All Comments on 'The Blank Coupon'

Loved this story.

Let's have some more of Carrot.

pete can move on with his life without those two

Anything would be better then living with them

Great story was up all night reading.. It was a regular page turner. Could not stop. Please bring Carrot back....

It started off really good but soon as the sister joined in it went down hill for me. And the club scene was a real turn off. Really good and fun but IMO shouldn't haven't involved the sister or club otherwise it would be a 5*

Please don't continue the story as it will only get silly again

It was a turn off when you involved other peaple

actually, the sister relationship is the Whole story... the son is the device to get the sister in the play.. more Bunny and Carrot!!! and perhaps Pete can he "learned up" a little... this family could just be the best thing for everyone.. maybe drop the master/slave thing, but still a good device here

thanks for the read

This is one hot story . One very hot story .A must read . Thank you and keep going .

Love the story please more on the sister and son what happen next and so on thank for a fantastic story

Great story.

Don't include the dad or other people please it's get out 9f hand then and wrong

Great story. You had a terrific idea and put it in good use. It is one hell of a hot story and I'm glad he didn't really whored his mother out, it would have ruined things a little.

However it is a good stand alone story, no need to add more. The ending is perfect and makes us imagine what we want to happen next.

Please keep writing incest stories, you have a gift.

this was great it was long, good to read and you could feel the love between the three character's good job.

Please a part two or if nothing else another Sub Mom and Dom Son incest series.

Like everyone else, I really enjoyed it even if it went sideways about half way through. I don't want to say much so I don't spoil it for others, but the setup was awesome. And moving forward everything went great as well. When he started offering her to others is where it lost it for me.

Please keep writing tho. I would love to read more stories in this genre.

Really enjoyed your latest work!

And I love that Neil didn't stop fucking his mother even as dad was coming into the house. That is one single-minded kid, focused on blowing his young balls and shooting his mom full of his semen come what may. Neil knows exactly where his semen belongs, and it ain't in a kleenex. It's up the same warm wet cunt he came out of.

I really am. I'm really sorry that I didn't finish your story. I didn't even finish reading page two. It was an awesome story but it lost its sexiness as soon as you described his penis size. The issue is with me, not your writing skill (which is awesome). I've never had a penis smaller than 9", so a 5" penis holds no appeal to me whatsoever. Keep writing because you're really talented!

Potential series with her friend Sarah and her swinger husband joining in the naked action, along with Megs, Neil and Meg's stripper friends.

I loved the story. I hope there is another Chapter now that She has decided what She wants in Life. Great development of Characters and story line.

This was the best story I have had the pleasure of reading on here. Thank you.

hall of famer.

A very good story , that actually dose have a story to it

Wonderful story.. little slow in the start but just got better n better

Oh my, I was hooked from beginning to end! Very well done! I hope there's more coming like this! Thank you!

such an amazing story, definately one of the best, if not the best story I have ever read.

I stopped reading when it got to selling his mother. Started with five stars but with that it's one star.

Great story......would make a good movie, you might want to talk to someone at Vivid or some other company. The story was great I was hooked from the beginning, keep the story going.

Great writer, the story not so much!

You are a good writer but I like some others didnt find the story so hot. For me it was not the sex or incest. It was the demeaning way the main characters treated hubby. By their own accounts he was a good man, good and thoughtful partner and parent and a frequent lover. So who did they listen to, the 40 something single stripper sister/aunt who seduced her nephew and broke up her sister's family. These 3 clowns are so dysfunctional its not funny. It took 3 days for her love to turn to contempt. It took even less for a son to despise his father. So when they divorce are they all going to live on her stripper earnings? Will there be friction between sisters vying for the son's attention? The only 2 normal characters in your story was the husband and the mailman.

You really want to reach an audience, do a sequel and put it in the LW section. Take it from the hubby's point of view. There can be no reconciliation but you don't have to BTB her either. Let him get on with his life and find happiness with sane people.

1* after that. Stopped reading then because sonny is scum of the earth.

Well written, a excellent sexy story....I am now moving on to some of your earlier ones!

Poor dumb boring Pete. All he does is provide for his family while his wife flits through life with no marketable skills other than her libido. I hope Holly gets careless so he can catch her in the act and leave her before she gives him a disease.

verbal and physical abuse, complete lack of regard for her feelings, lack of caring, zero compassion,

equals not erotic.

a complete turn Off

how could anyone behave that way to a person they supposedly love and for whom they have affection?

