by StoryTeller07
I love the way your main character John seems to have evolved over time. He is so considerate of "his" women. I can identify with that. Of course, the fantasy part, which is why this is a mind control story, is just that: fantasy, but a pleasant one for me.
Really? That was the ending? After all that bullshit and this is how it ends? What a waste of time.
"Well that was just dumb.
Really? That was the ending? After all that bullshit and this is how it ends? What a waste of time."
Were you a bit brighter, you would have noticed that the previous chapter was eight months before this, and before that, there was a year and a half gap. Hang around and quitcherbitchin.
I'm enjoying this story, please continue it! I know you haven't published here since 2018, but you've got recent stories on Kobo so I know you're not dead!!
Excellent twist to the story with these characterizations. I hope you continue!
Love the whole story. Very hot at times, especially when John had to service Janet. Every young mans dream, but it can get too much. So I give it a 5. Very well written. Thanks
News of my death are just rumours! Publishing on Smashwords as Gary Bingham, Thanks to Litortica for comments and support which has helped me develop my writing, it is most appreciated, Gary