiting I don't have much respect for him either. If he hasn't been able to get past her then he's pretty pathetic. As I said I see him as having married and had children, and been very happy. I don't see a second divorce because that would have left him too far behind Jenny on the happiness scale(who had a great 13 years with a man she learned to love.) Jenny forgot all about Jim, I hope he forgot all about her too. I love reconciliations, but the scales ought to balance too.

As a story, this one wandered a bit too much as it shifted perspective, but I see that you identify with Rolf - likely you're a client yourself, then - and thus wanted to construct a happy ending for what might in the lingo be a representation of your real or imagined ATF. I actually know a few such ladies who have married into real wealth - and at least one was not only an escort but a true slut. But most of course don't and the sad reality is these women are far more likely to be involved in child custody disputes in which their profession becomes a nightmare.

shining up a pile of SHIT is still still

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ITEM 1Jenny the walking Vagina says well "I PRETENDED to be a virgin on our wedding night and to me I was..." and the funny thing is JIM did NOT react to that! JIM says OK...

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ITEM 2 WHY does Jenny gets years and years of sexual happiness lying her ass off about being a whore to JIM while dating him and after Marriage... then years and years of happiness being married to Rolf?

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where are her consequences? where is her suffering?

JIM never even told HER parents or his / her friends.

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Crying for a few days and looking like hell with puffy eyes after this sort of massive deceit and loathing is uncovered by JIM is just NOT sufferring.

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ITEM 3... Jenny fucks score of men before she met JIM... while dating JIM... and after married to JIM. She later marries ROLF and now she can keep her legs closed?! That can only mean ONE thing... SOMETHING inherent about JIM on a subconscious level convinced her that she can cheat and whore around.

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ITEM 4 Jenny cannot figre out why JIM will NOT deal with what Jenny is... but Rolf can. Not until ROLF points out the issue.

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Scientists havent invented a Negative Number Low enough to coverage the TRUE value of this wretched vile piece of crap that this "author" has put out.

She learned how to really love a man and then

went for the third round with Jim. Basically they had everything and no problems any more. She was lucky that the BGerman did not pass her an STD or get her pregnant.

I still feel that a person with her education could not have been caught so far off base.

As you said, many won't like the ending, so take them with the grain of salt. She (and her sins) were obviously very different than the usual in the LW section. I liked her anyway (as long as I'm. not Jim). Believe it or not, there's room for happy endings in this world. Continue writing.

You are the author, so you can write the ending of the story anyway you want,however; remember the spot Jim was placed in because, Once a Cheater always a Cheater. He even gave her the opportunity to tell the truth to him and she could not do so even after she had been discovered. I feel she got more than her just reward and it would not have hurt the story if the German had taken her home as a playtoy. If you think this is the ending to this story or the way it would really end in real life, then you are full of it. lol

I am very fond of retribution and reconciliation type stories. Forget the retribution; this story gave me everything I needed. Great job!

Constructively - Loving Wives is measured differently than any other venue. The emotions are more volatile and higher on average.<P>

It is also a good spot to start and make mistakes as it is highly read and commented on. Plus if the readership senses a degree of self respect in a main character then that indicates that the writer deserves it also - so a degree of latitude on the harshness meter is normally granted - well except for the Hairies of the world.<P>

Basically if you can turn down the volume on Hairies speaker to a low roar he often times takes issue properly but crassly and crudely - so much so that his message is lost in anger by the sender and the receiver.<P>

Writer - while not your first story certainly the most difficult to date emotionally as well as the complexity. You did reasonably well in the opening of Ch. 2.<P>

His actions were reflective of life and reality. He pushed away the selfish pain provider. But after that you more cared for her - the grossest of planned offenders. However sales fell flat as while we sometimes cheer for the underdog -- not here as she deserved to be the one in jail serving time so consequence and justice could purge her.<P>

That didn't happen because you glorified her future with both love and money.<P>

Then you floated him back the poor sick cowless braindead good guy who must have decided that he hadn't been shat upon in 13 years so what the hell. Or so it seems.<P>

Her fairy tale didn't have any glow to it as it seemed contrived and his tale of woe was to roll forward under who knows what conditions and end except perceived pain - again.<P>