The mother-son taboo is exciting. The infidelity taboo is exciting. Combining the two is a multiplier effect. I hope in the next chapter they sneak around with dad in the house. The greater the risk the greater the thrill.

Great story line and I really enjoyed it. Those who complain about the characters or their lack of empathy....shut up. It's a story and authors are allowed to push the boundaries of what might happen normally. I think for a short story it was handled very well with the right pace. Thanks for a great read, you were already on my favorite author list and now I will go back and re-read some of your early works. Thanks again for a great read, 5 stars.

Why would anyone in there right mind cook a steak medium well...rare is the way to go.....with that being said, after the 1st 3 pages being read and having my relaxation time, I was drawn to the story. The development of each character and how it built on each other was fantastic. Thankyou for a well done, in depth story. I'm now a fan and will follow. Good job.....

"It wasn't red like a carrot, either,..."

Fyi, carrots aren't red.

Really not much to complain about. Why is the kid in high school at age 19?

Well written, imaginative with just the right amount of detail. Oh to be young again and have a mom like Carrot.

Be sure to write occasional updates to this neat tale.

Well done!

Yeah, I know most come to this site for stories to jerk to off by, but this was SO beyond belief as to be ludicrous and, for me, unreadable by page 3.

Well done. An excellent read. 5*

We liked it, it certainly gave Johnny a few ideas.

Maybe a follow-up?

nice arc, good pacing, varied experiences. Would like to read more about these characters. The husband seems like a good guy. How will Pete square this with his father? How will the relationship of the sisters work out? Is he really willing to sell his mother on the street? How debased is she willing to become?

One minor criticism: in the opening Carrot seems to enjoy sex with her husband. Later on she is clearly dissatisfied by it. My suggestion: you could have built some reason to question the adequacy of the sexual relationship early in the story.

The only bad part is there's no part 2

You know... that went in super not in the direction that i wanted it to go and it was really disappointing. No amount of suspended disbelief will allow me to fantasize that this ends well for all of them.

marriage=destroyed

loving husband=gone

sex slave to 19 year old son=forever

That is some real sadistic bullshit right there.

Your writing is solid overall, but you have to consider which category you're writing in. Some general feedback:

- Throw in a disclaimer at the start on the cuckolding and other general themes as a lot of readers are don't like the negativity in their erotica (as you can tell from a lot of the other comments).

- The foreshadowing with the aunt's gift was a nice touch, but should have been highlighted more at the start to indicate that it's a main plot point. A line from the mother questioning the uncommon "closeness" of the relationship or something.

- Characters were not believable. You did a great job writing personalities instead of describing, but when you write an average happy family, it's a bit jarring when these nice people treat each other like shit all of a sudden. Throw in a few lines about an unhappy marriage, mention cheating in the past, etc. The selling to the mailman was particularly ridiculous.

Overall, it read like a porno, which is fine, and most people are ok with a jerk off story (and your rating can attest to that); but you're one of the few writers that I feel have a real talent for this, I hope to see you getting solid 5s in the future and so did this small review.

Just remember who your audience is and work on those character transitions (Check out stories by youbadboy, they are almost all buildup and transition).

Now we need to see Pete's wild side.

I found this story extremely entertaining. THANK YOU and please continue the story.

I gave you a "5", but you would have gotten "10" if on a scale of 1-10, if you would

have stopped with mom and son after mom got pregnant and they moved away

and married.

You need ad another chapter 5🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟

Just like every other shit story on this site where a wife and mother decides to fuck over her husband because some guy dominates her and treats her like shit, only instead of turning on the man who adores her and works his ass off to support her scummy ass in return for being the whore of some nameless asshole (her boss or a neighbor or of course the tried and true "black guy"), it's her own son and sister who she does this for, and of course not one of these pieces of shit could care less about what it will do to her husband/his father, who never once in this story was presented as neglectful, abusive, or shirking in his husbandly or fatherly duties.

I definetly think think this story can be taken a bit further. maybe not as long as the first, but 1 or 2 more. See how Neil & Megs take to the news and how they can all pursue it further.

Like the mother said in this story more! This story is amazing and very entertaining

Well I spend 3 days reading this and I couldn't stop thinking about it at work... It's so fucking good I masterbate and ended up cumming all over my cubicle

Amazing story. The pace at which the changes in Holly (Carrot) occurred were so well done. Little things, one at a time, became big things. Excellent story very much deserving a 5-star!

It is one of the best erotic stories I have ever read. I chanced upon it and I am so glad I did. Even after the sexually explicit parts were over I continued reading it. That's how engrossed I was!

