All Comments on 'The Brit Ch. 03: Holidays'

The story flitting around to different scenes on little more than a whim was really off putting. If you were telling it from the perspective of the MC's recollection then you should have put in more narrative explaining this. Daydreaming and then coming back from his reverie into the same situation he left it, creating a steady timeline. Whereas how you've written it here seems difficult to follow and may throw off some readers.

Will next part of your other series be uploaded?

But agree the jumping back and forth in time was off putting. Look forward to next chapter.

Please! We need the next chapter.

Since this was posted at 03-12-2019 sorry to say there want be a 4th