But making mistakes isn't always spelling and punctuation it is growing enough to not make the same mistakes again and again.<P>

I think your heart is in the right place and the respect is there as hoped for - albeit a little misplaced and a lot contrived.<P>

I selfishly hope you write more - and chose to grow - to depict life more realistically. Don't make the mountain of disrespect so high that emotionally we want blood if there isn't to be much consequence or he flops belly up for more.<P>

Enough. Thanks writer.<P>

With Regard

So much time, so much money, so many chances. Wife does ALL the wrong things, then when its time to try to square things with man she loves she manages THEN to tell the truth and say everthing wrong you could possibly say wrong (who would have guessed Jim didn't want to hear his wife say the others may be better at sex or have bigger tools than him, or she loved pulling a train for sports teams for days on end?), and then she throws the money away (ever hear charity begins at home? If the author had a brain she'd have tried to give the money to Jim to try to soothe his pain and keep him from leaving for 13 years). Then she marries some asshole who is at the source of all her problems, Rolf the John, who amazingly, dumps his wife for her well used, cheating ass! Rolf's loved Jenny for years: WHY? She can shoot ping pong balls with her twart 100 yards? WHY? WTF, ONE BORN EVERY MINUTE!!! Next, wife is so stupid she can't even get suicide right! Rolf charms everyone; Jim even "respects" him (gees, what a wimp Jim, hit him with your purse at least). Somehow, NOW she can go straight with omniscient Rolf (LOL, if he was, why'd he want her, LOL), becomes a captain of industry with his guidance thereby gaining respectability, and charms her way back into clueless Jim's waiting heart. Sadly and amazingly, author is trying to depict real people, who are not world class MENTALLY CHALLENGED.

I admit that, until I read the comment of Anon/Kalifornia,

I indeed had missed the point that she was talking about herself as being the new woman for Jim. It wass all in the last few words. I guess I skipped those as I was thinking to much about the characters and the life that could, should (?) have been but was not. If life is, at least in many cases, a process of learning, growth and success, but of loss and sorry too, it can indeed also be one of acceptance, forgiving and determination to do better a next time. So I stick to my prior comment that this process for them was just one of those facts where "it was not ment to be" for a long period of time. Introspection and understanding may have paved their way for the rest of their lives. *** Reading chapter 2 again made me also aware of another thing I "missed". How could a neighbour know Rolf's telephone number ? Was her secret life not so secret after all, or was her neighbour somehow related to the agency ? It could have been more believable if she herself had called Rolf to say goodbye. Whatever, I did not consider it that important at the time since I was more concentrating on the persons. *** I still think this to be an excellent story, much better than a lot of others we see on this site. G.Belgium

why people --- why authors have to create characters --- to be that stupid?

I thought the story was perfect love betrayal and every thing in between and it still had a happy ending it shows that some times you get lucky in life and you shouldn't take what you have for granted keep up the good work

I agree with the author about one thing at least; the comments are sometimes more interesting than the story! Some readers get very upset because they put themselves into the "what if?" portions of the story and feel they would react quite differently, so it is not a realistic story. But all one need do is examine the lives of some of the Hollywood stars/starlets and amazingly, some of those individuals behave like Jenny. Anna Nichole Smith was a prime example. Look at Richard Burton and Elizabeth Taylor and how many others each was with (Richard Burton even had affairs with Marilyn Monroe and Lana Turner). We know some movie starlets "sleep their way to the top" which is simply another form of prostitution. The opera "Carmen" is about a soldier who falls in love with a prostitute, although he at least knows up front what she does for a living. Human behavior runs the gamut and with 4.5 billion souls on this planet, half of whom are adults, the odds are that similar events as depicted in this story have actually happened somewhere! One other thing in real life; good guys sometimes are hurt and finish last, and people deserving of punishment by so-called divine judgment frequently get away with their transgressions. So it is not implausible that Jenny finds happiness and Jim ends up miserable for 13 years. Studies have shown that women working as prostitutes do so for two primary reasons -- the first is they need the money (whether it's to pay for drugs or something else is a separate issue), and the second is they like sex a lot. I sometimes wonder (if this story does portray real life) if Jenny would have resisted going back to escort service if Jim had knocked her up right away. Pregnancy and child-rearing might well have given her something with which to avoid boredom -- a lot of very hard work! My sexist brain thinks "barefoot and pregnant" might have made a big difference here . . .

