All Comments on 'The Book of David Ch. 09'

This story is exquisite and I hope it never ends. Hopefully Brianna plays a stronger role in the next chapter, but really, excellent work.

new players, old favorites, a little deja-vu and it's off to fantasy island. This is a great piece of erotica. Keep it cummin!

very good story, good pace, nice developments but the "love" part seems, at least to me, somewhat strange. They love each other dearly, but find "just sex" in abundance with others is "strenghtening" their relationship.

Wasn't there a time that he felt the need to be exclusive in a loving relationship ? Also, the casual fucking with others who haved 10'ths of lovers on the side never bothers either of them. What about STD's, they all fuck bareback and the women clean up all? As much as I like reading all of the chapters, isn't it time to wrap up the story. As a "twen" he comments to some situtations as feeling old when comparing himself to a teenager. Maybe deep down he is getting tired of his open relation, and looking for something more, something deeper in a relationship, children perhaps, either with Amber or with someone else? Why not getting Cheryse pregnant first and then settle down for good. It would be a nice ending. G.Belgium

Does David keep Amber or does Eric get her? Does David wind up with Brianna? or does he wind up with both Amber and a very Bi Brianna?

Does David help his sister and Cherys by giving her a baby they both want?

Interesting sub-plots and directions this story could still go, hopefully many, many more chapters to go.

I am SO glad that you stated in the first chapter that you knew this was 14 chapters long (so I know it is all done already). I love this story so much, I would go crazy if we had to wait a few weeks/months between installments.

My personal hope: David & Amber stay it through. While I so far love Brianna, and am hoping for a 3-way, I do think David & Amber have expressed to much love to think that they can simply "grow apart" or some such nonsense.

We will see. GREAT story.

You show no mercy for all the other authors on this site. This story is absolutely tops - all the right mix of sex, characters and situation. WOW! KEEP IT UP (so to speak).

Please have some bi guys!

100% still haven't forgiven you for killing her.

Spectator sports...Just a few friends enjoying a friendly get together...Holy Shit! I'm sooooo down with THAT Eric...

but am a fan of the story

I'm truly enjoying the crazy life of David, and I'm trying not to get my hopes up for anything permanent with him and any particular woman.

I kinda like the idea of David giving Cherys and Dani a baby (with Cherys).

I really like the idea of David and Amber staying together throughout the various storms that life inevitably slams us all with.

But like most of your stories other than the erotica there is no substance to them.

Everything is just so casual that nothing seems to have any impact.

They broke up? Who cares lets bang someone else. Raped? Bang someone else to get over it. Gf died? Bang someone else.

If this is judged in terms of just erotic content then it gets a 10.

But if you want to see it in terms of an actual story with real characters then this story is at best 5.

You have amazing talent as a writer. I hope to read something much more serious from you than just a group of ppl fucking. (I think you can do gr8. But it might not interest you to do something like that).

nine!!!!!! Just stop reading it if you don't like it, as you say you don't. But I think if you're still here at chapter NINE!!!!! You fucking love the story. But I gave it a 5 just to be sure to offset your dub ass vote of 1.

Vote 1* for every story rated by THE FAT WHORE (that's what her clients call her) aka BONNIE/VASTIE aka ANON!

in honor of the whore of Lit bonny/vasty/anon

to offset the asshole of LIT's 1 vote

look at my photo, I'm not fat or old. 5 to offset the asshole of LIT's 1 vote

What makes you think we believe that's your photo? Wishful thinking. Gave it a ONE star in honor of that whore bonny/vasty/anon