This is probably the hottest mother-son erotica i have ever read... makes me want to have a son and give him coupons for his 19th birthday ;)

Dear future son,

I ,Kyla Ross, will be your whore forever!!!!

Hahaha

A great story. I found it and started reading it and couldn't stop. I had a panic moment when somehow while on page seven it all went away. I started typing in keywords and found it again. As I said above,this is the best story I have read on here

I need to take exception with the folks complaining about demeaning Peter, etc., etc. This is an act of fiction, first and foremost and one that was crafted with a good deal of thought and development. It has enough legs to break off into some equally fictitious sequels. Another point is that you are searching incest stories people, and in real-life incest situations it isn't all hearts, flowers, kittens and butterflies. Although this story presents a set of fairly unbelievable facets, worrying about Peter really doesn't fit in if you are banging your son. Having been involved in incest I can tell you that even if you don't get caught, there is guilt, discomfort and a particular cloud that stays with those who are involved. I like what rarmons did with this and I hope there is more to come.

I think it would be interesting for Megs to try and make Pete into her whore, and bring the whole family into a group situation.

Wow, a job well done on this story. I was so into reading that I didn't realize I made it all the way to page 8 and was still wanting more! Keep up the great work! Any chance of a follow-up to this?

This is the best story edr!! Loved it a lot a loy!! Awesome sext aassy stupendpusly incestuos and juat about perdect!!😋

This is a great story I just loved it from page 1 to 8. I hope you keep up the great work. :)

"There was no fear, or remorse in them. No, there was only ice cold certainty."

That's not how an actual human would respond to that situation. Instead of boning him, Holly/Carrot should have gotten a kitchen knife and done the world a favor because he's going to eventually start murdering people for fun.

One of the best stories I've read on here. Please keep writing.

An incredible job. The deepest I have lived a character since Frodo. I truly never expected to be so moved by something that started (for me) as a help for a lonely guy away from home in need of release... I will never look at carrots the same way, ha, ha. Bad jokes are the only ones I can make... I'll find my release in the second reading! Keep up the great story telling. You can take it anywhere you want.... Peace.

Great job! Really enjoyed this !

i was waiting for you to write some hypnosis, mind control twist to explain how the mother fell so fast. it doesnt seem reasonable at all. any mother figure would have lost their mind and bitch slapped the kid for that coupon trick, at least without some physical leverage. couldnt get behind any of the characters

i was worried you would ruin the story by making her have sex with another man great job! will there be a second chapter?

I'm sure it all works out in the end, but I just couldn't make it there. I don't care what the reason but how could a son disrespect his mother and his father even if they have a boring sex life. There was no abuse and no one was being ignored they seem like good parents. No, that is just not something I care to read. I will not vote as to not lower the score because I would rate 1 star. What I did read, was good from a writing stand point it's just not my kind of story.

It may have been a bit long but I definitely loved every single word. Hope to read many more like it.

At demanding his mom becomes his whore. Your other works rose from love. Not this one.

But by the end of the first page, my "Idiotic story tolerance" had reached zero, so I stopped reading. Maybe someday, if I suffer a severe head trauma that halves my IQ, while someone simultaneously holds a loaded gun to my head, I may consider reading some more.

Oh, and also, I don't know where you buy your carrots, but on planet earth, carrots are orange, not red.

I get that all these stories you need to suspend disbelief. The writing was done well, I was following and interested but I couldn't get much past him redeeming the coupon, just couldn't read it. It was such a jarring disconnect from how the story went up to that point. Even how the son wrote it as his whore, from what appeared to be a loving family. I quick scanned a couple spots through the story and from the comments I am glad I didn't read further. Apparently he sold his mother? Sounds like the son and her sister are both narcissists.

The husband seems like a good, caring, loving man, satisfied her sexually all of it. Out of nowhere the shit son not only disrespects his mom and buy extension his father too. The mom can't stop herself? Is just a spineless bimbo that follows whatever "big strong man" that tells her what to do?

A blank coupon could have gone a much different way with the son maybe pushing on same latent feelings between them but more of a seduction not an abuse. Or even the other way of the mom seducing the son. I was hoping for anything to indicate he actually had feelings for her past using her as a sex doll and especially her not just rolling over and giving it up. I did read the last little bit where she gives another coupon to be his whore for life. I was hoping for something redeeming, but no it ends as the husband being unfairly treated like garbage even if he doesn't know it and the wife just willingly being the son's slave behind the husband's back.