I found your story most enjoyable. Keep up the good work.

Okay story, I have said before I don't believe that a prostitute can really have a heart yes they can probably meet and become fond of someone but to fall in love with someone to have feelings for someone is not a good idea. Jim should have moved on, Jenny did move on and very successfully. Now being an old romantic what I would have liked to see was Jim give Jenny the choice of stopping what she did giving the money away and cutting off all ties from her previous life if and only if she could do that would reconciliation be even thought of. If the writers purpose was to make us feel sorry for Jenny it didn't really work, where did it say that she had a hard time, by contrast Jim did appear to have a hard time. And just going back to their parting did Jenny really fight that hard to stop Jim going not really she let him go with just a whimper. The fact they met up 13 years later which makes him 50 and her 40 okay that still leaves time to have some sort of friendship and although I don't really approve of what she did I do wish them luck. I guess even Ex-hookers need some one to love and spend their old age with.

Anyway well written story you got us all thinking and that's what a story is supposed to do.

Like the author, I couldn't help but like Jenny. Jim made the right decision, as did Rolf. I liked when she threw the German's stuff out the window. I usually don't like reconciliation stories, but in this case it kind of made sense.<p>Too bad she squandered her child bearing years, though - unlikely to have any kids after 40. I think that was the (only) mistake Jim made - he should have knocked her up about 5 times right after they got married - she would have had neither time nor energy for stepping out. Bobby Riggs was right...

So Jenny grows up after her life changing event (her rape by a client) and Rolf makes a honest woman of her. What makes no sense is why Jim would wait 13 years for her? What changed except the passage of time? If Jim was this successful businessman what kept him from finding love after Jenny? Lastly, why should Jim trust Jenny again?

This was a well-written fantasy, though more a fairytale to me. I guess as long as Jim does everything to please her, she will be the doting wife. She now has all the financial security she could ever want and as long as she is happy the past will stay the past. <P>She can now just say “Oh well we all screw up from time to time and that is in the past so all should be forgotten.” Things are not forgotten, forgiven maybe, but forgotten is not real just put away in the back of the mind.<P>The characters in this last chapter are so uninteresting and underdeveloped that this fairytale leaves me ambivalent.<P>You write well, but this story was not really that entertaining to me. Oh well, you cannot please everyone. Keep writing<P>PT

Was this story suposed to be humor and we just didn't get it? You limies laugh at the strangest stuff. 2 things just get funnier the more I think about them: Jim "RESPECTS" the guy who's been fucking his wife for money for years. LOL. If Rolf knifed Jim's Mom, would Jim build him a statue? If Jim pimped out Rolf's MOM, would Rolf respect Jim (we know Rolf doesn't respect his wife). What would it take to actually get you mad as hell, Jim, run out of Grey Poupon? Then, Rolf dumps his wife for the psycho, suicidal, nympho whore Jenny. Cause he loved her for years? He doesn't even know her outside of a hotel room? WTF?? Was this some idea from a Benny Hill or Montey Python sketch we just didn't get? Spam.

going down the wrong path into the deep

What a dim wit.

that the writer tries to explain his story at the beginning and end of the story. Tell the story and let the reader decide what they think. It seems strange to defend yourself in expectation of criticism yet to come. Put it in the essay section.

Ch. 2 turned from Jim's perspective to Jenny's point of view and lost all of its tension. Ch. 1 had tension written all over it because it dealt with Jim's emotional turmoil as he discovered his wife's 2nd career. In the author's quest for reconciliation at all costs Ch. 2 simply became an unemotional rendering of Jenny's triumphant rehabilitation.<P>The story would have been more interesting if the author had continued to tell it from Jim's side of things. We were told very little about Jim in the 13 years that passed before they rediscovered each other. He was successful in business but what about his personal life? Did he have relationships? Did he continue to long for Jenny? Did he ignore women for 13 years or did he bury his anger by seducing every women he could find and then discard them after one use? Jim's emotional state in the first chapter is what drove the story and by ignoring Jim in part 2 the reader was treated to only half a story.<P>Nevertheless, The Bank Statement was very entertaining and quite interesting. I hope the author continues to write in the Loving Wives genre.

