All Comments on 'The Baseball Trip Pt. 01'

Really liked it.

It is pretty much a five hour drive from Detroit to Chicago unless you are dangerously hauling ass. Normally, driving two hours from Detroit would put you near Kalamazoo (140 miles). with three hours to go. Sincerely, A Michigander

Good Chap 1, looking forward to the rest !!

I like your writing. The story flows well and the dialog works. Well done!

please don't take too long for the next chapter.

Thanks

Great writing, great story. You've made my day.

5* from me.

Hope you can post the rest soon.

great i loved it!! hope you got more

...contributors here, you tell a story where sex acts are integral and detailed enough to be very graphic...but you aren't repetitive or boring. You have characters that actually interact, not excessive in the dialog or long strings of "fuck, fuck, oh fuck me!". Your characters seem to be real people and seem to interact the way people do.

You seem to know just when to move on to the next part, each moment in each scene progressing much like people do in real life.

I almost wonder if you're not writing about real interactions.

Please, please continue!

And Thank. You.

I just finished Part 01 for the first time. Your writing is superb--an utter joy to read. The humor, while never distracting from the plot, adds a measure of real delight to the story-telling. I honestly belly-laughed from beginning to end. These characters are real people; I already like them a lot. The stage is beautifully set for the unfolding of a great story in the remaining parts.Your talent clearly appeals to very many grateful readers. Thank you.

5*

Great buildup, nice light touch to the dialog, falling in love with Sarah.

And turn the water off in the shower, you are wasting hot water.

You managed to take 2 great things-baseball and hot chics- and make a great story! Have to read them all and see how it plays out!

I cant wait until he gets the other two. A couple more days of car masterbation with them, and he will be going crazy. On to the 2nd part.

...talent with words. To make the reader feel and see.

High-class eroticism.

Paul in Oklahoma

Can you leave six stars? No? Well shit! I found myself laughing and enjoying this one. Can’t wait for the rest. Great development. Great lead up. Thisnseries is going to be fun.

Masterfully done.

Spector_Dugan,

WTF, man! There is no way that the parts to follow will be able to match, much less improve upon, this one!! I'm sorely tempted to just say F*ck It and not read any more because I hate being disappointed! LOL!

Awesome job, dude!

X-Man

That was so hot!!!! I can't wait to see what happens next! Five stars and a favorite point!

The build up in this scene is better than any I've ever read. All in all, I think this story and the Florida trip story are amazing. The fact that a huge baseball fan and have at the All Star Resort in Disney multiple times make them even better.

I wish you wrote more stuff that wasn't incest, because they're not my thing, but to each their own

Nice work, Spector. Big baseball fan, so this was a nice treat. Plus, very clever: "The way she said panties made every organ in my body stand at attention. I swear even my pancreas got a little hard." Almost pissed myself.

What a great story, it just carried itself along, building up and up, until the big finale ! The marks of a true writer has been met in this story ! Looking forward to reading more of your works !

Oh wow that was incredibly hot! Sarah sounds amazing and you describe her so well.

I am panting!!

What a fantastic mutual masturbation stories.

I can't wait to read the next chapter!

Your stories are just so damn much fun.

Great story.. Hoping to hear More..!!

Dommasterjim

Such torment and relief!

Super good start to what promises to be an erotic rollercoaster. Very well thought out and written! I appreciate your and your Muse's imagination and abilities to bring it to your story. Thank you for sharing your vision and talents.

Good premise.

But sex was barely OK.

Needed much more enjoying the look of each other.

Neede much more dialog about each other's bodies -- particularly her breasts. And dialog about how sensitive they were.

Four stars -- being generous.

I LOVE THIS SNEAKY COMMENT FROM THE AUTHOR

The questions piled up, like all our suitcases. Was this seat-bound sex goddess just playing around a little bit? In her semi-sleep, did she think I was her oh-so-serious boyfriend? Sarah'd been super-flirty before, so did this mean she was interested? Was my predicament causing me to use too many hyphen-words? VERY FUNNY

ofc they wouldn't fuck in the very first chapter :)