A. A whore gets paid for sex, the term slut would have worked better.

B. The son trying to sell her was certainly not done with any form of caring in mind.

C. No way would a club allow that on stage and expect to keep its business license. Yes, I know ... Suspend reality.

D. Emotionally, carrot was expressed well, but this was a sad story of small emotionally vacuous people destined for a rusted out trailer.

E. To anonymous... Originally carrots were only orange as a mutation. They came in purple, black, yellow, white, and RED, but rarely orange. The color was considered unusual enough that people paid extra for it. Once that practice began the original colors were mostly bread out of existence in favor of orange, but red continues to exist on planet Earth you un-educated Cretan. If you're going to criticize someone's attempts at literary greatness remember three things ...1) know what the fuck you're talking about if you claim to know more than the author. 2) it takes guts to put your work out there to be ripped apart by the shit stains of society unfamiliar with the difference between then and than. 3) this is a free porn lit site! You're only going to find literary greatness once in ten thousand attempts... Stop acting like the shrew your wife has become and rate these works on their actual artistic merits. And lastly a bonus for the two or three people reading this that can actually name the author of the true literary masterpiece that first used the word shrew.

I didn’t love it, dislike or hate it. Story wise for the most part would normally give it a 4, but because of similar reasons to the previous Anon (3days ago), including A,B,C & D. Among others I would give it a 2/5. So I’m going to average it and give it a 3/5. Wasn’t bad, wasn’t great. Was ok. Keep on trucking

The whole time I was wondering what the father did that was so horrible that they would betray him so blatantly. There was never an explanation. They just really hated him.

The coupon idea is very creative, what is not though is to convert the mother into a cheap ass public whore. If you're gonna go the slut route include waaay more sex descriptions instead of useless dialogue. Also there is too much switching around, you have 2 sentences about sex, then 3 whole paragraphs during the act where they suddenly explain everything and do other stuff. Just finish the act and describe it more. Frustrating teasing writing.

In response to a recent comment below, she was already a whore, the moment that ridiculous "blank coupon" thing got played and she went for it without even a hint of resistance other than a few moments of shouting. After that, whore wife emerged from dormancy and wrecked her marriage, whether her 'boring' (translation: faithful, loving, hard-working husband and father) got treated like shit by his wife and son. Hell's too good for both of them.

Thoroughly enjoyed this story. The character and plot development was good. As a romantic, I greatly enjoy it when a character has his/her sexual and emotional epiphany. To go 10, 15, 20, 25+ years only to discover how he/she has settled for so much less than he/she deserves. It is better to discover passion, intimacy, sexuality, and your erotic sensual being than never. However, a worst crime is to discover yourself and potential life and then lack the courage to seize it. Just because mother was impregnated by her husband when she got married, that is no reason to settle for a less satisfying life. Gave this story 5 stars. Hope a series develops.

I'm with Wash2015 and many of the mostly anonymus comments below. Another one of those stories suggesting that a grown woman feels and believes a boy with a big dick, no scruples and illusions of grandeur is more of a man than someone of her own age who, through hard work and commitment, build a family and life with her. Pfft!

Too many sick remarks below if you don't like the story the why did you read it(blah blah blah). I loved it how a mother became her son's sex slave and found true pleasure with him and her sister!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I would be interested to know how she was going to degrade things with Pete to the point of divorce, then would she "fall" into being a slut again. (A whore gets paid. A slut gets laid.) Also curious to see who ended up with whom/

Stopped reading after he redeemed the blank coupon.

(7/30/2022) This was an enjoyable read. Please don’t mind the idiot trolls, both anon and with accounts. This was well written. Well thought out. I guess haters gotta hate. I think they're trying to compensate for something. Perhaps they’re wannabe writers but can’t write a coherent paragraph unless they're trashing something or maybe they have smaller issues. Very well done, 5 Stars.

I lost a bit of interest when the Aunt showed up.

stopped reading after he told her she would be fucking other men

(Immediately after Neil coerces him mom...)

"Neil, can I describe a fantasy to you?"

"Sure, Mom."

"Many years from now you're happily married. You've a wife you love and maybe a couple of kids."

I may or may not be alive by then."

Your wife gets a letter in the mail. In it, it describes all she needs to do to get away with cheating on you, namely whatever you do to me in the time before your dad gets home."

All she needs to do is give someone a blank coupon or even one specifying what she is offering."

What the fuck do you think *you* are going to be able to do about it?"

Enjoy the first twenty or so years of your marriage waiting for that letter."

I only recently discovered your stories Rarmons and you certainly set a high standard.This was a great story it’s just that I really felt for Pete the husband at the end but hell this is just pure fantasy and not to be taken seriously .Well done