Well done story and I like the way you handled the ending. P;ease keep submitting. There are very few cheating wives stories anymore and many of the top authors are gone or often have turned to other categories and you bring talent and a generous spirit to this category.

Imagine, after 13 years, he finally gets the cheating, faithless whore back! My, how that touches the heart. The story was well written, but the plot is too ridiculous for words. I can't imagine what kind of man would remarry a whore (I don't think the label is mistaken, since she laid for pay,) and surely in 13 years he would have had to have found a much better and honest woman, one deserving of trust and respect. There are a few cornerstones to any good marraige, and this story represents none of them...more's the pity.

worthless filthy fucking whore and dogshit for a story; please quit writing

I like it ,a very good story. Keep writing and don't let the nay sayers run you off. Mike from Texas

up being a whore. But her second husband whom she supposedly was fond of but not in love with, she could give up being a prostituting whore for. The she goes back to her first husband? The premise of her being a whore and not being able to give it up but for her second husband whom she idd not love as much she could give it up. Oh yes, I see split personality disorder. I cant imagine being married to a whore! The dangers, the risk, the potential abuse, disease, STDs, AIDS, and even death. How does one go out in public and be used publically by men, then appear in public with your husband and be in the role of a conservative wife? It isnt really possible! The entire marriage from the meeting, to the virgin act, to the job, to the long marriage was all a lie. She deceived and betrayed the man she was supposedly in love with every step of the way. She may have stolen him in lust but she was the worst possible thing that could have happened to him!

Somebody already noted the big hole in the story: she could not stop cheating - prostituting - herself while married, but then takes an "old" john and marries him and is faithful for 13 years. Explain that. You did not clearly do that in the story. She just stops for Rolf whom she did not love, but could not stop for James, whom she did love. Nope,that just does not make sense, unless of course she is lying in the story and she did skip the light fantastic while married to Rolf and, unlike Jim, he did not care that she cheated on him. A liar is a liar ...

Your story was very well written with wonderful character development. You have a way of making the reader feel like they know each character personally, and you do it in a very simple and uncomplicated manner. The responses you have gotten from the readers is an excellent indication of how good a writer you are. Any story that can create such strong emotions in a reader, even if they are deceitful and nasty, indicates how well you achieved your objective in your story. Good Job!

- Ron -

It seems easy to condemn with a black & white finality the actions of others. We cry for mercy for ourselves and demand justice be done to others.

Realizing that this is only a story, I am more responding to the comments made. Your vitriolic attacks show more of your fear than moral indignation.

This story resonates with my life, and I was glad for the ending. Hope is a very precious commodity when your world has died. May your world never reach that level of pain.

Simon

She is a whore while married to a good man then marries a john and is true to him? You are a very warped person! The way you wrote this the husband is nothing more than her pimp!

But then again my wife once told me, women will eventually own the world, and the sluts will be the richest. They marry rich men who die and leave them money, then they marry older men with more money, and it grows............

It was pure crap. She's a whore, a whore who got married and kept her poor husband in the dark. You should have let her die. It would have been easier. But no to add insult to injury she can get married to one of her clients and be true to him....a prostitute, a whore, who is faithful to her client but cant be true to her husband. What a crock!

Then she sucks him in again?!?! He must be retarded!

I like the forty year old Jenny who has grown up and discovered her mistake and also discovered that the "Charge" she got from being an escort could be diverted into more constructive actions like running a businness. She was lucky a man like Rolf was there for her and willing to look past her past. Jim did the right thing to leave her and 13 years later the right thing to love her still. She was not that woman escort. She was grown up finally and not looking for the momentary thrill. Time does heal and maturity opens doors. For those who want to burn the witch, I hope you never make a huge mistake that might need forgiveness. Your own attitudes and condemnation do not allow for change, are too black and white and seem unwilling to look at in a "case by case" manner. She was not that escort anymore and never would be. He had earned happiness and if he could find it with her, then more power to her.

sorry, but thats crap and everyone knows it. it took leaving jim to make her understand that shes cheap and a whore!? are you kidding me? men, and possibly women pay to have sex with her and for the most part dont give a damn about her. you like her and couldnt completely get rid of her? whatever, she may think shes changed but im not sure and yes i know that sounds harsh but ppl rarely change and also, why did you put so much into jennys story? i wanted to know what happened to jim bc i coundnt care less how she became more than a trophy wife. you write such interesting stories and then i come across this crap.

