All Comments on 'The Blind Girl in the Rain Pt. 03'

This is better than anything Santa could have brought me and I'll be damned I wish there was more right now. The pacing and progression are just perfect and I really can't wait to see how thing twist for our protagonist before he gets what he dreams about. And it seem there is at least a bit of mutuality there as well. The MVP goes to Heather though for her impeccable support and foresight.

5*+++++++

You have to give us more ... daily if possible ... I need this story at this moment in time in my life ...

I have yet to finish this chapter, so my apologies if this is answered at a later point than where I stooped, but:

Is she fully blind, or partially blind, or is she not blind at all?

I ask because of lines like these:

"She raised her arm and LOOKED at her watch" (emphasis mine)

"Our eyes locked..." (the narrator/protagonist, re he and Heather)

The above quotes would not make sense, if Heather is totally blind. They wouldn't even make much sense if she was only partially blind.

-Rei

No. 04 cannot come soon enough!

If you want to read some quality stories involving blind people read the "Silver" series by Cant54, there is nothing better out there at the moment.

Keep up the good work I really appreciate your story

I have actually read this a couple of times during the process of looking for Pt. 4. Really looking forward for the next chapters...

I found it distracting that although the bulk of the story takes place in the USA (Manhattan), the narrator AND the characters often use UK phrases ("up a treat", "was sat at her desk", "it had just gone noon", etcetera) and words ("meters" rather than "feet" or "yards", etcetera).

Nice romantic build up, the kissing scene in front of everyone could get a bit complicated. Good story and nice writing