What a story! This is only the second one of your stories I’ve read but if the rest are like this I can’t wait to find the time to read the rest of them. Your characters are great and it’s obvious you really understand behavior. A lot of authors are great observers of behavior but I believe you really understand it. At least if this story is any indication. I’m a Behavioral Psychologist and early in my career I worked with male and female adolescents. You had Jenny’s character nailed. Of course, one could have made the case that she was sexually abused as a child rather than just neglected. The behavioral patterns as an adult can be quite similar. Unlike most I don’t judge people because I do realize why a person acts the way they do and I must say that your story is so tight that it could almost be written from one of my case studies. Another thing I admired is a comment you made after chapter 1 that lead me to believe that you even understood why the readers commented the way they did. I also love reading the comments. They tell me so much about a person. Take the anonymous gentleman (99% sure he’s male) that commented just before me. It’s obvious that he really has no understanding of behavior at all and therefore has very little tolerance for people that behave outside his narrow parameters of acceptable behavior. I don’t think he is a bad person, just uneducated when it comes to behavior. The ones I really get a kick out of are the ones that tell the author that no way would a person ever act that way. Like they know what they are talking about. Thank you for a very realistic story about relationships. The soft touch at the end was nice but as you’ve probably guessed I don’t usually see that with the clients I counsel. Excellent, I’m impressed but then I don’t think people get enough recognition for their accomplishments so I tend to make sure I tell them. Great Writing

the manner in which jim learned was not going to mean a continuation of the marriage. rolf knew who she was, really and what she was. business and not a bad sort. there was just the instant demise with the statements and facts. and life goes on

who thinks up these stupid plots? Writers, try to keep it believable at least.

keep it believable. Whether a story seems believable depends on the life experience of a reader. Too many Lit readers lack a perspective that can only come from an open mind and experience in life. Oh, and self confidence. The "kick-em-to-the-curb" crowd just lack confidence in themselves to weather such a storm as did Jim. Notice that the men who could look past Jenny's past were both older: Rolf and the 13-years-later Jim I find it quite believable, and the author built his characters to make it so - to those who have thge ability to see. Excellent job, Britease! Give us more. Rich

go ballistic if I found my loving wife was a whore and had been the emtire time I had known her. Sorry Rich that isnt a storm and it isnt lack of self confidence. It is very much the opposite I know my self worth and I have known several whores not professionally. Many of whom would have married me. But sorry folks the constant fear of diseases, physical danger, and eventual destruction of ourselves and our marriage isnt worth the love of a whore. Rich old man you have great self confidence and self esteem you go get what you deserve in life a whore for a wife. Why not do the simple thing call the internal revenue and the police and have her removed from your life Britease?

So Jenny the whore destroys Jim's life, but gets rewarded for it by marrying one of her rich john's that she cheated on Jim with for so many years. Hard to believe you could think that some people wouldn't like this ending. I mean it's so believable and what a nice touch making her filthy rich at the end. Nice to see justice was served to her in this story. What a joke!

You have talent as a writer but your story plots terribly weak

maybe if she had offered to get every woman tha tworked for the agency to fuck him all he wanted she could have still had him around to fuck maybe not be married to but fuck ...that is what she should have done ...because as the hubby of a wife like that i would have taken that 175 thousand and used it to fuck every woman that agency she worked for had andf if any was left over i would have went through the women of other agencies till i ran out of her money....if she could earn it i could spend it ..but i could not have stayed married to a bitch like her tha twould lie to me like that from the first day we met....thing is at his age he could still find a woman to have kids with and like his ex use her money to st5ill fuck many women ...why not try this again and make a good story this time

This just doesn't rate any score at all, simply because of the pathetic way you made the husband look in dealing with being decieved and married to a whore. It was if you are protecting the lieing whore instead of her being punished for the way she cheated him out of a rightful marriage. I am begining to definately not want to read any more of your shit!!!!

This story is lacking in several areas. Most importantly, you abandoned Jim in the 2nd chapter. The question of how she would fill watching Jim with another woman wasn't addressed.

I don't know hat the others are rambling about. This stuff is very realistic. In fact, if you told me that this was based on a true story, I would have no problems believing it. Well written, and thought-out. You really tapped in to the angst of the feminine side of this story. She knew she had thrown a good life away, and the moral was a good one; honesty with your spouse is the only way to ensure a happy and healthy marriage. Had she dealt with her problems at the beginning and been up front with her husband, she might have had a much happier life. Yes, she ended up marrying and loving Rolf, but Rolf was just A love, not THE love of her life.

C'est la vie, c'est la guerre, cest la pomme de terre!

the distance helped soften the anger,and give each opportunity they needed.Old wounds may heal but never completely forgotten, scarring.

Very believable story. Real emotions, real life suffering and redemption...

The ending kept popping up in my mind, like I had missed something. I had. I love happy endings!!! You go Jenny!!

One Anonymous says,

"Garbage in, garbage out, no, it doesn't end like this, I hunt Jenny down and take her to a secluded forrest and gut her alive, all the money in the world will not erase what she did, I'm judge Dredd, judge, jury and executioner. And no, I would not feed this cunt to the animals, that would be cruel to the wildlife, just burn what's left of the filthy cunt."

This scene plays out in serial murders all to frequently. Thankfully there are some authors who speak to the other end of the spectrum of humanity.

Jim was from a more naive world and couldn't deal with the persecption of his wife cheating or whoring or call-girling or whatever. Rolf was more world-wise and had no problem with her past. He knew Jennie to be the person underneath.

It is surprising to me how many readers/commenters here on Lit equate sex with character. It isn't even morals, society imposes morals on people.

Polynesians had one set of mores before the missionaries came and imposed another. This is one of the few stories where I found myself liking nearly all, if not all, of the characters. Well, all except that asshole German.

Size 14 dude - your are completely pathetic. Your man-hating bull shit is so over the top and pointless. Who are you trying to impress this time? Go back to sucking cock along with your "mancelt" alias.

I've come to expect a good standard when I read one of your stories. With 'Bank Statement' you have raised the bar even higher. Congratulations, it is a relief that you have been a prolific author, please keep up the good work.

I just hope that your wife does that to you then maybe you'll under stand what a load of crap that your trying to pedal off as writing Story sucked, would have been better to have the BITCH died with the remorse that she felt. then it wouldnt have been so bad

A second story of the same shit, but then why not the same author with the same mind set in the demascalation of men! I won't bother with anymore of your crap in the future.

Rolf took off. Rolf lived in America. Rolf would have no way of knowing any of this. Well, he MIGHT but you need to establish HOW!

I'd also like to hear a bit of remorse from her, even as her life goes perfect. How exactly does a girl with even a good education but no business experience suddenly become a superstar?

It would also have been nice if she mentioned that she used whatever this business empire was (undefined) to overtly or covertly funnel some work to her husband.

Lastly, there wasn't any mystery. The first date told me everything I needed to know.

The final date for her was so incredibly over the top and totally unrealistic. Even a low class service has a man to guard the girls. I don't know how protected the girls are on that level, but certainly she could have said "Sir, if you don't desist, I'm going to report you to my firm. The LEAST of it will be you being cut off and it gets worse from there."

I would have prefered her trying to get back into the life, but the stress took her confidence and some of her looks. Having some clients less then appreciative of her as a play toy. 'Not up to snuff'. And when she's having sex, the emotional issues keep her from enjoying it, taking the pleasure of the life out of her. From what I understand, girls of that profession are good for about 5 years. She was already pushing hard against the expiration date.

...and simply forgot to tell you i loved it.

i think i should mend that error. thank you

for a sweet and lovely story.

You did a wonderful job of writing Jenny as a basic life-support system for her Cunt. She was perfectly devoid of any redeeming qualties what so ever. Always love reading your stories and your new one is also great!

i don't get how you right these stories about how she turn out rich after she was a fucking hooker. she is married and fucks everyone for money and she's the winner.

I enjoyed the overall read but had several problems with it. First, Jenny is a whore. OK, no problem. But she is lying to her husband about it, BIG problem. It is impossible to have a full relationship with someone when they are lying to you at such a fundamental level. And yes, such a deception means you are morally a bad person. You are dishonest with the person that means the most to you. Also, a woman that understands men so well that she is a very successful escort has no clue how much it will devastate her husband if he finds out about her little business? She is clueless until Rolf points it out to her. Really?

Next, it's nice that Rolf rescues her a la Pretty Woman but then she becomes a superstar for his company. "It's so easy that even a whore can do it." Again, really?

Finally, Jenny finds love with Rolf but her rich and wonderful husband is unable to find another woman to replace her? He waits for her for 13 years? Is she an honest person now? Pathetic.

when brought upstairs and into the light may get musty. TK U MLJ LV NV

if she is a whore, and she is, hubby should get a pimps share if he has to share the pussy. pimps get 90%.

lets see if the whore like that.

and i loved that virgin fuck part too - now that is a real whore.

is all you shit about dudes that have no balls? you got daddy issues?

This Women is solely a life support systems for her with no redeeming qualities whatsoever. Women like this would probably make good fertilizer being made from 100% pure shit

...you certainly didn't let us down, did you? Let's see, the bleeding whore comes out smelling like a rose in the end, just about par for your course. I so hate when that happens.

CRAP!

Very distressed at the series. Her life was way too good considering what she did and what she was. I believe this was a real story, however, because a good writer wouldn't make this up. In fiction she would have gotten hers in the end, not become the rich wife of an old man (one of her clients) and take over his business.

Just goes to show the state of the world we live in. Too much hypocrisy, too much alienation, too much greed. There's an expression,"The rich get richer, the poor get poorer." That doesn't apply any longer. The new expression is "The rich get richer, the poor work harder and longer to keep the rich richer."

Back to Jenny, she was a disgusting whore who married a man she said she loved and fucked and sucked other men she came to discover she loved also. If this was fictitious she would have wound up broken, broke, alone, homeless and dying of aids.

No more reality folks. Lets stick to fiction. It's easier to digest.

Just one man's opinion.

If you're sure this is a true story then it must be someone you know. A total figment of my imagination I'm afraid. If you don't like the endings, then write one yourself. Thanks for reading and commenting.

You got me. You're a great author and if you've read my profile you'll see why I am cynical with my perception of this tales. With your permission I'd love to add my own take to some of your tales. No disrespect intended. Just a little bit of my revenge I think would spice up things.

Thanks for a honest comment on my sometimes obtuse witticisms.

I hope I used that word correctly.

HA

Hi

Thought I'd make this response public. If you want to finish off one of my stories, then I'd love you to do so. I continually get asked to do a follow up to 'The rose and crown', but can't seem to get inspiration. Maybe try that one. Anyone else out there want to try their hand? be my guest. I'd love to see what other people make of my characters.

I must be slipping a little as I had to read the last part a couple of times to make sure I truly "got it". While it is unfortunate that it took over 13 years for them to re-commit to each other it actually does represent real life at times. Yes, it is amazing what can happen over time.

Thanks for the story as I enjoyed it .

..."How could life have been so cruel to me?" She takes no responsibility for her actions, she thinks she's the victim. How about, "How could I have been so cruel to my husband?" Thank you for sharing your stories with us, both chapters were excellent!

You're a damaged individual, Dude. The Liar gets rich and the victim gets heartache. But all is good in your world because she "rewards" the vic w/some thoroughly used pussy over a decade later.

BTW: You realize you had her remain faithful to her Trick, but not to her Husband? And you brag about how you created this?

...and finally felt compelled to comment. It's a good story. So it's a little implausible here and there. Who cares? Every story on Literotica is a fantasy on some level. And this was better done than many.

It's still a good story. And it's a decent illustration of the idea that some people have to hit rock bottom before they are able to change.

Will Jim and Jenny be able to create a stable, lasting relationship now that they have a second chance? Maybe. I'd like to think they have a decent chance, anyway. Good job.

We need it for Skanks like her. There is heavenly if not earthly justice for us men!

The only issue I have is why would Jim talk to Rolf at all. Rolf was a john for his whore wife. The concept was good, the plot was great. I dont know how it is in the UK but in US depending on the person a gun might be involved.

You could have been more definitive and made it clear that they did get back together. I have known women that were like that only they gave it away instead of selling it. I was in love with one, had left my wife for her then she took off out of the blue on a casual fuck so I moped around for a few days and then snuck back home. My children were happy and my wife seemed happy and has only brought it up one time in a joking way so I got lucky there. We are still together (57 years total now) and I have continued to fuck around. I actually got back with that woman a few months after missing her for over a year. We were both in it because we really liked each other. She finally moved out of town because she said "You are never going to leave your wife". I had just enough class to not say "Been there, done that and how did that turn out?" I still pined away for her for quite a while but she found a man to marry and she would not have to work again so I was happy for her. I found another woman to love 30 years later, we lasted for over 13 years are are still good friends. I offered twice, early and late to leave my wife for her but she refused saying it would cause me and my family too much damage. She won't have sex with me anymore, either. Better a good friend than not a friend. So, I understand this woman in your story. I really liked your story. She should have talked with him early when he started working so many hours and she was yearning. Too bad. I will look for your other stuff. Thanks for writing.

one of your better stories. Jim should marry her and then fuck everything that comes along. Pay back should be a bitch.

I did feel for Jenny is this story and for Jim's predicament as well.

She should of course talked to Jim early on regarding his long hours. What see needed was a bob or start her business ( later on she did Rolf ) and not go back to old line of work.

If she goin to work for her old agency then only do dinner dates not fuck them. Jim was bound to find out in the future as she meets the clients in public venues. Ownership of her line work to Jim was always going to have to happen in thhe future.

She had enough money in the bank to buy into jims company or start her own, what a shame she had lost over 13 years with the man she truly loved !

Alternative ending might be needed.

Also Jim's ego needed to be stroked once his found out about Jenny. Again a situation were she could have given Jim the opportunity to experience some of the other girls from the agency as payback for him.

He should have BTB. A wife being a whore is not excusable. Brittease justifies it by saying he likes Jenny so cant abandon her. Dont know how to read that. Should it be read as cuck talk or pimp talk? Both suck.

Comments I forgot to mention in my original post.

Jenny did not suffer or have many consequences for her betrayal. As Jim was the one who truely suffered.

Jenny marries Jim and cheats, Jenny marries her John Rolf and does MOT cheat and also has 13 years of happiness. Where poor jims seems to only have had 13 years of developing his business, no love, no children.

Jenny never seemed to truely sorry, only sorry that Jim can not understand her problem !

Selfish cow !

How did ne. ighbor know rolfs phone number and not Jim, surely Jim should have found her !

Perhaps Rolf in my opinion could taken under his wing to teach her being in business.

Jenny coins have used her wealth to keep an eye on Jim then when right opportunity came along to get back into his life. Perhaps through a business interest being in Rolfs company.

Also I think Jim needed to take her away from her old work by givi her a child or two to keep her interest in their relationship. There was in the story perfect love, then betrayal. Jim had the hard time, not Jenny.

I could believe in tje story in my version of Jenny goin to the states that Rolf leaves his business to Jenny. Who also ends up with her father's business as well. So Jim and Jenny could have retired earyl in live to live happy ever after !

Nicely worded.

Personally I can see both sides though I myself would land in Jim's

A relationship built on lies never survives.

Sometimes even in spite of all some may try to place to into it.

Thx.

major wimp cuck alert.

I have to believe that the woman lacked empathy. She had to know that what she was doing was wrong, that her husband would not have accepted it. She had a real mental disconnect. And I am not sure that the time apart after the divorce would have changed that. Your rationalization of her "change" and understanding does not really make good psychological sense. She matured? Really? I am not sure her experience would have led to her growing up. This lack of empathy on her part was seriously flawed in her. Your are a good writer and enjoy your stories. I enjoyed this one but cannot quite by the ending.